@Espatier Firstly, I'm going to insist on fleshing out the backstory and personality a bit more.
Secondly, I'd like some more specifics on the skills.
Thirdly, I wouldn't put any animals under equipment. I'd put them under other. And, given the setting, I'd find almost any animal (save perhaps a dog) to be a liability in this situation.
And, this isn't necessary, but it would be preferable if you cleaned up the formatting a bit.
Tweak your CS accordingly, and I'll take another look at it.
Name: Common Raptor (Neoraptor domesticus); colloquially called "Grunts", "Scouts", and "Bulletcatchers" by various groups Height: 2.5-3 feet (0.76-0.91 meters) at the hip Length: 6-7 feet (1.83-2.13 meters) Other Information: The first and most popular civilian breed of raptor produced by Udenberg, the Common Raptor live in large, nomadic packs, and possess a female-led hierarchy. The largest part of their diet is composed of smaller prey (mostly rodents), as well as the eggs and juveniles of other raptors, and when hunting alone, they rarely attack humans. In groups, however, they are known to be bold enough to attack even armored vehicles. They are mostly nocturnal, though also show crepuscular tendencies. Due to their size and high reproductive rate, they are often prey themselves to larger raptors. Excellent at jumping (a healthy adult can leap between 3 and 5 times their length without a running start), though their true strength lies in their ability to climb.
Name: Brute Raptor (Neoraptor vigiles) Height: 4-6 feet (1.22-1.83 meters) at the hip Length: 14-16 feet (4.27-4.88 meters) Other Information: The first breed of raptor created for use by military and police forces, the Brute Raptor is, as its name implies, larger and stronger than the Common Raptor. Though slower than their smaller counterparts, Brutes make up for it with endurance and resilience. While all raptors show great intelligence, Brute Raptors are exceptional at following complex commands and figuring out situations they haven't faced before. They are often found in small groups between two and five individuals, though groups of eight or more aren't unheard of when there is enough food around. While physically smaller than females, males tend to be more heavily built, and have brighter plumage on their heads, arms, and tail. Unlike other breeds created for use in combat, their hides are unarmored, making them vulnerable to gunfire. A healthy adult can jump between two and three times their body length, with males being able to jump slightly farther than females due to being lighter. Juveniles are adept climbers, and will often climb trees or other structures to avoid predators.
Name: Lyre Raptor (Neoraptor mimos); colloquially called "Mimics", "Piranhas", or "Flyers" Wingspan: Around 70 inches (177.8 centimeters) Length: Around 30 inches (76.2 centimeters) Other Information: Named for their uncanny ability to mimic sounds, the Lyre Raptor usually avoids humans unless provoked, living in flocks and eating prey like insects, small birds, and rodents (though, like other raptors, are certainly not above scavenging a free meal). There are only two exceptions to this: the first is being near a nest with eggs or chicks; the second is during times of extreme scarcity. At this time, flocks of hundreds of Lyre Raptors will take to the air and attack any animal unfortunate enough to be spotted. Once potential prey is spotted, the flock swarms around the victim in a feeding frenzy, ripping chunks of flesh with their teeth and talons before quickly retreating so as not to be attacked by other members of the flock.
Name: Shogal (Neoraptor chacal); colloquially known as "Jackals", "Skulkers", and "Creepers" Height: 2 feet (0.61 meters) at the shoulders Length: 12 feet (3.66 meters) Other Information: Despite originally being bred as a cheaper alternative to the Jaeger (Neoraptor venator), the Shogal has established itself in the new world as a prolific scavenger. Often living alone or in pairs, they often follow other raptors and take parts of their kills. The only reason this seems to be tolerated is because Shogals will occasionally lead packs to potential prey. While they normally don't attack humans, if they're desperate enough for food, they will attempt to hunt humans that are alone or in a small group. While they're individually very weak, they possess certain compounds in their saliva with narcotic effects, making bitten prey feel drowsy and less likely to fight back. Shogals are poor climbers, but excellent sprinters. Other than leaping at prey (a healthy adult can usually jump twice their body length), they rarely do any kind of jumping.
Name: Jaeger Raptor (Neoraptor venator); colloquially called "Hunters" Height: 2.5-4 feet (0.76-1.22 meters) at the shoulder Length: 12-16 feet (3.66-4.88 meters) Other Information: Originally bred for the purposes of sporting, Jaeger Raptors quickly became the go-to choice for wealthy hunters who wanted a better status symbol than a rare hunting dog. Known for their sharper than average senses (even by raptor standards) and seemingly endless endurance, the breed was one of the first spotted in the wild, where it was able to outcompete many apex predators. Packs tend to be small and closely knit, with the young's care coming first and foremost. If one ever finds a Jaeger Raptor nest, egg, or hatchling, it's best to move out of the territory as quickly as possible, since they are known to kill anything that intrudes on their nest, even if it means tracking down the culprit to the edges of their territory. Females are smaller and more gracile than males, as well as faster. In addition to being incredible jumpers (in terms of vertical and horizontal leaping), Jaegers are adept climbers, with wrists and ankle joints not unlike squirrels or snow leopards; in fact, juveniles can hang on to trees in a very squirrel-like fashion.
Name: Wu Long (Neoraptor draco); usually called "Longs", "Ryus", or "Dragons" Height: 5-7 feet (1.52-2.13 meters) at the hip Length: 17-20 feet (5.18-6.1 meters) Other information: Originally a one-off creation for an eccentric billionaire, the Wu Long entered mass production when it was shown to be highly effective as a sort of bodyguard. Intelligent, undyingly loyal to its alpha, thick, heavy skeleton, skin with enough natural armor to stop a small-caliber round, and the ability to spit a sort of natural pepper spray (as well as its fierce, draconic appearance) made the breed a popular choice for those like celebrities and politicians. Now, they're most commonly seen in major cities, and are known to be considerably aggressive due to competition for food. Unlike most raptors, they are poor jumpers, thanks in part to their bulk, and instead rely on ambush tactics and their caustic saliva.
Name: Wu Lieren (Neoraptor nublarensis) Height: 5.5-6 feet (1.68-1.83 meters) Length: 16-20 feet (4.88-6.1 meters) Other Information: The second breed commissioned by the eccentric billionaire John Wu, the Wu Lieren was conceived purely for the purpose of catering to nostalgia. Its physical abilities and senses are similar to the Brute raptor (Neoraptor vigiles), though they are better at running long distances. Uniquely among raptors, their hands are incredibly dexterous (though incapable of grasping in a manner like a human), allowing them to manipulate items better than other breeds. In another quirk discovered after breeding in the wild, Wu Lieren's skin pattern and color (and, to a lesser extent, skin texture) can vary greatly between individuals, and even between parent and offspring. Aggressive and territorial, the breed seems to enjoy stalking prey. Females are usually larger and stockier than males, while males are usually brighter in color, and possess small crests above and just in front of their eyes. Unlike many raptors of their size, they are astonishing jumpers, able to jump vertically almost twenty feet, and pounce from one spot roughly three or four times their body length.
Name: Jungle Warfare Raptor (Neoraptor vigiles saltus); also known as "Jungle Brutes" Height: 4-6 feet (1.22-1.83 meters) at the hip Length: 14-16 feet (4.27-4.88 meters) Other Information: A subspecies of the Brute raptor (Neoraptor vigiles), Jungle Warfare raptors were bred specifically for military and police operations in environments with dense vegetation. They are faster and tougher than normal Brute raptors, but also much rarer. Among the different subspecies, they are only slightly above the nominate Brutes in terms of jumping ability. Despite mostly being found in tropical locations, they can occasionally be found with groups of Brute raptors in other environments.
Name: Desert Warfare Raptor (Neoraptor vigiles eremus); also known as "Desert Brutes" Height: 4-6 feet (1.22-1.83 meters) at the hip Length: 14-16 feet (4.27-4.88 meters) Other Information: A subspecies of the Brute raptor (Neoraptor vigiles), Desert Warfare Raptors were created for use in arid combat theaters. Though more lightly built than their kin, they possess an armored hide that makes them incredibly difficult to kill, as well as help them to blend into rocky environments. Despite this, their jumping ability is below the nominate Brute subspecies; rather, they usually hunt by utilizing agile maneuvers and ambush tacics. Like Jungle Brutes, they're uncommon outside of desert and mountainous regions, but can still be found with other Brute raptors
Name: Special Operations Raptor (Neoraptor vigiles hashashin); also known as "SpecOps Raptors" Height: 4-6 feet (1.22-1.83 meters) at the hip Length: 14-16 feet (4.27-4.88 meters) Other Information: The rarest variation of the Brute raptor, SpecOps raptors were created for use by special operations teams. Thanks to their modifications, they are powerful swimmers, and are able to withstand extreme changes in pressure, as well as hold their breath for up to twenty minutes. Out of the Brute subspecies, they are the strongest jumpers, only surpassed by the Wu Lieren (Neoraptor nublarensis) They seem to have an almost preternatural ability to stay quiet while moving; indeed, they rarely vocalize outside of their nest, and communicate by a combination of eye and fin movement, as well as tapping their toe claw. Though able to adapt to nearly any environment, they tend to live near sources of water, be it fresh or salt water.
Name: Tyrant Raptor (Neoraptor rigas) Height: 12-14 feet (3.66-4.27 meters) at the hip Length: 30-35 feet (9.14-10.67 meters) Other Information: The largest of the raptors produced by the Udenberg Corporation, Tyrants usually live solitary lives, and are the apex predator of their territory. Incredibly territorial and aggressive, they do not tolerate the presence of humans in their territory. When a Tyrant moves into a new area, the raptors nearby behave in odd ways, including different breeds that would normally attack each other working together to hunt. Many theories have been posited, but unless information about the Tyrant Project can be found, all anyone can do is speculate. Poor jumpers, but what they can't reach they can usually dislodge with brute strength.
In 2030, paleontologist Jace Lewis unveiled the end result of his pet project: the Poultrysaurus. Decades of work reactivating dormant genes in the genetic code of a modern chicken had resulted in the creation of a bird with the teeth and claws of its dinosaur ancestors. Though they were unsuccessful in their endeavor to create an animal with a proper tail, Lewis was finally able to say, "I told you so."
Controvery quickly erupted around the creature, namely the ethics of tampering with an animal's DNA simply because it was possible. However, a certain party approached Lewis and the laboratories involved in the project, paid them a handsome fee for the research data, and even hired some of the geneticists involved with the project. This party, a biotechnology and pharmaceutical company known as the Udenberg Corporation, continued work on the project for other applications. By 2045, the Udenberg Corporation had transformed the Poultrysaurus into a creature for use by military and police agencies known simply as "Raptors".
Superior in almost every way to canines in terms of strength, speed, and senses, many governments and private military companies began training raptors for use in combat zones. The generations of raptors following the first corrected "defects" from previous generations, both physical and behavioral.
By 2060, Udenberg had expanded their market to include breeds tailor-made for civilian ownership. In order to control the population of raptors, each and every individual is rendered sterile through multiple redundant processes, short of actually neutering the animal. With these procedures in place, the Udenberg Corporation was confident that, if any individuals escaped into the wild, they would be incapable of reproducing.
And yet, by 2070, people all over the world were reporting packs of feral raptors, including offspring and nests. Governments demanded an explanation, and one was given: raptors were genetic chimeras, incorporating the DNA of multiple--sometimes dozens-- of different species. All species seen in the wild had one thing in common: they all had certain genes from the axolotl, a species of amphibian known for its remarkable regenerative abilities. Despite the redundant sterilization process, the raptors' reproductive organs had become healthy and fully functional again.
In an attempt to cull the population, bounties were issued on all feral raptors. In the end this was easier said than done. Most species were too fast and cunning for the average hunter, while others, namely breeds created specifically for military and police work, were resistant to weapons unless hit in vital areas. Pressure quickly began mounting on the Udenberg Corporation to find a solution. Multiple propositions were presented and rejected before Udenberg settled on one.
Led by geneticist Henry King, several teams worked in tandem to produce a breed of raptor specifically to hunt and kill other raptors. At first, the project was working. The new breed, dubbed "Tyrant", was tracking down and assisting in the kill or capture of feral raptor packs. King never fully disclosed the modifications to the Tyrant breed's genome, but governments didn't care, so long as they thinned out the population of wild raptors.
Without warning in 2077, hundreds of thousands of raptors--domestic and feral alike-- began attacking population centers en masse. Kind and loving pets turned on their owners with the ferocity of any wild beast. What was even more frightening was that these animals acted with brutal, almost military efficiency; indeed, raptor handlers from different militaries found the behavior eerily similar to how they would command raptors during operations. Small towns were wiped out in less than a day. Cities fell in several weeks. Police and military forces were swiftly overwhelmed.
The year is now 2080. There are only a few million humans left on the planet. Raptors have now established themselves as the dominant predator on almost every continent. Survivors have learned that the best way to survive is to keep on the move, and live in small groups. Rumors persist of places where raptors can't get to, or even refuse to go. Many insist that the world's influential and wealthy escaped to ships and remain in the middle of the ocean.
But unfortunately, rumors are the least of your worries.
Rumors don't have teeth.
Rumors don't have claws.
And rumors certainly aren't going to eat you alive.
Welcome to the RP!
Rules
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Character Sheet
[u][b]Name:[/b][/u] [u][b]Age:[/b][/u] (16+, unless they're a secondary character) [u][b]Appearance:[/b][/u] (Image-- picture or art-- or a description works.) [u][b]Personality:[/b][/u] [u][b]Skills:[/b][/u] [u][b]Equipment:[/b][/u] (Nothing too crazy; weapons like bolt-action/semiautomatic rifles, pistols, shotguns, bows, crossbows, and melee weapons are fair game, but nothing like an assault rifle, machine gun, antimaterial rifle, or rocket/grenade launcher; homemade explosives like pipe bombs are allowed, though should be used sparingly) [u][b]Backstory:[/b][/u] (What happened before the "Raptor Apocalypse"? Did they lose family and loved ones? Were they an electronics salesman? How have they survived since shit hit the fan?) [u][b]Other:[/b][/u] (Anything not in the other categories, including character quirks or phobias, or trivial things like allergies or food they can't stand)
One more bump for interest before I post the OoC. Here's the second raptor breed for the field guide.
Name: Brute Raptor (Neoraptor vigiles) Height: 4-6 feet (1.22-1.83 meters) at the hip Length: 14-16 feet (4.27-4.88 meters) Other Information: The first breed of raptor created for use by military and police forces, the Brute Raptor is, as its name implies, larger and stronger than the Common Raptor. Though slower than their smaller counterparts, Brutes make up for it with endurance and resilience. While all raptors show great intelligence, Brute Raptors are exceptional at following complex commands and figuring out situations they haven't faced before. They are often found in small groups between two and five individuals, though groups of eight or more aren't unheard of when there is enough food around. While physically smaller than females, males tend to be more heavily built, and have brighter plumage on their heads, arms, and tail. Unlike other breeds created for use in combat, their hides are unarmored, making them vulnerable to gunfire.
Character sheet. Feel free to work on your character. If you finish it up before I get the OoC posted, post your character here and I'll assess them before we start.
[u][b]Name:[/b][/u] [u][b]Age:[/b][/u] (16+, unless they're a secondary character) [u][b]Appearance:[/b][/u] (Image-- picture or art-- or a description works.) [u][b]Personality:[/b][/u] [u][b]Skills:[/b][/u] [u][b]Equipment:[/b][/u] (Nothing too crazy; weapons like bolt-action/semiautomatic rifles, pistols, shotguns, bows, crossbows, and melee weapons are fair game, but nothing like an assault rifle, machine gun, antimaterial rifle, or rocket/grenade launcher; homemade explosives like pipe bombs are allowed, though should be used sparingly) [u][b]Backstory:[/b][/u] (What happened before the "Raptor Apocalypse"? Did they lose family and loved ones? Were they an electronics salesman? How have they survived since shit hit the fan?) [u][b]Other:[/b][/u] (Anything not in the other categories, including character quirks or phobias, or trivial things like allergies or food they can't stand)