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Naruto - Legend of the Bijuu's - Part I - OOC

Nero said
I think we all agree that Teleport hasn't done a very good job balancing his crap out.

This.

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Tuujaimaa said
The idea of adding a weakness is bogus. xDIf there's a facet of the technique which has a drawback it's a descriptor, so it goes in the description. The weakness just serves to invite people to metagame (something I've historically had a lot of trouble with).

Not every technique has to have a weakness but for the ones that dwell in the realm of near impossibility it is kinda needed...
Well just because it is listed in the description doesn't mean all character know it's flaw in game but I understand how the temptation would be there for some.

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Tuujaimaa said
I would like to point out that I am, in some circles, considered the King of Overpoweredness - and I wouldn't accept Teleport's character in its current state at all ever.Not only is it a massive faux-pas to be skilled in more than two areas (except Ken/Tai, which while distinct are intimately tied), you are also trying to be more skilled in all three areas than everyone else is. Some of your techniques do not make sense, which always supersedes every other facet that goes into making a technique. Your sword is blatantly overpowered given that it can materialise and dematerialise at will - which, if regulated, can be an interesting mechanic, but your wording has been left vague so it is... Absolutely ridiculously broken and open to all kinds of abuse.Your Kekkei Tota is, in a word, a mistake. Not only are its effects completely unregulated and immensely overpowered, your having the Kekkei Tota is bogus given that being born with it implies that it is genetic, and there is... No way for your to have been born with both the Sharingan and your Kekkei Tota.And the rest of your techniques are broken beyond all comparison, having little to no possible interaction and generally accomplishing things that should not be accomplished.Like, seriously. This is quite possibly the most broken thing I've ever seen, and I've seen /a lot/ in my time.

This is some of the things I've been saying, he needs to redo his explanation and overall add the weakness to his techniques... He may wonder why some people didn't have to add their techniques weakness it's because they didn't touch in the realm of impossibility and working them out wouldn't be hard if you sat down and thought about it... at this point I just think of it as a unfinished Cs thought cause I believe he's working on it as we speak.

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LillyDove said
I'm going to make a Kiri Genin, any comments?

Kumo* (jks) nah I think you are all good, Kiri needs more nin

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Insomnia said
Nope. Sure it seems unfair but it simply means that my character is stronger than yours and she achieved this level at an earlier age than your character. Doesn't make her overpowered.I would've made her older but she's a potential romance interest so nup.And yeah if Corrupt accepts this I'm giving Yume invulnerability and instant healing. THEN you may call her OP.

Ahahaha invulnerability and instant healing i love you insom <3

In his unexplained state where we didn't know the weakness of his jutsu etc. Your character was by no means stronger than his, he could demolish most if not all characters in the RP but with his explanation it provided me with insight into his weaknesses which proves that while he does have insanely strong techniques they have weakness and major disadvantages, I hope his normal techniques don't have such drawbacks.

Gaara was 16 year old Kage btw as well he wasn't OP neither is Yume judging by her abilities.

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Teleport said You, however, have forced me to explain the flaws of his jutsu, which I was going to hope to only reveal in the story.

That was the point to address the things that seem OP in your character for you too reply and explain how your character is indeed balanaced, I assume he will get stronger if there is a part two to this RP and lose some weakness which I have no problem with, it's only natural :)

The only thing you didn't adress was the acquiring of mangekyou still doesn't make a little sense to me, and how you acquired EMS. If you wan't to keep a few things secret at this pint that's fine considering I made you show us why your character is actually balanced.

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Teleport said
HMM. I don't think I said there were no side effects to Amaterasu.lol but I don't think my character is that overpowered if you look at the 16 year old Kage. Also, Amaterasu still causes Sasuke's eyes to bleed even after he received the Eternal Mangekyo Sharingan - and this means that even if you have the Eternal Mangekyo Sharingan, you won't necessarily be free from its side effects.

Hmm slightly bleeding eyes oh the pain.... Gaara was a 16 year old kage but he wasn't OP just like the one in this RP, she's good but not overly powerful. Your explanation of you acquiring Mangekyou shows someone else killed your sensei, however mangekyou only activates from guilt thinking it was your fault or from actually killing them, there is no way your character would believe that was his fault but instead you listed he did as a convenient way to become OP... You don't list any siblings so I assume that you had to receive your mangekyou transfer from one of your parents or otherwise you wouldn't have EMS

"Some have called it the unholy combination of black lightning and Amaterasu's flames, as its speed is comparable to lightning and its power to Amaterasu's flames." this is from your first technique.... wow just wow as fast as black lightning and as strong as amaterasu flames so basically no one can dodge it unless they can move instantaneously.

"This technique achieves the effect of negating and reflecting every genjutsu, fuinjutsu and juinjutsu" No comment.

Then it seems like you weren't happy with OP techniques and you decided to take it to a new level by upgrading Amaterasu and Tsukiyomi, was that really necessary?

"Eye contact is necessary for this technique. However, he merely needs to look at the enemy's eyes for this; it does not matter if they are wearing special goggles or not. As long as he can look at the enemy's eyes, this technique will work. This technique turns the target into dark stone by using this ocular seal jutsu;" Can you explain why your character can cast fuinjutsu with his eyes.

"Takahiro teleports to their blind spot" So now he can move instantaneously as well as sword technique that gets stronger if the oponent is stronger just so you can justify a one hit kill althought it shouldn't be that strong.

" but as the teleport happens instantaneously the opponent will not have time to react" So it is un-counterable and a one shot kill.. wait my bad did i say uncounterable

"Take note that the only way to stop or avoid this technique is to make sure he has no time to activate this, as Archenemy has been labeled a kinjutsu due to its unrivaled destructive power. Dodging this technique is not an option, as the teleport is instantaneous" that's right it gets better the only way to stop is to make sure he doesn't use an instanteous technique

That's not even covering your normal jutsu, look man I don't really care if your character is OP I know you are trying to fulfill a fantasy of having an insanely strong character we all want to but don't shit in front of my face and tell me it's chocolate.. Get what I'm saying? Don't piss over me and tell me it's rain. If your character is OP just admit it don't try cover it up or try justify it. However I myself don't see the point you won't have much chance to dominate and/or kill someone in a fight, maybe if this turns to war you can but if Corrupt allows your character all of this then all of the Kage's are gonna vamp up their power or atleast I am to the point were you look like a mere genin but would that be fun?

All in all it seems to me like you were trying to create a perfect character, maybe a perfect version of what you wish you were. Take away the jutsu and the kekkei genkai you see that this was an attempt to create a perfect being and all but I'm not expert let's see what corrupt says

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