@gamer5910
I'm really sorry but I'm with the GM on this one. It seems like the GM wants this to be a somewhat high-casual RP, meaning he expects a certain quality in this RP. I can see this since he's one of the very few GMs that I have seen who actually give tips and pointers as to how one can improve their sheet. As well as this, it looks like you basically just straight up stole the powers from Deadman Wonderland, which doesn't say a lot of good things about your RP style. I suggest you look up tutorials on the internet on how to improve your writing, and then maybe apply what you've learned in future RPs?