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Seeking... Wishing... Reaching...
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Indulging in sweet memories of bygone days.
9 yrs ago
"When a human's tears finally dry up they transform into a monster. They dry up themselves. So laugh, laugh with pride and arrogance, just as always."
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9 yrs ago
The phantasms swimming in my head are rebelling.

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Hey @Fairess, sorry for the long delay. First let me say I love how you're fleshing out your own ideas - that's really important because as you can see we don't have a single fixed structure so I'm glad to see you have ideas of your own that help fill in your part of the story (though of course I'll try my best to involve you with other characters where I can).

Secondly, I'm sorry about the confusion with Andri. It was somewhat intentional because the reader was meant to experience Andri's own confusion of suddenlt seeing all that and then waking up on the sidewalk with no recollection what the hell happened. Basically he blacked out because Hazumi used his instrument to communicate with him and he woke up some hours later. He parted with Mel in the morning and only regained consciousness in the evening.

Now for the CS.

1. With the TWoF you mention they don't stick to one perticular race at first, but then you say they're dedicated to humans. Which one is it? In either case, if they're protecting outlaws in some cases I can imagine on few rare occasions some people might be quite unhappy with them. Just something to think about for the future.

2. As Merlin mentioned, the Council was disbanded/crushed when Judas came to power so whatever surviving offshoots of it there are, they're not an official institution. There are a lot of para-legal groups in Loom and around the world(s) though.

Btw I also like how you explained her powers as a guardian, that was a very nice touch.

And now onto the Essence of the World.... I'm so glad that you noticed all the problems/implications!
For simplicity's sake I haven't gotten into detail about it in the OOC but the system, as you can notice, is far from perfect. Basically it works like this:
Hazumi senses any death going on everywhere in the 3 worlds, all the time. From those she selects the ones that are violent deaths committed accross races (not within the same race) to report as hate-crimes to a commission supporting the Peacekeepers. Then those decide what should be done with the culprit (declared a Renegade and killed on sight or caught and judged). Meanwhile the Musicians and Wielders (and Black Guard in severe cases) are the enforcers.
So as you've said, just because Hazumi can see those deaths doesn't mean she can stop them, or even identify the culprit in some cases. She can only see the essence and location of a person and there are ways to veil or mask your essence.
Another intricacy is the fact that often selfdefense doesn't count as murder, and that's a very convenient way to explain why TWoF may not have had to stand trial for protecting their charges. Again, it would be a matter of circumstances though.
So to reiterate: the system (that's been in place for about 300 years) isn't perfect but it does mean that getting away with murder has been extremely hard, significantly lowering the rates. Well, not anymore. A lot of hatred has built up.
As a side-matter, you could consider Hazumi a demi-god. I'll upload her old CS on the chara section just for reference. It will need to be revised one day but as she's not so important to the plot and I'm busy, it will have to wait. I'll just say that 300 years ago she was not only omnipresent but also omnipotent but then gave up most of that power to the Academy kids.

I hope this all helps! If not, I'm sorry and let me know!
@Themerlinhawk thank you... =v=,,

@Fairessdefo not forgotten, in fact I have a role for you in mind. :3
@dragonmancer thank you for the interest but unfortunately I don't see how dragons might fit into the universe. Despite the fantasy elements the baseline for the world is our own so dragons are a bit iffy.
Still, if you want you can give me a summary of your idea and we could try to work it in.
@Fairess I really appreciate the breakdown, I'll try to address it ASAP.
Everyone, I'm glad to see you're all fine. I'm ain't dead yet, so I can hopefully help you with anything if needs be. :)
Hey @Fairess, so sorry I haven’t been able to respond earlier. Everything is great so far, thank you for being so cooperative. I’ll just give you a brief summary so you can continue with things; sorry I can’t help you as much as I’d like.

Point 2
If she’s able to spot ill intent (directed towards her charge mostly), that should be a good enough way around it, right?

Point 3, I still have to give some more thought about. Might be as late as mid-next week I’m afraid, I’m super busy right now.

Everything else is okay and as far as the Great War is considered, don’t worry, that was over 3000 years ago. I like the idea of her being an ex-Council member which would be another possible link with Toki because she’s been raised by the last surviving Archangel (among others). For that sake she doesn’t need to be raised in Heaven, they could have just met on occasion or even more recently when Toki came to earth. In fact, your character could have helped with that.

Also don’t be afraid to consider other link with other characters, we’re all very friendly and willing to help.
Hey @Fairess, thanks for the interest! Your character looks very promising~. I don’t have too much time right now but yes, you are on the right track. I’ll just write a few quick comments for you to think about.

Bond of the word

She can’t literally manifest because we don’t have teleportation in Essence but she could get the call telepathically.

“Besides the ability to speak to Roanne, the ward also makes her aware of death that happens within a mile of the ward.”

Unlikely because angels don’t usually see or sense essence. We can stretch the limits if you insist but it’s been highly unusual for angels so far. Their own essence is naturally so strong and bright that it overshadows everything else around.

“So long as she has the blade in hand, it protects her from essence drainage by other creatures.”

Again something that doesn’t make much sense if the rules so far are considered, but you could say a human enchantment was placed on it?

Also I notice she’s quite versatile spanning in abilities from purely guardian ones to the resistance of a battle, the mind-reading of tamers (like reading violent thoughts) and miracle angel (the ability to use her essence offensively). I’d say that to be able to do those she should be able to remember a past life or two if you want those things to come natural to her.

Lastly I just wanted to point out she doesn’t need to be born in Heaven as that’s been decimated since the Great War and only a handful of angels repopulated it during Judas’ War. If she is though, it’s very likely she knows Toki.
Yeah, I think so too. ^ ^
I dunno really, as much as you need to move things along? I'd say 100 words is a good minimum and if you want to go below that just do it as a collab (for examle if characters are having a conversation). I'd say more is better but honestly, I don't care for length as much as about content. I'd prefer you taking the liberty to introduce new elements to the scene than have an entirely reaction-based post (aka the ones where you just retell everything that's going on around your character).
If anyone's still interested, we're still afloat and hoping~
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