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Hidden 10 yrs ago Post by Abysse
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Decided to go with a different character instead. CS is all finished, wrote it completely by phone, so please excuse any continual grammar/spelling mistakes.
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For the most part the sheet is good.

Two miles may be a bit excessive, perhaps one mile should suffice in my mind.

And her mania is a bit too overblown. It's very unlikely someone with such a destructive past wouldn't have been hunted down long ago. She can be a pyro and former criminal but I believe her antics have to be toned down somewhat to make it believable that she would be accepted.
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Hunted down by who? Law enforcement? They did, and I noted she was at large during that time. If the problem is her getting away at all then I understand.

In any case, being a pyromaniac is a defining aspect of her character. I can see how it would mean she'd be sought after by heroes aware of her presence after the Awakening, but the period between her Awakening and getting arrested in Europe was short. I don't think it's impossible that individuals just didn't get to her during that period.

If the problem is her pyromania getting in the way of actually being accepted into the League, then I'd just like to point out that she's clearly indicated her intent to turn a new leaf, and to direct her tendencies to more useful purposes. If there are anti-heroes in the League already, I don't see why she couldn't make it in.
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Well yes Law Enforcement get's a lot of new toys thanks to the Awakening.

It's not that she is a pyromaniac but the fact that she has basically been causing major damage to Los Angeles and sought to blow up a dirty bomb in Europe, without any regard for human life would be troubling to say the least. I'm not saying she can't be a pyromaniac but I am saying that a person who has willfully committed several acts of massive destruction probably killing at least a few innocents is considerably more anti-heroic than any other character. Perhaps limit the number of incidents and lessen the wanton destruction caused, perhaps saying she purposefully avoided civilian deaths, then it should be fine.
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Aye aye. I had originally intended for her antics to have been avoidant of civilian casualties, but the extent of her havoc made such an intent seem improbable and impossible, so I removed it. But given the inherently fantastical and impossible nature of her character already, I suppose it isn't so far fetched to think she could have avoided hurting people.
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It just makes her antics incredibly more palpable if she avoided civilian casualties. Killjoy is accepted. Man the Human Resources department must have the worst job in the League :P

Is she going to be your sole PC?
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Probably not. For now? Yes.
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Alright.

If you don't mind, I think I can find a way to rework your previous concept into an NPC if that's alright?
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Name: Kayla Black

Codename: Nightshade

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Place of Birth: Dallas, Texas

Affiliations: None

Occupation: None

Appearance: Kayla is short, 5'4". She has short brunette hair, brown eyes, and a small scar on her chin. She normally dresses in black, a trench coat and a light form of combat boots.

Powers: After the awaking, Kayla is able to see in the dark and can turn invisible in the shadows

Skills: Talented thief, lock pick and bypassing most surveillance

Equipment/Resources: Rope, lock picking tools, and a small assortment of various other thief tools

Weaknesses: Bright flashes of light and she is mostly human

Psychological Profile: Kayla doesn't really know why she joined the league. Maybe for a place to belong or maybe just moving from one thing to the next. For now she is tired of being a thief and she could put her skills to good use. She likes to work alone and has trust issues, but maybe she could get past that with the right person or people.

Biography: Kayla grew up on the street of Dallas, learning to survive by taking what she needed. She never took anything that would harm someone or lower the living standards of someone below what she had. After a time Kayla became one of the best thieves in Dallas at a young age, and did odd jobs to make a small living. Kayla learned at a young age not to trust anyone and to keep everyone at arms distance. She was hurt a couple times and doesn't like to talk about it.By doing the odd jobs, she did her best to stay below the police radar. She has done some bigger jobs like breaking to banks and some security firms, which drew some attention and she decided to lay low for a little while, until things cooled off. After that she continued her small jobs. After the awakening, continued doing jobs, but less frequently. Due to her new abilities, she only took on some of the most interesting and challenging jobs, working her way to Chicago.
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It's mostly good.

Could just use more concrete personality traits and a more fleshed out biography. Also if you want you could make so that she can turn fully invisible, she's a little underpowered otherwise.
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Killshade. Killjoy. Nightshade.

What's next? Nightjoy?

Also Mr D, I may make Estera my second character later on. I was just itching to play Agnes ASAP when I thought of her. If I decide on someone different though, you're free to do so.
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Ok edited
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That's codenames for ya

Very well, it's not a major part of any plans but would be a nice addition.

EDIT: Falconi, You really don't have to add the shadow restriction if you don't want to.

And its better but it doesn't explain why she would join the League.
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Another Shade?
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MrD the shadow restriction is part of her character, with her being a thief and all she prefers working at night. And if she has to do a day job I don't want it to be a crutch and she has to rely on skill.

and edited again
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Heat said
Another Shade?


Damnit, I can't keep track. I'm leaving it as Nightshade then
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Very well.

In her bio she just needs events after she became a thief. Such as why she stopped being one.
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MrDidact said
Very well. In her bio she just needs events after she became a thief. Such as why she stopped being one.


Ok fixed again.
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Ok Nightshade's in.

Visitor, For the most part it's pretty good but in this verse if a magic-user resorts to human sacrifice and outright murder with his magic, he doesn't stick around very long. Also the government does have Army Sorcerers as well so the scale of his jobs should be kept on the Corporate end for more believability. Also he needs a concrete reason to be associated with the League.

And from now on let's cut down on the anti-heroes :P
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