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This will be a training fight for myself and Teoinsanity. Characters will be human-level fighters with no supernatural powers (to start with).

My character will be David Smith, who is very similar to Bruce Lee in terms of physique except that he's 6'4" and proportionately more muscular. Appearance-wise, he's European instead of Asian with his dark hair cut short at a mere quarter of an inch long. The rest is described in the opening post.
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I will be using Ahmad ,an Arab fighter who is about 6,2 and is kick boxing master
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Putting character speech inside quotation marks is a good way to separate the narration and the speech. That way you don't always have to write "_____ said:".

Another good thing to try and do is put yourself in the mind of the character. What would he be thinking as he looked at David and the weapons? How does he walk? What kind of person is he? Is he naturally violent? More reserved? Would he attack first or bide his time? The more you can understand a character, the better you'll become at writing them.
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Thanks for the tips.
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First lesson: Detail, detail, detail.

Always include as much relevant detail as you can. When you're picturing it in your head, what kind of kick is it? Where is it aimed? What about the punch? Is it a jab? A hook? Is it going for his face or his chest? Or his abdomen? Every attack needs to be aimed and described with enough detail to make it clear what your character is doing, otherwise your opponent can (and has to) make up all the details you leave out in order to defend properly, which can leave you at a severe disadvantage.

I'll write my response once you edit the post to include those necessary details.
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Thank you
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That's better, but I'd still have to assume where at David's left side the kick is aimed, as well as the kind of punch (a counter for a jab is very different from the counter for a hook). If I wrote my reply now, for instance, I would assume that the kick is aimed at my left knee and the punch is a straight jab at my nose.
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That's better, but I'd still have to assume where at David's left side the kick is aimed, as well as the kind of punch (a counter for a jab is very different from the counter for a hook). If I wrote my reply now, for instance, I would assume that the kick is aimed at my left knee and the punch is a straight jab at my nose.


That's what I had on mind
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A good post. Just enough detail to know what your character is doing. You're getting better already. :)
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I did realize while writing my post that there was one necessary detail you left out, and that was the footwork. The positioning of your feet is extremely important when it comes to both the power of your attacks, and the stability of your defense. Since you left yours out, I had to make an assumption based on the rest of your attack and go from there. As much as possible, you never want to leave things like that up to your opponent, as it then becomes very easy for them to gain an advantage.
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Ah,thank you
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My last post was an instance where you could have used your free hand to defend against my shove, as me writing out what I expect to happen doesn't mean that that's what has to happen. Just that it's a likely result if no counter is possible or used. It's always a good idea to write out the expected outcome of an attack, that way your opponent has a good idea of the damage it would do if left un-defended against (and can then more properly defend against it, if possible).
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Unfortunately, grabbing the arm wouldn't stop the punch. Not with that much force behind it and Ahmad having as little leverage as he does. David has a stable stance and is using gravity to his advantage, as well as putting the weight of his body behind the blow. I'm afraid there's nothing Ahmad could do that would outright stop it.
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interesting id like to get involved maybe as a second round? id base my character off of my size and body weight with an extreme proficiency in taekwondo and knowledge of nunchaku, staff, and finally a katana.
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That would be up to Teo to decide. Though it would probably be better to have any other sparring matches in another thread.
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