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Aw sweet man, thank you very much!
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Posted my sheet. Will post in the IC later on
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I hope this is still open?

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-Snip- Sorry for the double post. RPG donked out
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-Snip- Apologies. RPG issues.
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She will only be accepted if she is the hero that Gotham deserves, but not the one that it needs.
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Hmmm... This is a well-written sheet, but I feel like she seems like a comic-book character. But, we can work with her. She can be a tough-girl martial artist. That's fine. She can be a hero-type. Which is also fine (Long as she doesn't piss off NEST). Her parents could have been killed, shot herself, and thrown on the streets. She's going to need some psychological repercussions (Which going off her personality section, she doesn't any). But some parts of it seem contrived. For example:

It wasn't until she met Ted Grant that her life turned around. The owner of a MMA gym, she had tried to pickpocket him unsuccessfully. Strangely, instead of turning her over to the police, he took her to his gym and offered to let her stay there as long as she needed. Ted's reasoning was that he grew up in a neighbourhood much like Maki's, and he was lucky enough to find his way out. Now he tried to pay it forward by letting homeless teenagers like her stay at his gym. It wasn't for free, however - in exchange for food and lodging, she trained there and helped clean up the place as an assistant. She learned much and under his guidance, left most of her old life behind her. She even started going to church.


Sorry, but this really seems like a forced way for her to learn martial arts. I mean she just pick-pocketed someone who just so happened to take her in and teach her to fight? That does seem a little forced.

Also.

Secondly, the range is limited. She cannot teleport to her own room in the library from across town even if she knows it well enough. By her estimates, she can travel up to a hundred meters.


This is pretty far actually. Around three-hundred feet by my calculations. Which is again, fine. But I'm going have to ask you to give her another weakness.

Other than that, the sheet is fine.

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She will only be accepted if she is the hero that Gotham deserves, but not the one that it needs.


gtfo
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and posted, with editing
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What fresh hell are you people gyrating into existence.
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What fresh hell are you people gyrating into existence.


I don't know what you mean by this.
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GingerBoi123 said
I don't know what you mean by this.


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Figured that since I might write Creed's actions from time to time, I should write him a sheet.
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This is pretty far actually. Around three-hundred feet by my calculations. Which is again, fine. But I'm going have to ask you to give her another weakness.


That's about a thousand feet actually.

Deadbeat, your sheet looks nice, I like it. My only issue is that Allen decides the power ratings, and he's not a level eight meta human. A level eight would fall under this description:
A high-tier Meta-human, a level eight is capable of widespread destruction, as these are among the strongest Meta-humans in existence. They are considered a large threat by NEST, and must be dealt with and controlled accordingly. A large team should be assigned to take down an eight, mixed with Meta-humans of varying strength levels.


I think he'd be better classed as a two or three since you can fight his mind control through willpower, something a seasoned agent is capable of, since his physical capabilities aren't buffed. I'd also check with Allen just because I'm not sure if he's alright with someone who can control another's thoughts. That's up to him. Just some constructive criticism.
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Not too sure about hypnotic suggestions, deadbeat.

I mean, the power is pretty much useless since everyone will most likely have their characters resist it..
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I am calling shenanigans, Creed has the same power as Baron.
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Not too sure about hypnotic suggestions, deadbeat.I mean, the power is pretty much useless since everyone will most likely have their characters resist it..


I don't know about that. Hypnotizing Harmon is as easy as shaking a ziploc bag of batteries in front of his face and then telling him to do stuff for it.

It's more about instance preparation than instance recuperation.
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All good criticisms. I'll bump him way down, I think the 8's only there because I started with Lenny's sheet to make sure I don't mess up the history.
As for usefulness, I planned most of his mind-control being explanation for his small army of mooks, rather than directly mind-controlling other characters.
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Explain this "small army of mooks", please. Either way, I'm still not too keen on accepting it. There's a lot of potential to be abused and for it to go horribly wrong.
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Still openings in this I assume?
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