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@NuttsnBolts Nikola is a tech wizard, if you need help with that taste problem then a fix can be arranged.

@Leolycan Um.. I'm sorry if this comes off as possibly a bit brash but would it be possible if you could change your characters first name? Our names are a tad similar you see but if you've got your heart set on keeping him as Nicholas, I don't mind changing.


Lol. Sure! Having an eventual upgrade may be a thing that Cari can look forward to. :)

And I dunno, having two "Nicks" could create some funny scenarios, but as long as people use the full names (and aren't lazy) or Mr Norstrom and Mr Quirke, then it shouldn't be too much of an issue. After all, that's part of the reason why people have last names. :)
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Lol. Sure! Having an eventual upgrade may be a thing that Cari can look forward to. :)

And I dunno, having two "Nicks" could create some funny scenarios, but as long as people use the full names (and aren't lazy) or Mr Norstrom and Mr Quirke, then it shouldn't be too much of an issue. After all, that's part of the reason why people have last names. :)
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Though I can only imagine how awkward it would be, "Um.. I have for you a tongue.. For your mouth."

And alright, I suppose there can be two.
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Though I can only imagine how awkward it would be, "Um.. I have for you a tongue.. For your mouth."

And alright, I suppose there can be two.


"And the Wizard of Oz gave the scarecrow a brain, the tin man a heart, and the cyber girl a tongue."
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@Leolycan Um.. I'm sorry if this comes off as possibly a bit brash but would it be possible if you could change your characters first name? Our names are a tad similar you see but if you've got your heart set on keeping him as Nicholas, I don't mind changing.


I've no problem changing. Didn't even notice your characters name when creating Nic, and to be fair, his appearance doesn't give a Nicholas vibe (was originally going Nicolai, but couldn't find any russian-esque pics). Might change it to Nathaniel.
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In other news, Etherpad being down.

*QUietly throws things across the room*
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Updated Cyrus.

I did the thing where I went "What would my character want?" instead of the "What do I want my character to want?" Things happened. Plus updated the last paragraph to split it and extend the story a bit.
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I'm a little bit scared to say that I've fixed Niesha up some...and its ready for review again...I really am trying hard here.
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I'm a little bit scared to say that I've fixed Niesha up some...and its ready for review again...I really am trying hard here.


We all appreciate how hard you're trying. Let's see and I'll promise that I won't say anything demeaning.
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I...have decided to take a back seat to this one. I was going to come on here and say my opinion, but I'm not going to do that.

Due to Cait being the final applicant to the RP and there being so many talented writers here, I am going to take the neutral approach and let the community of this RP decide the yay or nay vote on his/her character.

Take the opinions and advice of the community to heart, Cait. Learn from them and craft a character that not only we will enjoy greatly, but will be with you for a long time. I will listen to the community's verdict and decide one way or another at the end of the day. (Figuratively end of the day, not literally.)
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To be clear (before I type up a post that makes me look like an idiot) Nathan is along with the new recruits, or no?
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To be clear (before I type up a post that makes me look like an idiot) Nathan is along with the new recruits, or no?


Correct. He's in the cafeteria during the salute.
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I...have decided to take a back seat to this one. I was going to come on here and say my opinion, but I'm not going to do that.

Due to Cait being the final applicant to the RP and there being so many talented writers here, I am going to take the neutral approach and let the community of this RP decide the yay or nay vote on his/her character.

Take the opinions and advice of the community to heart, Cait. Learn from them and craft a character that not only we will enjoy greatly, but will be with you for a long time. I will listen to the community's verdict and decide one way or another at the end of the day. (Figuratively end of the day, not literally.)




So I've read through, and I'm sorry, but I don't believe that the character is going to suit the world. I do have reading in depth on my phone as it's hard to get a good feel, but from what I've read it feels like she is more of a hunter from a fantasy world than a cyberpunk world.

Cyberpunk is traditionally more robotic and filled with augmented people, or weapons enabled by science. It utilizes cloning, bionics, and digital technology. Watching the trailer to "Cyberpunk 2077" or playing Deus Ex will help show what I'm talking about.

I also feel that the house fire and death of a family doesn't help her cause. I can't pin point exactly cause I'm skim reading while on lunch, but it doesn't feel like it's a good motive for her to end up on a pirate ship. Her family died and now she pillaging towns? See the loss of connection. :\

Sorry for sounding harsh. I can have a look and help you improve if you really want. It's no skin off my nose but even just a few minor changes and we can turn it from a fantasy hunter into something else, if you're up for it. :)

Edit, also sorry for misplaced words. Spell check sucks sometimes.
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I have to agree with Nutt about the setting and the motivation for joining the crew. But also, I feel like the bio is a bit devoid of detail in some ways. For example, you could have written a lot more about the hunt and where she went and her experiences in a cyberpunk world. I'm not too sure a farm girl like Neisha would know of bigger or high society so seeing her experience that might have been cool.
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Hm.

Well. I suppose that Niesha won't be suited for this world. Hm.

Well. I might change characters then, and go with one that can be adapted easily enough, if that is okay.
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Like I said, I can help redesign her with your help if you want. I'll send a PM to you after work in about 5hrs :)
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Kinda of an unrelated, but still relevant note: About how long does it take you guys to type out your posts? The reason why I ask is that I see these walls of texts that still have a lot of quality to them, but I can't even think that far behind/ahead enough to put it into narrative. Granted that may be because I try to post something on the same day that I start typing it, and if so would you say I need to stall a bit? (I.E. It took like 15 mins to put up the post i did- which included reading up on the ship and previous posts while typing)
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It usually takes me anywhere from 10 to 30 minutes to type up a post, depending on distractions and/or looking at the other posts/sheets for reference.
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Kinda of an unrelated, but still relevant note: About how long does it take you guys to type out your posts? The reason why I ask is that I see these walls of texts that still have a lot of quality to them, but I can't even think that far behind/ahead enough to put it into narrative. Granted that may be because I try to post something on the same day that I start typing it, and if so would you say I need to stall a bit? (I.E. It took like 15 mins to put up the post i did- which included reading up on the ship and previous posts while typing)


You're faster than me. I'm usually an hour, with distractions mind you (I'm a slow typer sometimes), but I'm also particular with wording and such. Typing like this where I blurt out words is actually quite fast for me. :P

Usually my post are about the same as yours in size. It just that beginning posts, or when something important happens, are usually larger in order to generate a scene with events and setting.

Edit: Also first post take ages because we don't know people's characters.
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Like I said, I can help redesign her with your help if you want. I'll send a PM to you after work in about 5hrs :)


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