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Working on an IC post, partially some internal politics, partially a free trader who'll serve as a sort of neutral plot inducing character for my faction. Just wanted to ask @Arawak, is Persephone station free for anyone to use, or do you have specific plot restrictions in mind there?
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I've been looking at this RP for a while, but I didn't want to say anything until I had an NS done. Well, I do (at least mostly; just have to finish the History section) and I was wondering if I should post it here in the OOC first to be looked at or just stick it in the Character page.
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@TheSovereignGrave Post it up here first, and then myself or Duck will give it a review.
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@TheSovereignGrave Post it up here first, and then myself or Duck will give it a review.


Alright, here it is.

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Sweet. So does anyone want to have any kind of shared history? I was planning on there being a war or invasion or something like that in the past that lead to their relatively centralized (by Rimworlder standards) government they have now.
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I think the Sauru'u could fit. They're basically predators with no ethics towards hunting, and could work as a good danger to convince the Rim to unite a under a centralized government to defend against.
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The ultra-expansionist Commonwealth might work for your history as well. They're always nosing around trying to entice, coerce, or outright force independent worlds and smaller factions into joining them.
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Hmmm, well to be honest they'd both work. So why not both? The Rimworlders would despise the idea of joining an organization like the Commonwealth (even without realizing the drawbacks of them not being citizens they'd hate for how controlling it is) and the Sauru'u, well, being invaded isn't exactly something anyone desires.

How old are the Sauru'u, though? Just to get out a rough timeline; since the conflicts between the Sauru'u and Commonwealth with the Rim don't necessarily need to be around the same time.
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Alright, how bout something along the lines of this. 5 years ago, the Commonwealth sent a fleet task group to one of the Rimworlds with the intent of convincing or coercing it to join the Commonwealth. However, they severely misunderstood The Rim as a whole, and when a sizeable Rim fleet showed up a few days later, the Commonwealth forces backed down.

Something like that. Timeline is also flexible.
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Alright, how bout something along the lines of this. 5 years ago, the Commonwealth sent a fleet task group to one of the Rimworlds with the intent of convincing or coercing it to join the Commonwealth. However, they severely misunderstood The Rim as a whole, and when a sizeable Rim fleet showed up a few days later, the Commonwealth forces backed down.

Something like that. Timeline is also flexible.


Well it wouldn't do much good when it comes to providing a reason why the Rim would become centralized, since I imagined that happening longer ago than that. But I can just have an invasion by the Sauru'u provide impetuous for that. I do like your idea though; it sets up some possible conflict and distrust between our nations. Plus I find it amusing that a more centralized state would pop in and so badly misunderstand how the governance of the Rim worked that they assumed trying to convince some Rimworlds to defect wouldn't provoke a sizable military response. Though 5 years seems a tad recent; maybe 10 or 15?
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Working on an IC post, partially some internal politics, partially a free trader who'll serve as a sort of neutral plot inducing character for my faction. Just wanted to ask @Arawak, is Persephone station free for anyone to use, or do you have specific plot restrictions in mind there?


I'd rather not have someone interrupt the actions going on there, but reference is fine. Just note the station's pretty much a human station.
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I'm only quietly allowing it.

I'll probably work on a post shortly, I got to get my shit running. But I have to write a Precipice of War post done and get it out first.
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The Sauru'u could be considered fairly "New", since they've only had space travel for 300 years. However, as they were highly advanced compared to the other races in their home system, they quickly seized it. Due to the fast Sauru'u reproduction rate, they managed to build a sizable population throughout their system.

That's another thing about the Sauru'u I'll need to throw on. The planets surrounding their homeworld had a dozen races of intelligent lifeforms, though due to the Sauru'u predatory nature, they were either driven to extinction or critical endangerment months after their initial contact.
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@Everyone, IC post is up. The post ended up getting absurdly long, so I posted the internal politicky exposition stuff now, and I'll post the dashing rogue stuff later.

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We could push it back as far as 100 years if you like. I suppose the Commonwealth is less of a single, sudden threat like the Sauru'u, and more of a lingering danger, a constant reminder to the Rimworlders that there's safety in numbers.

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Ok, I'll bear that in mind, just thought I'd use an established neutral location for my dashing rogue trader character.

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Nah, I think a relatively recent incident would be better. The Sauru'u would probably serve better, since I was thinking of it being about 200 or so years ago, which fits with the emergence of the Sauru'u. Though perhaps even 15 is too recent; we could go 50 or so years ago.

And also, quick question. {Would anyone object to actual dialogue from Rimworlders being in braces like this instead of parentheses? Just as kind of differentiate them on account of their language being pretty much unrepeatable by most species (and vice versa). I may have forgotten to mention it, but their voices kind of sound like the piping of a woodwind instrument.}
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Nah, I think a relatively recent incident would be better. The Sauru'u would probably serve better, since I was thinking of it being about 200 or so years ago, which fits with the emergence of the Sauru'u. Though perhaps even 15 is too recent; we could go 50 or so years ago.

And also, quick question. {Would anyone object to actual dialogue from Rimworlders being in braces like this instead of parentheses? Just as kind of differentiate them on account of their language being pretty much unrepeatable by most species (and vice versa). I may have forgotten to mention it, but their voices kind of sound like the piping of a woodwind instrument.}


It's sort of meaningless to do that tbh. It's like saying you won't ever explore inner monologue because such-and-such creature has a different thinking pattern than any other race.

Ultimately what one is responsible for when writing is to convey the emotions and actions of a character or race in a relatable manner. And if they're any different than the norm (English) then it's expected it gets translated to English, which if you're going to do than anything but the standard will be unnecessary.

Besides, brackets and parenthesis have their own grammatical uses that might seem lost when used out of place.
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Yeah, fair enough. And it's not like I'll need to mention what language they're speaking most of the time anyway. Since, well, they're pretty much physically incapable of speaking English or any language that requires a mouth-like structure.
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So Soverign, how would Zedevic activity be looked upon in Rimspace?

I'm only quietly allowing it.


I read your app before making that station and placed it far away from sol, not even touching upon any inner colonies. Persephone Station is a commercial space station with a human population on the fringe of Humanity.

If you need me to follow any specific rules (be it IC or OOC) regarding commercial space stations in the fringes of human space, please state them. If they're IC rules, I might deliberately violate a couple.

Ok, I'll bear that in mind, just thought I'd use an established neutral location for my dashing rogue trader character.


They're almost neutral, basically Persephone's a space station in a region with relatively low oversight from the Republic of Humanity, being in a fringe system and all.

Despite the discrimination the manager of that creatively named restaurant, the difficulty in enforcing some of the regulations Humanity may have for commercial stations makes it still a decent place to go since less people are watching you there. The insular nature of the people who live there (who don't record shit) and the discreet nature of the people who go there also help restrict information flow out from the station.
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The Sauru'u could be considered fairly "New", since they've only had space travel for 300 years. However, as they were highly advanced compared to the other races in their home system, they quickly seized it. Due to the fast Sauru'u reproduction rate, they managed to build a sizable population throughout their system.

That's another thing about the Sauru'u I'll need to throw on. The planets surrounding their homeworld had a dozen races of intelligent lifeforms, though due to the Sauru'u predatory nature, they were either driven to extinction or critical endangerment months after their initial contact.


That works out pretty well timeline-wise for me. I planned on the centralization of the Rim to have occurred a century or two ago. So it could've easily been an incursion into the Rim by the Sauru'u that lead to the Rimworlders realizing a central government that actually does things would be necessary for their safety.

So Sovereign, how would Zedevic activity be looked upon in Rimspace?


Same as anyone else, really. So long as they don't go breaking any laws or being assholes they're welcome in the Rim. I do have a question; how exactly do they speak? To other species, I mean. I can't find it in your NS (though I may just be overlooking it).
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