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@Bishop Obviously you did not read the updated rules... Please move your CS over to the OOC for me to accept and then I will post it in the Character Tab. Thank you.
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All done with my character sheet.
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Age: --
Gender: Male
Titles: "The Fallen One", "The Betrayer".
Species: Angel
Alliance: Mystics

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Relationship Status: --
Sexuality: Straight
Partner: --
Siblings: --
Others: --

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Personality:
Like every angel and godly being, Talendrael doesn't have the capability of emotions, or he didn't anyway. Angels are known for their purity and rational judgment which also affects their actions and train of thought, sometimes misleading to others who think that every good deed done by an angel comes from their selfless and caring nature. In truth, this is how they were created by god, programmed to behave this way, to think this way. Talendreal has broken out of that matrix which erases personal identity, escaped the nexus which links him with god. Now finally free from the lucid shackles of heaven, which one cannot break free of without finding a reason as to why, Talendrael is in search to achieve the ultimate power which rivals that of the gods. In this quest he will forsake all morality, pity, compassion and any other feelings which may ruin his goal. Although now that he is no longer a "true angel" regarding the purity of his soul, now that he is in the earthly realm, emotions are beginning to form within him, ones which he does not know how to cope with.
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Biography:
Cast down into earth because he didn't want to be a slave to it's creator anymore, Talendrael decided on that moment to take revenge on his creator. Being cast down, deprived of most of his holy powers, Talendrael began to tap into the dark, corruption and destruction. A chance of redemption was given to him, a show of pity from the unjust oppressor? He would rather be damned in earth for the rest of his days than accept his offer. He noticed to gain more and more of his holy powers back with every good deed done, up to this point he still has a chance of redemption...

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Dragon Color: Black
Dragon Name: Iudicium
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Specific Dragon Powers: (Limited to Three Specific Powers in the Genre of Dragon)

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Gonna edit it more later!
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I am in no way the GM or co-GM so you do not have to listen to me at all, I just thought I'd offer some criticism. His personality and biography read a lot like a summary or hook of a book rather than a synopsis of who he is and why he is that way. Instead of talking about what will happen in the future, you should talk about his past and present.

Another thing is, even with his CS, I have no idea who he is. His personality is not explained very well and his past, like why he became a fallen angel, isn't very clear either. The only thing really being said is "I hate being controlled which is why I left heaven" over and over again in different ways.

Is he an optimist, pessimist, or a realist?
When he talks to someone, is he sarcastic, aloof, or friendly?
is he selfish or selfless?
Humble or arrogant? Maybe even insecure?

That's just my two cents. Ultimately, you don't have to listen to me and if you don't, I won't take it personally just as I hope you don't take this personally, either. (:
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Okay, couple things
1) I would really like it if you could be a little more descriptive with the personality. Can you explain if they're all bad or there is some good in them? If you plan on having them evolve into a good guy, then I would suggest adding a little bit of good in there.
2) On the powers, will you make it to where something else remains the same besides the clothes? Like they can only transform into someone similar to their age or a specific species or something? It seems a little bit powerful to be the only thing unchanged is their clothes.
3) The Mages didn't send out letters, they met their people in person. That's a little tidbit in the biography that is a necessary to change.
4) This goes for both you and @Bishop, since they have something down as well, when I mean Title, I mean are they Madam, Mister, Lord, Lady, Prince or Princess. It gives an early relation on whether they are related to the King or to Deegra.

Besides that stuff, I think that it turned out really well! I really liked the backstory. :)

--EDIT--
Another thing, I really like your name for your character. It's so simple and cool.
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Sorry, I completely forgot that Elspeth was finished.
Alright, so will you define in the biography what made her personality change so abruptly? Because it seems like a few things could have. In your personality, you stated that there was a life even when she was seven that made it change. Was it when she left Sabira or when her mother died or when she met the assassin? I would like that to be a little more... prominent I guess is the word.

When you say counterfeit... do you mean like papers? Or just right out stating that she's someone she's not? That's in the skills portion... Besides that, everything looks alright.
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Sorry, I completely forgot that Elspeth was finished.
Alright, so will you define in the biography what made her personality change so abruptly? Because it seems like a few things could have. In your personality, you stated that there was a life even when she was seven that made it change. Was it when she left Sabira or when her mother died or when she met the assassin? I would like that to be a little more... prominent I guess is the word.

When you say counterfeit... do you mean like papers? Or just right out stating that she's someone she's not? That's in the skills portion... Besides that, everything looks alright.


It was mainly abandoning Sabira, sorry I'll make that more obvious. And when I say counterfeit, she's just a liar. She's never who she says she is. S'all good, things get hectic. I'll edit her to be more specific when I get home
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@Apokalipse@WhiteStar19 My character has a very high chance of joining the "dark side"(against god), depends how I see fit later on. As I showed in the character info, he still hasn't developed emotions or how you react to them yet, but since he came to earth they will form, all of the emotions he might feel will be decided by what happens in the IC. As I said he is against god and hasn't developed any opinion on other irrelevant things since none of those are very important in relation to god. The reason he became fallen? As I mentioned, he didn't want to obey god anymore, didn't want to do his bidding all the time. Someone creating you, doesn't mean that he is also your master. By the first part that I told you that angels don't possess emotions you shouldn't expect any special behaviour from him, emotionless and as I mentioned before, he will* attain more emotions throughout the IC progression. As I also said:"In this quest he will forsake all morality, pity, compassion and any other feelings which may ruin his goal."- don't expect any help from him that doesn't personally benefit him too.
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I'm waiting until you're done before I give my two cents to both what Apokalipse said and your response to them as well as your CS as a whole.
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@WhiteStar19 I think I'll be able to finish the bio tomorrow or 2 days later maybe.
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just a quick post here to see which dragons if any are left because I have a few ideas myself and it would probably depend on which dragons are left.
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Only one you can't do as it is taken is the black one. All the others are fair game. The other colors are common, so there can be as many of each as wanted.
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Thanks it's my first time doing a shapeshifter and I had a few ideas mixed together. Would it be fine if J could only change into humans and elves instead of all races and animals? He could also be limited to always having grey eyes as a defining feature. I just wanted to show that he doesn't associate with a gender as he switches between them so frequently. As for title I'm unsure what to classify him as.

I shall fix everything once I get home from work.
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Is there one that they prefer more than the other? Gender I mean... And if you just want to do elves and humans, that's fine and I like the grey eye idea.
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OOC FIRST. Grrr.... Bishop did the same thing. I accept them in the OOC not the character tab.
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General Information

Name: Evergreen Lemõsè
Age: 230 (looks 19)
Gender: female
Title: dethroned princess
Species: elf
Alliance: dragonian

Relationship Information

Relationship Status: single
Sexuality: asexual
Partner: nope
Siblings: one half-brother, a human swordsman by the name of "ketsueki kuchi"
Others: a pretty lonely lone wolf

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Personality

Evergreen used to think of herself as the queen of the forest... at the young age of 20.
She lives in the tree tops, feasting on berries and nuts; always weary; never trusts anyone when she first meets them; though she doesn't meet very many people anyway. She has very few friends, preferring to be secluded and alone. Definitely not a fan of anything artificial. She adorns a handkerchief around her mouth, to prevent herself from speaking a single impolite word. To her, manners are everything; however she couldn't care less what anyone else thinks of her. She just wants to amend what she thought she had done wrong. Forever an outcast, she tends to sleep with a tear in her eye; though she endeavours fruitlessly to battle against the night, in the hope that the nightmares do not return and scold her.

Skills:she is both an arrowsmith and an archer, as well as being skilled with a silver tanto knife. she is a force to reckoned with on the battlefield. At home however, she is a gardener.
Weaknesses: anything that can outrange her bow is a big threat, anyone who can use her slightly low self-esteem against her
Biography:

born in to a family very low down in the hierarchy, evergreen was always looked down upon by everyone. She was the laughing stock of all the noble families and always the "peasant tree" or "that one rotting apple" and her personal favourite: "you there, move."
She was the daughter of a silversmith and a maid; which never gave her much hope in the fun game of "your mother sucks because:"; a childhood favourite of everyone except herself.
Her fortune turned when she entered the eleven school of woodland magic and fighting, when on a mandatory ambassador tour, the Prince noticed her and took a special liking to her, for her talent and looks. Suddenly she had become the big name, the adopted daughter of the king of elves.
But it all changed when the king was assassinated, and all the royal family were exiled from the treetops. Forever. She lived in the forest for many years; feeding on berries, honing her skills and fining out her fighting technique.
It was sheer luck; or maybe fate; that brought her upon the emerald green egg that held the spawn of a dragon.

Dragon Information

Dragon Color: green
Dragon Name: guramu
Dragon gender: male
Description of Your Future Adult Dragon: vines cascading down his thickly scaled head, guramu's body will be a slim, hunters body with rippling muscles barely contained beneath his emerald hide. A harpoon tail as long as as the rest of his body will swerve around with deadly accuracy, puncturing whoever his mistress would ask him to.
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  • Wilderness call: guramu calls a stampede of woodland creatures to his feet
  • vine slam: the vines that make up guramu's "hair" will turn into snake-like whips and attack enemies
  • jade flash: guramu breaths out an assault of green fire, burning everything foolish enough to stay around him for that long. Everything but the trees.
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The road to redemption is marred by temptation.

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Name: Atreyu Skyseeker
Age: 20
Gender: male
Title:
Species: Elf
Alliance: Dragonia

Relationship Information

Relationship Status: Single
Sexuality: Straight
Partner: none
Siblings: none
Others: None

Biographical Information

Personality: Bold and Brash Atreyu tends to stick to himself but is open to meeting new people. He also tends to dwell on the side of sarcasm
Skills: Archer and swordsmanship well trained in both but preferring to use his bow
Biography: Atreyu grew up among the Elves but at 16 moved away to live among nature. living off the land he grew into a well maintained and skilled young man. Venturing out only for meager supplies and weapon honing.

Dragon Information

Dragon Color: Green
Dragon Name: Fenrir
Description of Your Future Adult Dragon:

Specific Dragon Powers: Areomancy, Speed in flight, Vocal manipulation (Mimicry of voices he has heard but only for short periods of time.)

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Other:
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Would it be preferred to have one gender over the other? It's not like J will change appearance every post or anything like that.
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