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@Dead Cruiser It does give you a bunch of opportunities, could be anything. The Pharaoh conversing with random political/Religious officials or generals, Azurite soldiers in a skirmish with raiders or Oqer(if we're still using them) and etc.
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I think we should incoorporate Oqers in the world of Azoth. It will make the world more divers and alive in my opinion.

A good way to make an opening post is to present your nation with a large (political) challange. This challange is then the prime motivator for the actions your nation is going to take. Those actions will have effects on your population, neighbors or the gods above and will in turn lead for hooks for other players to get involved.

For my nation it kind of works like this. The primary challange it currently faces is that its population has expanded to rapidly (due to immigration) to a point that her fresh water sources can no longer sustain the massive numbers. This already gives me a lot to write about on both a political level and an individual character level.

On a political level I can now write about politicians that discuss the unfolding crisis, how to share the water among the citystates and how to ration the water among the population. They might decide to kick out hundreds of thousands of immigrants who follow the Cult of Azar. March them off into the desert without enough water and have most of them die. Some might reach Azar to tell the god-king about this atrocity.

This small scenario will be translated into a number of parts for the IC post

1. Introducing the challange and come to a political decision about it.
2. Write about the execution of the decision. Now I can write about soldiers who round up thousands of unwanted civilians and march them off.
3. In the 3th part of the post I go down to an individual character level or small group and write about the hardships they endure until they reach Azar. I might end with a single character knocking on the Imperial Palace door.

This is pretty much how I aproach creating my posts :)

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Sorry I haven't got anything up. No real excuse but some private matters came up that I'm dealing with. Will get a starting post up tonight or tomorrow since I'm motivated enough to work on something.
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I'm still here working away on a post.
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Pathetic.
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I find the lack of activity in this RP disturbing :(
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I find the lack of activity in this RP disturbing :(


Hi Milkman

Reviewed your application.

A few notes:

1) the Elvea. Clearly elves by a (barely) different name. Since we're trying to get away from the D&D races, lets nix these dudes or give them an interesting spin and a new name.

2) the Anthro-Fennecians. Firstly, the name is a bit cumbersome and unnatural. lets go with Fennecians? Second, the race itself is a bit cutesy/JRPGish/Narnian for the setting. Lets maybe try to make them seem more at home in a world full of horrible tentacle elves and roving mutants, etc? No furry fox tails. Please.

3) Confederation of the 8 great democratic Anthro-Fennecian City States. same thing with the name here, a bit cumberson and unnatural. The Fennecian Confederacy or the Democratic League or something would have a more organic ring to it.

In general, I like the level of detail and appreciate your enthusiasm for this RP which is ALIVE! POST! Ahem. But I think you need to grimdark your faction and race up a few notches and make it aesthetically at home with some of the other factions. More this, less this. Sound good?
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Hi Milkman

Reviewed your application.

A few notes:

1) the Elvea. Clearly elves by a (barely) different name. Since we're trying to get away from the D&D races, lets nix these dudes or give them an interesting spin and a new name.

2) the Anthro-Fennecians. Firstly, the name is a bit cumbersome and unnatural. lets go with Fennecians? Second, the race itself is a bit cutesy/JRPGish/Narnian for the setting. Lets maybe try to make them seem more at home in a world full of horrible tentacle elves and roving mutants, etc? No furry fox tails. Please.

3) Confederation of the 8 great democratic Anthro-Fennecian City States. same thing with the name here, a bit cumberson and unnatural. The Fennecian Confederacy or the Democratic League or something would have a more organic ring to it.

In general, I like the level of detail and appreciate your enthusiasm for this RP which is ALIVE! POST! Ahem. But I think you need to grimdark your faction and race up a few notches and make it aesthetically at home with some of the other factions. More this, less this. Sound good?


Thanks for the feedback. I'll get to work with it :)
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Just a reminder that I'm still here. Sheet needs work, but added a few new stuff in it :)

How am I doing so far?
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Just a reminder that I'm still here. Sheet needs work, but added a few new stuff in it :)

How am I doing so far?


Obviously I'm not Flagg, but I would imagine he'd think it fine.

To be perfectly honest, I don't think anyone pays much attention to fact sheets, I sure don't. Just get the basics down so people can look up your head of state, capital, etc. so they can incorporate your content into their posts. That's what a NRP fact sheet should be - not this exhaustive document detailing every little fact about your empire. That's probably why this RP had such a tough start: everyone blew their load on these bloated factsheets when they should have saved their creative energy on posts.

tl;dr just post already
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Still waiting on the collab post to continue with flagg.
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@flagg I've addressed the points you've brought up. I hope you can accept it very soon. Anyway, I'll start working on an IC post regardless ;)

@gorgenmast I've an idea for my IC post that will for most part revolve around a group of travelers from my nation that recently entered Farai in order to look for certain items among the Yushmeg caravan. I am considering that they somehow get involved in the arena fights but I want your permission prior to writing something that might throw what you've started off track :)
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Just a reminder that I'm still here. Sheet needs work, but added a few new stuff in it :)

How am I doing so far?


Looks good! feel free to post.
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@gorgenmast I've an idea for my IC post that will for most part revolve around a group of travelers from my nation that recently entered Farai in order to look for certain items among the Yushmeg caravan. I am considering that they somehow get involved in the arena fights but I want your permission prior to writing something that might throw what you've started off track :)


That's fine by me. Raptorman's got one of his races participating in the arena, your guys are welcome. With the Grand Caravansary and a Drathan master in town, the arena fight is going to be a real spectacle so the more the merrier.
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Cool, I'll start working on a post then. I'll hope to finish it tonight :)
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"Delegation?" The Master repeated. "No, these are my wives,"


@gorgenmast great post, once again. And you completely get the Dratha.
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@Flagg Our collaborative post will be continuing yes?
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Thanks! And I shall get to it. Gonna give the posts a read and see what can be done.
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I will post Sunday, unexpectedly had to visit family. I think it'll be a fun post though! Sorry to keep it so long, moving back to uni took a lot more time put of a week than I would have liked.
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@Flagg Our collaborative post will be continuing yes?


Yes- sorry for the delay.
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