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@greywolf375Well, your work that out, I'm going to sleep.
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@greywolf375Well, your work that out, I'm going to sleep.


kk, goodnight!
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@Kouki
Aight, ill check it when i can
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Anyone got any questions about the game that aren't answered in the OP?
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@Kouki Sorry it took me a while, but I'm not sure what you mean. He wasn't the leader of anything, just a rookie at the time.
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With Stream users, if you are born as one, do you just automatically know how to use it, or do you need to figure out that you are one & ow to use it, or do you actually need to unlock the power?
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@greywolf375

1)You can't become a stream user...then again....hmmm, I'll think about that...

2)A stream user's abilities will manifest in their adolescence on average but that can vary with each user. Like, an extreme trauma or sudden shock can force a stream ability to manifest early or someone can be a "late bloomer" so your abilities don't manifest till adulthood.

3)Everything takes practice but starting them up in general is something that would come naturally like any other super power.

@Kouki Sorry it took me a while, but I'm not sure what you mean. He wasn't the leader of anything, just a rookie at the time.


That's all well and good but I asked what war you were referring to when you said you were the only survivor. I ask because I wanted to make sure that it wasn't The Silent Night tragedy.

Or did you mean in general? Like, by the wars end, you were the only one left in your unit. Because if that's what you meant than I'm a dummy who doesn't know how to read things right.

PS:Your original post had you as a leader of a stream unit, I was referring to that cause I forgot you changed your history.
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@greywolf375

1)You can't become a stream user...then again....hmmm, I'll think about that...

2)A stream user's abilities will manifest in their adolescence on average but that can vary with each user. Like, an extreme trauma or sudden shock can force a stream ability to manifest early or someone can be a "late bloomer" so your abilities don't manifest till adulthood.

3)Everything takes practice but starting them up in general is something that would come naturally like any other super power.


Gotcha, that all makes sense, just let me finish writing out my backstory and I will submit my character for approval
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Done, finally

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@greywolf375Two things,

1) Don't make up Agents and don't make up facilities without my approval. As this game is based pretty hard on exploring and making choices in a preexisting set-up instead of world building, It's important to run things by me first. It's not always a big deal but safe rather than sorry.

2)You gotta work on your sentence structure dude. Like, your dialogue and the part where it was an actual in-game conversation was excellent but those walls of texts....

I like the character in-general though, she sounds good from what I'm reading.

PS:If you forget the mention, just go to edit and put it in.
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@greywolf375Two things,

1) Don't make up Agents and don't make up facilities without my approval. As this game is based pretty hard on exploring and making choices in a preexisting set-up instead of world building, It's important to run things by me first. It's not always a big deal but safe rather than sorry.

2)You gotta work on your sentence structure dude. Like, your dialogue and the part where it was an actual in-game conversation was excellent but those walls of texts....

I like the character in-general though, she sounds good from what I'm reading.

PS:If you forget the mention, just go to edit and put it in.


Alright, I'll get on that. probably won't get done tonight, cause i've got a couple projects to finish up, though...

EDIT: Also, sorry about that, and if you have suggestions/editing stuff to suggest, I would like to hear it.
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@Kouki Yeah, it just meant in general, sorry if it wasn't clear enough :/

Hope that clears up any confusion :)
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i had a pretty bad day yesterday, so i try to post tomorrow. Maybe later
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@Kouki Yeah, it just meant in general, sorry if it wasn't clear enough :/

Hope that clears up any confusion :)


No, my fault, totally my fault! Like I said, dummy who doesn't read things right.

@twannyman Take your time

@greywolf375 Still editing but-



Okay, so-

So far I fixed the walls of text by breaking them up into easier-to-read paragraphs and wrote out the grammatical errors. You sometimes switched between past and present tense in the same sentence for no reason so I fixed that.

I took out the part about Olympus being a shadow organization because it isn't, it's an international(now intergalactic) company with buildings and companies expanding around the globe. Christina could find out whatever she wanted about it's existence from a google search.

Basically, I kept mostly everything the same, the information is still there just worded differently. The only big change I've made so far was, like I said, the nature of how you got onto Olympus' radar because they aren't a shadow organization......at least not on the surface.
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@Kouki alright, sorry about the shadow company part, I think I misinterpreted something in the OP, and thanks for the editing. It fits her quite well. She and I both like it. It takes what I was trying to say, and puts it into a far more legible form. Plus, her skill are clearer.
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@greywolf375 While I do like being complimented, I'd be remiss if I didn't remind you that this is still your character so if you have any problems with my changes you can say so freely. I promise I will not mind.
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@greywolf375 While I do like being complimented, I'd be remiss if I didn't remind you that this is still your character so if you have any problems with my changes you can say so freely. I promise I will not mind.


If I hadn't liked it, I would have told you. you gave me enough polish to run with, just gonna change the spelling of a couple terms to 1337 Speech, and it should be good.
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@greywolf375Noticed I made a few slips when editing the part about Network of Dreams. Should be good now
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