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@Dynamo Frokane
It between The Wheeler or The Martial
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@Dynamo Frokane
It between The Wheeler or The Martial


I'm making a Martial as of now but you can choose either one, just make sure you tell me soon so I can adapt it.
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Is that A KATANNA ON THE BACK OF THE GEAR??!

But seriously I would ask that maybe you give your CS another look over.

I'm finding it hard to believe with someone with so little experience would be an effective sharpshooter and be drafted to the cops. I don't see anything about any training apart from a failed application to the police.

Also the timeline doesn't make sense. When she was 18 the year would have been 2030 but the precinct in neo bay shut down in 2027.

Also the Background is just way too short in general, if you look at some of the other submissions thats the size and detail of background I'm looking for.

But I do like your character concept, a young cute plucky sniper from Ireland, maybe she could have been a military cadet? and she didn't necessarily have to have contact or experience with the police to be eligible. Please read the world brief and time line thoroughly and see if you can come up with something.
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I think I would I pick the wheeler
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@sassy1085 thats cool, cant wait to see it, but I'll let you know in advance that the wheeler is very popular I've been getting PMs about it so you may be competeting for that role.

The one that hasnt been asked about as much is the SWAT role. Still open with no submissions.
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The one that hasnt been asked about as much is the SWAT role. Still open with no submissions.


I was actually under the assumption that you'd be making a character in that Role
o 3o
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I think I would I pick the wheeler


Alright, martial is on its way.
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<Snipped quote by Dynamo Frokane>

I was actually under the assumption that you'd be making a character in that Role
o 3o


Ah yes sorry I wasnt clear, Mack Yancy is a SWAT but Ive not factored him in, there are space for 7 characters so with Yancy it would be 8 and there would be two SWAT characters.
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<Snipped quote by Slypheed>

Ah yes sorry I wasnt clear, Mack Yancy is a SWAT but Ive not factored him in, there are space for 7 characters so with Yancy it would be 8 and there would be two SWAT characters.


Ah, ok.

However, I do have something to tell you.
After a fair amount of thought. I won't be making a character for this.
I wish you all luck and fun times.
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Couldn't resist putting in a second Theme Song for Officer McCreary.

Perhaps its a bit cliche given the character, but I do so love a good cliche.
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fixed my CS
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@Kurai Assassin much better! I ask that you look over some minor grammar and spelling but it looks good.

Also as far as the gear goes, a yellow and purple halo suit with a katanna on the back really doesn't fit this RP

If you need some sniper suit picture concepts I think something like this would fit much better

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Couldn't resist putting in a second Theme Song for Officer McCreary.

Perhaps its a bit cliche given the character, but I do so love a good cliche.


I KNEW it was going to be that! I even said it as I read this post!

Ya Feckin Prick
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I KNEW it was going to be that! I even said it as I read this post!

Ya Feckin Prick


After our conversation I couldn't help it. Too good an opportunity to pass up.
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Ill probs spend a bit longer looking for a suit tomorrow cause im at school like 7 tomorrow so ill sort it for when i get home.

Question i know the suit itself is a problem but what about the Katana? xD
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Name:
-Lee Zao Allen-

Role:
-"The Martial"-

Date of Birth:
-June 14, 2005-

Height:
-6'0"-

Weight:
-164lbs-

Nationality:
-Chinese-

Appearance:




Background:
Lee grew up during the time of the 'Modern Revolution' and the 'Absolute Anarchy', in Shanghai, China. Due to a massive population of 14.35 million inhabitants, riots were massive
and tended to be very violent.

Lee's father and mother were both originally technicians at a textile factory on the outskirts of the city. Soon after Lee was born, his mother left work as a technician to stay home with her son to better take care of him. Most of his days was spent with his mother, due to the fact that the riots made it difficult for his father to get home safely. Most of his childhood was spent getting to know his mother better, and this caused his relationship with his father to be strained.

His relationship with his father was further strained by his fathers eventual change in occupation, causing him to work even longer hours, causing him rarely be at home. Leaving his job as a technician, he joined the ever growing Protection Industry, and became a member of the Shanghai Security Bureau, also known as the SSB.

This line of work was dangerous, putting his father in life or death situations, but the money and benefits were all worth that pain it caused. Soon after, the AAM, or the Absolute Anarchist Movement took over the Chinese Government, though radicalizing means, changes and reforms swept through China, affecting the huge population of Shanghai greatly. Lee's father, who tried to avoid politics all together, hated the AAM, and gladly took a job opportunity that had him and his family transfered it a Branch firm in the States.

Soon after moving to Los Angeles, California, Lee's father had had him enroll into the firm's junior training program, training children 10 and up until they were 18 to be professional security operatives after graduation. The training was rigorous, but gave Lee the training needed to be a great operative, but sacrificed the relationship he had his his mother and the potential one with his father. Hand-to Hand combat in the form of Krav Maga and Sanshou. Also many forms of armed combat, utilizing melee weapons and firearms and sheath were what was instilled in Lee's brain.

In 2023, Lee graduated, right in the midst of a raging war. Despite that, Lee stayed home, working in Los Angeles at the Chinese firm that trained his father and now him. After another 8 years, in 2031, his service gained acclaim in the city as a ruthless and effective security officer. Soon the firm merged with a Japanese one, and Lee was transfered to Neo Bay, which was in the midst of its own little war. Lee was quickly inducted into the newly formed C.O.P.S division, leaving the firm he was apart of for so long.

Theme Song:
Cise Starr:Adrift
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@LokiLeo789 HOLY SHIT, I cant get enough of that smooth ass theme song, you've made me a fan! ( do you listen to cunninglynguists?)
check this one out too
I also like his gear picture I've used that one for one of my arena characters.

Its a very strong application, I like it a lot.

@Kurai Assassin Lol Katanna!!
NO! its too hilariously silly :P

Maybe a knife or something, a tanto sword even.
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EDIT: Well, this is awkward...
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@LokiLeo789 HOLY SHIT, I cant get enough of that smooth ass theme song, you've made me a fan! ( do you listen to cunninglynguists?)
check this one out too
I also like his gear picture I've used that one for one of my arena characters.

Its a very strong application, I like it a lot.

@Kurai Assassin Lol Katanna!!
NO! its too hilariously silly :P

Maybe a knife or something, a tanto sword even.


I love Cise Starr, glad you like it, but I have not listened to cunninglynguists, any good songs? Glad you like it though.
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