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Hidden 8 yrs ago Post by LaXnyd
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Alright. Where is everyone? Are they settling in? Is there a teacher there?
Hidden 8 yrs ago Post by KatherinWinter
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@LaXnyd everyone is in the vlassroom. And no the teacher isn't there so you can start there if you wsnt.
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Ah, alright. I was worried there was an established teacher there.

I'll get a post up soon.
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@LaXnyd I know this is free but you have some major spelling and grammar errors. Your post is hard to read. Secondly she really can't tell Lord Death what to do.
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Hm... sorry. That was actually meant to be a playful ribbing of "If you're just here to see your kid, please leave, you're disrupting the class". The way she said "Headmaster Death" is more than welcome to stay is to mean that, because he's the headmaster, of course he could stay.

tl;dr, it was her very convoluted and playful way of saying "if you're just here to visit your son then please leave". It was by no means an order. I'm sorry if it sounded like one ;w;

Also, I looked over my post and there were no grammar mistakes. A few convoluted uses of passive voice, maybe, but other than that I ran my post over with a spellcheck just to be sure and I still got nothing.
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Excuse me, if I may add, I found this really confusing and awkward sentence that I would love to review with you.
A seemingly human female with the seemingly normal soul of a normal human walked into the room with a soft smile.

First off, a seemingly human female. Please just say possibly or different human female, please. Secondly, seemingly normal soul of a normal human. Okay, really? Must I ask why you say that? I know she (If it who I think) is a witch and will later on be learned by the students she is a witch, but really?
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"Seemingly" works better because "possibly" or "different" in this case because "possibly" would imply that some of the students somewhat suspect her - which shouldn't happen right from the outset - and "different" wouldn't work because, well, she's not a human. She's not different, she's just not it to begin with.

This sentence was basically meant to be one giant case of repetition to emphasize the fact that everything about Catherine shown so far is only what she seemingly is. If anything, I should have added a third "seemingly" before "normal human".
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@LaXnyd
Please use the mention.

The sentence sounds very weird and off by a long shot. I was the one who read the sentence to Katherin, and you can see how well your sentence went.
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@BlueJayBaseball

Gah, sorry. I still forget those things exist.

I understand how it could sound awkward if it's read out loud. I'll edit my intro post.
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@LaXnyd

It's alright, I miss the mention button a lot.

Thank you. I'm sorry if it sounded rude or unfair, but I just wanted to make sure it made sense, especially toward Katherin.
Man, I like sounding professional!
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@BlueJayBaseball

It's alright, I understand. I'll be more careful in the future.
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@KatherinWinter
lol after just reading everything I hadn't seen, that conversation would of affected my Loki character to sense he shouldn't exist then when it was talking about why a witch wouldn't be against them, because of his mother.

It does make me wonder if either characters would detect something off about each other lol.
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Hm... sorry. That was actually meant to be a playful ribbing of "If you're just here to see your kid, please leave, you're disrupting the class". The way she said "Headmaster Death" is more than welcome to stay is to mean that, because he's the headmaster, of course he could stay.

tl;dr, it was her very convoluted and playful way of saying "if you're just here to visit your son then please leave". It was by no means an order. I'm sorry if it sounded like one ;w;

Also, I looked over my post and there were no grammar mistakes. A few convoluted uses of passive voice, maybe, but other than that I ran my post over with a spellcheck just to be sure and I still got nothing.


I also didn't mean to come of harsh, which I apologize for doing, I was tired and didn't state that as well as I should have. It's a good idea to read posts aloud or have someone else read them. Editing your own I'd had.I know what I mean but others don't. She shouldn't even suggest Lord Death leave. As the headmaster he can come and go as he wants to. If he wants to disrupt class she has to deal with it. I wouldn't have uses seemingly twice. I am glad you didn't go for three times. Once I'd enough to point out that something is different about her.

@KatherinWinter
It does make me wonder if either characters would detect something off about each other lol.


I think it would be similar to when Medusa was in the school. Most didn't know or care.
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@KatherinWinter

I assumed that Lord Death was in his non-serious/obfuscating stupidity mode - the part where he acts really relaxed and unexpected by someone who imagines Lord Death as a serious person.

Also she's a witch; even if she's not full evil it's not entirely set in stone she treats him with utmost respect

Anyhow, I've edited my post
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@LaXnyd I'm still working on my Lord Death.
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Srry I got to bail I'm in to many rps so srry tuck and roll
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@Blueflamewho were you paired with?
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@Evangaline I think what she saw would depend on whether or not @LaXnyd had soul protect on.
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@Evangaline I think what she saw would depend on whether or not @LaXnyd had soul protect on.


Considering where she is, I'd say my character definitely had it on.
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@LaXnyd I think everyone is waiting on the teacher
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