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@TheHangedMan Hmm very interesting concept. I'm not quite sure if a character so young is acceptable, I'll leave that up to Poly's judgement. You might have to age her up a little. I mean even Robin got to middle school before putting on tights. We'll see on that point.

Now first off, I think her powers are very interesting. But they seem more Supernatural than Metahuman. The idea of transferring her life to inanimate objects as well as powers seems much more like a magical concept than a comic-book superpower. After all, if X-Men had to do that to work their powers they wouldn't get very far, but the idea of sacrificing certain things including life force is very much present in fantasy. Food for thought.

With so many creations, and the way you describe each individual sacrifice, I don't know if she should still be alive. I think their power level as a group is acceptable, but that's another thing I leave to Poly. You might be asked to scale down the powers, at least the wide scope of them perhaps. Now you can take off some creations off the list and have her be able to use her mundane rich person resources in place of those if you wish. I rarely say this, but the power might have too much of a weakness. If her creations get destroyed or she needs more, there will come a time when she simply can't do anything more especially since she's already so weakened. Just saying that it might be kinda hard to play in the future cause anything can happen.

Also there's a few continuity things. Her parents can certainly be heroes, but the Champions are still in their early years and superheroes are just as new, the whole concept of superhumans has only been public knowledge for a few years. And the events of the RP are within a week after Nagoya so a lot of the bio has to be shifted around to accommodate that. And a lot of the legal/business stuff you describe is probably still in flux.

Lastly, this is just a suggestion, but this a "All Myths Are True" kind of setting, and in this world the Wonderland mythos is very much real. If you want to tweak your character a bit to take advantage of that, then you are free to do so. Overall this a very interesting idea and a solid sheet, but there may be a few tweaks needed. I like how creative the whole thing is and I look forward to seeing how she plays in the game.

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@MrDidact Oh, thanks for the suggestions! I can let her age a little, but I can't scale her past 12 for reasons.

And on the point of her creations, her weakness is intentionally crippling. That way, she can't callously create more of them. That's why they have such a varied set of abilities between them; they make up for certain weaknesses. More importantly it stresses how vital they all are to her, as they are a literal part of Charlotte. The strength of her creations is quality over quantity, to sum up. Suffice it to say that if even one of her current creations was destroyed, that's equivalent to her getting crippled anyway.

Also thanks for an update on the lore! I'll begin tweaking that right away. I was really wondering about the time frame between the founding of the Champions and the where the RP starts after Nagoya.
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btw, is swearing allowed?
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@TheHangedMan I see you made some changes, and yeah I think everything is working out. You may want to change her Allegiance from Champions to Split or Neutral if she's playing both sides. Also she seems to be some kind of kid genius with her networking and political savy, you might want to add a prodigious intelligence to her skills. Unless Poly has any objections, I'm going to go ahead and say accepted. Question, can she use other people's life energy? And if her creation dies, can she get energy back?

@Yin Jingshin Swearing and R-violence are acceptable as long as it doesn't get too overboard, it should be natural not over the top and excessive. And if things get a little too steamy, that's what PMs are for you freaky people.
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@MrDidact Her only source of power is her own life, and the death of each creation has no bright sides for her. The former might change over the course of the RP, but I have no plans for it, while the latter is set in stone. It's absolutely important that she preserve the life of her creations.
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I don't intend to be swearing often in my posts, however my opening post features australians. And they tend to be very foul mouthed. i kinda just wanted to reflect that, for comedic perposes. If it needs to be toned down, let me know. For now, I'll roll with it
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@TheHangedMan To be honest I think it would be naturally for the life force she spent on animating them to return to her, at a reduced amount depending on how long it had been sinice they were animated. That's just my opinion however
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@Iktomi Think of it this way: Charlotte is a mother that is giving her life to create new, individual children. If those children die, nothing can ever replace them, and the life she gave to have them won't come back :)
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@TheHangedMan That is a good point as well, and really given it is your character it is completely your choice. I was just offering an alternative.
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Great stuff so far guys. I'll have Oddie's opening post up tomorrow evening.
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Well, I can't say the Womb is off to a good start, PR wise. But then again, who is.
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“As much as I create, I too, destroy,” uttered The Womb as he suddenly smashed the ground with his fist. The impact was so hard, the ground around the group was blasted into the air by the tons. It was almost as if an explosion had gone off underneath their feet. The officers were unanimously crippled, every one either critically injured due to falling from height, or buried underneath hundreds of pounds of wet sand.


It might also be pertinent to list strength as one of the skills The Womb has, as he just buried all the police force at the scene in a single punch (and whatever else he's capable). Just my opinion but anyways, I'll have a post up in the next few hours with something to show
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I'm just waiting on @Polyphemus's say-so before doing anything :D
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@TheHangedMan Oh you don't have to do that, I think Poly would have said something by now. Go ahead and put your character in the CS tab and get cracking as soon as you're ready.
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Yes, please do. I've been at the office all day, so I haven't had a chance to respond. I fully trust MrD's judgment. Though having a paralyzed child as a team member is not going to do the team any favors in the PR department, but she seems like she'll be a handy person to have around.
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@Yin Jingshin " I am the Lord of this world. I am the Adam and the Eve, the fruit and the tree. I, begat thee,”" --- that is where Maeve should have walked in and said "no I AM EVE" :)

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@Polyphemus She's not actually part of the team. The idea I have for her is to always be using proxies and to never reveal her identity, at least not easily. So all messages come through her Animated, or through hired or controlled proxies :)
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@WanderingSpirit Strength is listed as a power for The Womb.

@Sterling If only, if only.
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Also, how does posting work? Do we wait in a specific order, or, do we use the "@" function to let people know who's posting in which area etc? Just wondering cause I wanna do the second part to Womb's intro (I'll have him interact with other players soon, just want to give him some cotext as to why he's doing what he's doing) maybe tonight or tomorrow? If I have to wait though that's fine, just wanna know the deal
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@Yin Jingshin Generally, we don't have set posting orders here unless the GM says so, but rule of thumb is to have at least one or two people post before you post again. the "[@]" function is normally used if our post is referring to or involves a player or character directly, or if the post affects them somehow.
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