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In this world there are no humans, only anthropomorphised animals. However, not all animals are created equal. Pigs, Cows and other farmyard creatures are consider not even animals by the majority. They are put to work as a slave class. Working farms to grow crops to feed themselves. Fattening up for consumption by the animals. You see a real animal only eats meat.

Uskary is a poor state ravaged by a war from ten years ago where it became a battleground between the Ardesh Empire to the west and the Old Kingdom of Escal to the east. Neither state survived the war, but each side ravaged the countryside of Uskary and it has not yet fully recovered. As such the livestock, which normally would feed the whole population are unable to grow fat enough to suffice. The nobility have for the last decade enacted the harvest, in which animals are chosen to be carved up and fed to the rest of the populace in order to fight the growing lack of meat. Officially this is supposed to be done at random, but in reality the nobles just choose on their own whims, be it to eat a succulent looking subject or smite down some up and comer in the world.

All around nations have industrialized and adopted new governments since the end of the great war. Meanwhile, Uskary has kept a feudal system well past its lifespan and is significantly behind the times economically, militarily, socially and politically. Most of the populace has in secret blamed the old aristocracy for being petty, self serving and slow, but upon the death of the old King, his son, prince Oskar, declared that the government would change. An election would be held to decide who would lead the country and whoever won the election would have free reign to create a constitution to lead the country into the future. Oskar would be overseeing this election personally, but not running in it. He wholeheartedly believes that the people would decide what was right for them.

The elections are to be held at the end of the year where all animals would gather to the cities to submit their ballots. Before then though the leaders of all prospective parties would need to gather in the capitol with at least five hundred supporters to be recognized by prince Oskar as a valid contender in approximately two months.

Many grassroots movements have sprung up in the wake of this announcement, but surrounding countries have taken this as a time to expand their influence over a neighbor. Despite the damage done to Uskary during the war up and coming political parties in Ardesh are making an impact on various levels of Uskary society and the new dictatorship in Escal is sowing dissent for the nobility and exporting the cult of personality for their own leadership. Meanwhile, to the south, the coastal Nation of Veska wants desperately to trade with Uskary to bring its untapped natural resources to a world market and hopefully enrich themselves.

The race is for Uskary’s future. Success will surely guarantee a life without hunger and failure may well see you on your opponents’ plates.













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Cool, I wasn't sure if this was happening or not. Are you still accepting?
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I will continue to accept people until Someone tells me to stop. That said I do feel obligated to at least give people who expressed interest a chance to make an acceptable character. But yeah go ahead. The sooner we get a critical mass of characters the sooner stuff can happen IC side.
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Cool. Yeah I was from the interest check. What is the character limit here?
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As many as you can make good and run effectively. I guess I will object if you have so many characters running around all affecting some master plan that you as a player cannot be opposed, but go wild until there's a problem I guess.
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CS:
Name: Reptile
Species: Salamander
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Age: 25

Personality: Reptile tries to do what is right. He is kind and sticks up for others even when he is out matched. He doesn't care what people think of him but he will not stand for ill treatment of the poor or anyone animal not considered to be an 'animal' Reptile is brave and doesn't let anything go especially when he sets his mind to something.

Backstory: Reptile is another far off traveller. He is curious and loves to discover new things. He is the type to believe you despite the evidence and what anyone else thinks if he truly trusts you. Reptile is skilled with most weapons and has been trained to defend himself if he needs to. He will never abandon friends and will help out when he can. Finally, Reptile shows a lot of empathy for others even if he barely knows them he is easily able to understand their feelings.
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Mind changing the leader of the UIH to Artyom Barkov? He was whom I was intending to lead it.
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Name: Coal
Species: Mouse
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Age: 13

Personality: Coal despite being blind has hope. He tries to look at the bright side of things instead of being miserable all the time. He just wants to be happy. Coal will often stay on the sidelines and out of the way of trouble. Through sheer determination as well as trail and error, Coal has learned to 'see' without seeing in a sense. With his long whiskers Coal feels around, uses his hearing as well as his nose to travel around.

Backstory: Coal is completely blind. He was born blind but that didn't stop him. Throughout his life Coal has only known hardship. He was born in Aburom, forced to work and punished when he struggled. He was a slave, considered 'useless' for being blind. Many times people tried to kill him, civilians, Coal was lucky to get away, using his sense of smell, touch and hearing to guide him. All his life coal was considered nothing but a slave and for a long time Coal believed them all. Even now, he considers himself below everyone else and often stays away from society if he can.
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Name: Spike
Species: Porcupine
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Age: 25
Personality: Spike seeks out adventure. He loves to know what happens next. He is reckless at times and will do things for the sake of it. Although he will always put others before himself, he isn't the kind of person to ignore someone in need to fill his lust for adventure. He will happily sacrifice himself for the greater good.

Backstory: Spike is a faraway traveler who went out seeking a new life, he wanted to see the world. He wanted adventure. Spike wanted the thrill of something new that he didn't know. So he left his home town and began to explore the world, going from place to place looking for something to excite him. He helped those who he could and often found fun while travelling.
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Name: Splinter
Species: Mouse
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Age: 20
Personality: Splinter is very cautious and he has no faith in himself. He doesn't believe he is special and he doesn't believe he can do anything. He often asks why should he bother if all he is going to do is fail anyway? He looks down on himself because all he does is steal, lie and cheat. He is afraid to get too close to anyone because he's afraid he will just fail at friendship or even love like everything else.

Backstory: Splinter grew were the cities were poor. He had to lie, cheat and steal to get enough gold to survive. He was a coward, often running away from trouble. People tried to help him many times, they tried to set him on a better path but Splinter was afraid and he ran away and that only made things worse. The further away he got from social norms, the harder it became for him to make friends. He felt like he couldn't do anything else but steal, lie and cheat. He felt like he had to do that to survive, like he couldn't trust anyone and that was how he became alone. He couldn't make any close friends, it was too late for him.
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Name: Lilly
Species: Hare
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Age: 19
Personality: Lilly is a friendly hare who always looks on the bright side. She tries her best to believe herself as best as she can but sometimes she finds it hard to. She will do anything to help another especially if it is a friend. Lilly will try to cheer someone up when she sees somebody is upset. Being a hare, she can be rather smart and quick thinking when she needs to be. She constantly makes jokes to lighten up the mood. She considers herself to be a 'hero' trying to save everyone from their 'dark days'.

Backstory: Lilly grew up in a rather wealthy country. She had whatever she wanted whenever. Although she saw plenty of others who had nothing. There were parts of the country that were poor and she hated it. She couldn't understand why everyone was so selfish. Lilly decided that she didn't care about her wealth. Instead she gave it away to those who needed it. She helped people who needed helping. She offered a friendly paw to whoever needed a friend. She wanted to help everyone, one way or another and that was the mindset she grew up with. She wouldn't be happy until everyone was happy.

My last character.
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@The One

So the first problem is improper formatting. I know I did complain about my own formatting being less elegant, but I still want you to have an overview section instead of separate personality and biography/history/backstory sections. Since his backstory is more personality information this may actually help it be more coherent. Oh and just get rid of the other section. Okay where do we go from here...

Reptile is from a far off land. Where? What is it like? Does he feel any longing for it? Does he even know where he came from? If not does it bother him that he doesn't know? Why does he travel? Where has he been? Is there any reason he wants to travel to Uskary? Does something their interest him? Is he passing through? Is it just a checkbox on places to go? Under what circumstances does he find himself in the country. Where did he learn to use "all weapons?" Does he often find it useful? He's a salamander so he's pretty small, does he find weapons made for larger animals like rifles something he'd want to use, but can't? How does he deal with significantly larger animals like bears? Can he even fight significantly larger animals because it would probably be really hard?Does he find it hard to avoid fights in his travels? Has he not been travelling long enough to become more aware of other people trying to manipulate him? How is he good at understanding peoples' feelings? Did he just pick it up on the way or did someone teach him about people?

In general I want him to be a deeper character because it feels right now like a shallow attempt to make a generically good character that is removed from the troubles of the world, possibly to be this objective third party with fighting skills to boot so he's never in a bad situation really. All of these are things I wasn't really looking for in characters. There are to be no heroes and good intentions shall go without hurting somebody. I mean being able to fight is fine, but tacked on to everything else it sort of leaves a bad taste in my mouth. At least his gullibility can be narratively useful, but I would not mind seeing that axed in the name of making Reptile in some way more interesting.

And oh, I didn't realize that you were actually going to immediately post four more dudes. um... this is going to take a while. Why don't you focus on making one for now. I realize now I opened myself up to this, but... I guess I just didn't foresee it being such an immediate issue.

If I like any of the other ones I'll let you know, but I cannot accept Reptile and if the rest of them are of the same quality I won't be able to allow those either.

@Bright_Ops Yeah, I'll get right on that.
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@Cultural Titan So I upgraded the character a bit. Tell me if there are any more problems.
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@The Narrator Seems fine. I'll add it momentarily.
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@Cultural Titan How many players are you hoping for?
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I was expecting fourish, hoping for a lot more. Really I thought more people from the interest check would have come over. I will bother them tomorrow to see if they're still interested. I know besides you two that two friends of mine are also interested and that should hopefully be enough.
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Name: Nikolay Martyn
Species: Swift Fox
Age: Thirty-seven


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Looks pretty good. I could probably accept him as is. I imagine it would be pretty easy to get him involved in things even if he is not associated with any of the political parties. Does he have any particular view on economics? Its fine if he does not, but it may be helpful down the road.
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Not particularly. His only interest in the machine as a whole is how it directly and specifically affects him, and isn't something he gives too much thought to in his day to day life.

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