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By far one of the most detailed applications I've seen in a while. Here's my attempt.
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Love it! I like how bubbly, seductive, and colorful she is. This CS definitely made me chuckle a bit, but out of good! I'm going to work on my character and then PM you to see about what relationship they'd have as I believe I'm going to make the Vampire Coven Leader!

So yes, Regina is accepted -- I mean Aimee. mean girls reference


I had a lot of fun writing this character, at first I thought of making her more serious but I figured she'd be more fun being bubbly, and good comic relief to relieve some of the tension once in a while haha. I look forward to the PM!
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@Monacho I assume you've already done so, but may be beneficial to have a look at the current resident hunter in Salem if you haven't lol. Not that it matters because of how she gets along with the hunter community, but you know :v
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@Lionhearted

I'll make sure to change the bits on my CS to say that he can't partially shift just yet and he takes around average time to transform.

Sorry for the misunderstandings guys, and thanks for clearing that up!
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Ah, thanks for that :)
I should have my first character done either sometime today..or tomorrow. :)
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By far one of the most detailed applications I've seen in a while. Here's my attempt.
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Very nice! I love her and I like how unique and thought-out this character is! I love your vocabulary and your writing as well! She is accepted and you may move her over to the Characters Tab!
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@Lionhearted @HushedWhispers

Here is my wolf :)


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Update; Sorry for my inactivity, everyone. Yesterday was a completely horrible day at work but thankfully I have today and tomorrow off so expect to see me around much more often. :) All of the characters are coming along quite nicely though.


@Queentze Nice character but I must ask the same question as Lion asked regarding if he's apart of the Voodoo Coven of Salem or just a warlock, not really looking to be tied down to a specific coven? Please let me know but other than that, I'd say that your character is accepted. :)
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@Lionhearted @HushedWhispers

Here is my wolf :)



Nice character but I'd wait for Lion's approval before fully accepting him. Although, I see nothing wrong with your character. :)
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@HushedWhispers Thank you :) I am glad you like.
I'll certainly wait for her word, before posting him if she too accepts :)

Currently, working on my second lol. As I feel the inspiration.
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@HushedWhispers Thank you :) I am glad you like.
I'll certainly wait for her word, before posting him if she too accepts :)

Currently, working on my second lol. As I feel the inspiration.


Sounds good. :)
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@HushedWhispers Hopefully, the second one will be well recieved too :)
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@HushedWhispers Hopefully, the second one will be well recieved too :)


I am sure it will be. Don't doubt yourself and your writing abilities.
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@HushedWhispers Aww thanks :) I guess sometimes I do have a little doubts here and there lol.
I guess, like any writer. Bad habit of mine.
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@HushedWhispers Aww thanks :) I guess sometimes I do have a little doubts here and there lol.
I guess, like any writer. Bad habit of mine.


Trust me, I know that more than anybody. So, it's all good.
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@HushedWhispers Ah, glad I am not alone then.
We writers gotta stick together.
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@HushedWhispers Ah, glad I am not alone then.
We writers gotta stick together.


Indeed. :)
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I'll make sure to change the bits on my CS to say that he can't partially shift just yet and he takes around average time to transform.

Sorry for the misunderstandings guys, and thanks for clearing that up!


Sounds good! No need to apologize! And thanks to those that did catch that because I seemed to skim over it...

@Lionhearted @HushedWhispers

Here is my wolf :)



There's only a few things about this that should be fixed and discussed before acceptance.

- Quite a bit of the abilities that you listed are not exclusive to just Devin, but they're abilities that all werewolves have. Every werewolf will have resistance to magic and every werewolf has a very fatal bite. In the description for werewolves, it explains that a werewolf bite is capable of killing easily, and if one survives, then it can cause hallucinations. This is partially due to the bacteria that comes with a werewolf bite, which is also the same bacteria that turns a human into a wolf, just how Devin was turned!

- The Wolf link that you mention can only be applied to werewolves within the pack. The pack has to be comfortable with each other and used to the presence of each other for a great amount of time before telepathic communication is possible. Werewolves that don't know each other, or even if they're acquainted, will not be able to communicate as so. Thus, remove his telepathic abilities with all werewolves and remove the limitation of their presence in his mind as well. This is also strictly communicative, there's no mind reading or anything, just communication.

- Devin should have an even amount of resistance to magic no matter what branch of magic it is, much like all other wolves.

- A lot of the abilities that you listed are generic abilities that all wolves will have. I want to reference @ihinka's Blaine Moore, in which she listed abilities that she developed through other sources, not just enhanced werewolf abilities. I want you to consolidate the generic werewolf abilities and then you may add other abilities that don't even have to be werewolf-related. Kind of like William's odd bow prowess.

- I'm going to have to ask you to remove Devin's ability to partially shift as this is only something acquirable by the alpha of the pack since they're revered for their ability and control as a werewolf. Judging from Devin's age, perhaps it's an ability that he's learning to work on, but it's definitely not something that he's completely capable of controlling! Also, the act of partially shifting from irritability isn't exactly how it works, but moreover, control of oneself to allow a partial shift. Devin became a werewolf by being bitten and then he lived the rest of his life as a werewolf without any mentor or instructor, thus he'd have to learn the ways on his own.

- My last concern for the sheet is that he transformed into a wolf only a few nights after being bitten. This is a topic that can be discussed as other supernatural-themed shows/movies/books have a different view. I've been reading that it usually takes several weeks, sometimes over a month, for a human to experience the werewolf shift. Prior to this, they experience the symptoms of a werewolf bite: hallucinations, flu-like symptoms, insomnia, headaches, etc.

All in all, devin is a wonderful character with his personality and his history, but there are just a few changes that should be made in order for him to be on a proper, playing level for the RP! Great job with the creativity in making him a rather personally diverse character!
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I'm pleased to announce that @Alfhedil will be our other Co-GM!


I'm pretty busy with real life so I haven't started much on my character, but I do have a rough idea so I can get typing away soon! I'm more just prioritizing the created characters so I don't leave you guys waiting! I'm definitely loving the characters so far! But geez people, nobody likes a good 'ol witch I see!?
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@Lionhearted Wow, quite a big list there lol :)

I'll do my best to fix, most of what bothers you. The only reason, why I made Devin turn so close after being bitten, is because he was bitten a few days before the full moon. So that's why the transformation was quick. I guess, I had a slight different take on it, that's all.

Thank you :) He was actually a character. I had for another rp, on another site. I thought, it was time to bring him back and expand on him a little bit.

I am not sure, what other abilities to add for Devin, besides his normal wolf' one's. Any ideas are welcome.
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