Ok, well my computer crashed so I lost all my Personality and History, but docs at least saved my re edited deck. Again I don't know the meta of the game so I went back to the old days and grabbed some cards that had cool effects.
@FoxSoxs That deck is looking a lot better, yeah. Personally not a fan of a card like Trap Hole because it's so one-note, but it's not like your deck is filled with cards that stop your opponent from playing YGO. You didn't really have to list every possible card they could use though, lol. Like Cosmos said, it wouldn't be out of the question to look to cards outside your decklist for when we get around to actually scripting.
@Tenma Tendo I can't speak for what Satoshi thinks and I won't (he's mainly the guy that'll judge whether or not your actual character is good or not), but what you have so far looks pretty alright to me. Never a fan of when the shown S/T cards are floodgates or play stoppers and I'm seriously questioning why people still think they need +0 cards like Allure, but the deck overall is still fine enough.
You're still going to need to get the other four up and running, though, because a sheet is judged as a whole, not based off one subsection. If you'll take a look at the other top 5's in already accepted sheets, though, you'll see they don't have to be nearly as detailed as your main duelist.
Almost done. Just have "History" to do, unless there is a problem with something else in the character/dorm.
Name Samantha “Sammy” Clover
Age 18
Appearance If you see a short blonde haired girl with a big pink bow in her hair roaming the academy grounds, that is Samantha Clover. Sammy stands at 5’3” and is athletically built. She has the sweetest most innocent face, and seems generally happy all the time. Her blonde hair is long a flowing and her eyes a bright blue. Her uniform is usually well kept and proper. Her most distinguishing feature about her daily appearance would be the big pink bow she keeps in her hair. When she is about play a ranked duel she usually asks if she can change clothes to her “alter ego”. She puts a very elaborate green sailor magical girl costume with a green bow in her hair, tiara, and a “magic” wand. She becomes the “SUPER DUELING BISHOUJO – MAGIC EARTH” (no actual magical powers included).
Personality Sammy is a very positive person, often looking for the up sides in any situation. Many would consider her Happy-Go-Lucky. She is very much an introvert and is very soft spoken and quiet. If one was to just walk up to her she will shy away from them, but the longer you are around her the more she opens up to you. In her “SUPER DUELING BISHOUJO – MAGIC EARTH” persona, she is generally more outgoing and energetic. She often spouts nonsensical one-liners and performs silly poses. Sammy is also quite the health nut. She goes on a jog every morning, she eats well, and she keeps good hygiene. But most of all, Sammy is a very kind-hearted and compassionate individual. She will help almost anyone if they are in trouble. Despite how good of a duelist she is, Sammy is as dumb as a rock. She is bad at everything that isn’t dueling, drawling, or designing costumes. Most notable is that Sammy is a terrible cook. Even though Sumika often tries to teach her to cook, it always comes out terrible. All of Earth Dorm dreads it when Sammy is even present in the kitchen when food is being cooked. And she is completely clueless of how bad she is. Her stupidity can come at an advantage as opponents tend to underestimate her.
Dorm Earth
History Samantha grew up the daughter of cartoonist and an aerobics instructor. She was an only child and had a very simple childhood. Sammy’s parent took very good care of her, and she’s always been happy. Her father taught her to draw at a young age and art became one of the few things she’s good at. Despite her happy home life, Sammy struggled in school both academically and socially. She has always been very shy and had trouble making friends. Sammy would see the kids in the schoolyard playing Duel Monsters, and at first she didn’t think much of the game. Sammy’s mother, however, saw that Sammy was very lonely so she came up with a plan to get her daughter to connect more with the other kids at school. Sammy’s mom bought some of the cutest Duel Monsters that a young girl might like, and gave them to Sammy. Sammy immediacy connected with her cards, and began to play the game with the other kids. Some cards Sammy still plays to this day was part of the first cards her mom bought her: including Fairy Tail – Snow, Fairy Tail – Rella, Fairy Tail – Luna, and Fairy Tail – Sleeper. As Sammy got older and she got better and better at the game, her parents decided to enroll Sammy in the prestigious dueling academy Harmonia United. At her first year at Harmonia, Sammy managed to befriend Jacquelyn Demoise, a French student. They bonded over both of them being the two shortest students in Earth Dorm. She also became friends with Sakuya Mishuki after Sakuya defended Sammy from bullies from another dorm. At the end of her first year Sammy was ranked 3rd in earth down, below Sakuya who was 2nd, and Jacquelyn who was 1st. At the beginning of her 2nd year, Sakuya managed to defeat Jacquelyn in an embarrassing blowout which made Sakuya the top student to beat in Earth Dorm. While Sakuya was enjoying her top spot, Sammy was having a winning strike of her own. Towards the end of the year Sammy challenged Sakuya in a duel to decide who number 1 in Earth Dorm is. In the intense duel that followed, Sakuya got so frustrated with having to deal with Sammy’s “SUPER DUELING BISHOUJO – MAGIC EARTH” antics and her odd jumbled deck that she misplayed costing her the game. Sakuya was so angry after the duel that she declared Sammy her nemesis and put a dent in their friendship. At the end of the 2nd year, Sammy was ranked 1st in Earth Dorm. Sammy’s dream in Duel Monsters is not to be a top pro-duelist like many of the other students at Harmonia. While being pro-duelist helps hurt her dream, what she really wants to do is start a franchise out of “SUPER DUELING BISHOUJU – MAGIC EARTH”. She plans to get her name out to the public by being a pro-duelist. People would see “MAGIC EARTH” dueling and be interested in the character. She would then sell her comic of “MAGIC EARTH” and she would become a big name. Then she maybe have a T.V. show, and a movie. If Sammy can have a Duel Monster made of her creation, that would be the biggest dream come true. “Magic Earth” was inspired by the magical shows Sammy use to watch as a child, and has been a character she had for a long time. She has always been an imaginative child and the character of “Magic Earth” is one of the characters she made as a child that stuck with her. There have many different variations of the character over the years. Sammy originally named her “Magic Love”, but she changed the name to “Magic Earth” after joining the Earth Dorm. Sammy didn’t start taking on the “Magic Earth” persona until midway though her second year at Harmonia. Sammy use to always be criticized by others for being shy with her cards. Sammy would miss out on using some of her card effects because she is unsure if they would actually work. Sammy got the idea to take on the persona when her friend Aya suggested that Sammy act more like the character from her drawings. Sammy took that advice as “she should become that character”. With the help of Jacquelyn and Aya, Sammy managed to create her costume and so she started wearing the costume during duels. Taking on the persona helped Sammy be more confident in her abilities as a duelist.
Deck theme + list of example cards
Lady Spellcasters
Monsters “Magician Girl” Monsters The Four “Fairy Tail” Monsters Magician’s Valkyria Magician of Faith Divine Grace - Northwemko
Spells Ritual of Grace Arrivalrivals One-Shot Wand Bound Wand Wonder Wand Secret Village of the Spellcasters Secret Sanctuary of the Spellcasters Magicians Unite Magical Dimension
Extra Deck Slacker Magician Drownerd Magician Alchemic Magician
The 4 NPC's
Sakuya is the Earth Dorm rebel prankster. She is usually doing something to get in trouble with the Dorm Leader and the Academy authorities. She is rude and crude, often poking fun of others and not caring what people think. Sammy is the most common victim of her jokes. The relationship of Sakuya and Sammy is defiantly one of frienemies. Samantha is Sakuya’s nemesis. Despite Sakuya being a very smart and skilled duelist, the fact that Sammy (a complete idiot whose deck makes no sense and barely has any strategy) beats her every time frustrates her. But Sammy has always been very kind to Sakuya and has helped her many times. Sakuya may be a hardcore punk rock chic but she is also has a heart of gold. Sakuya has a big heart, and often tries to help those she sees are suffering.
Appearance: Sakuya is punk rock girl. She’s an average 5’5” and thin. She has short black hair with purple highlights that goes over her left eye. Her eyes are also black. She wears a uniform but she has deformed it to point it’s barely recognizable. She wiped the sleeves off the blazer and cut the end so it looks torn at the bottom. She also tore the end of her skirt so it’s smaller. She has her blazer open, revealing a black t-shirt with a skull on it. She wears fingerless gloves, black leggings, and big combat boots. Her blazer is covered in pins of bands and duel monsters. Despite “technically” wearing the uniform, Sakuya is forced to wear a special pin with dorm emblem on the collar of her blazer.
Deck:Metalfoes
Sammy’s best friend is the young French girl Jacquelyn Demoise. While Samantha is shy and reserved, Jacky is a chatterbox and very outgoing. She makes friends easily and as seen as the prime example of an Earth Dorm student. She is kind and compassionate, often offering assistance to those in need. She is also an excellent cook, best of the Earth Dorm students. She is also very stubborn and can be a snob sometimes. She is a sore loser as well, and very opposite that she is neither #1 nor #2 in the dorm.
Appearance: Jacquelyn is short, shorter than even Sammy. She bearly reaches 5’0”. She has long brown hair and green eyes. She wears her uniform prim and proper, and wears a beret.
Deck:Madolche
The gentle giant of the Earth Dorm, Harold Roberts is kind-hearted and quiet boy. He spends most of his time in the forest, observing animals. He is good friends with both Sammy and Sakuya, although he tends to hang around Sakuya. He likes to make sure Sakuya doesn’t get into too much trouble. He a man of little words, but he speaks a lot with his eyes. It’s easy to tell how he feels about certain situation by his stare.
Appearance: Harold is a large guy standing at 6’7”, with a muscular body. He is the strongest person in the Earth Dorm by far. He has shoulder length shaggy black hair and hazel eyes. He wears his uniform the best he can, but it’s doesn’t fit well. He usually seem very uncomfortable in his uniform.
Deck:Gladiator Beast
Aya was one of the worse duelists in the Earth Dorm for her first two years at the academy. She thought about quitting Duel Monsters all together. But after a motivating speech from Sammy, Aya decided to give it another shot with help from Sammy and Jacquelyn. With some cool new friends by her side, Aya was able to climb up the ranks and now she’s 5th place in Earth Dorm. Aya is an outgoing and friendly girl. Aya is very academically smart, and while Sammy helps her out in Duel Monsters, Aya helps Sammy with her poor academic skills.
Appearance: Aya is thin nerdy girl, with long black hair with bangs covering her forehead. She is 5’4”. She had dark eyes and wears thick-rimmed glasses. Aya is very strict to the rules and wears her uniform exactly how it’s written to be worn in the academy handbook. She wears it very plainly with no accessories.
@FairyPrincess Don't take our silence as if we haven't read your sheet btw, we've read over it and haven't found any issues so far, so we're really just waiting on you to get your history up to see how all this ties together.
@Ammokkx I just started getting back into Yugioh, so sorry if the deck rubbed you the wrong way in some places ^^ but I did get the other four up. Thanks for looking at my cs!
@Tenma Tendo ye, me and sat already read over it. Certainly looks good, but we want to give Fox a fair shot so we're also giving him some time to get a completed CS up and compare the two, then pick the best one.
Appearance John stands at 5' 9" with broad shoulders with a athletic build and Tan complexion. He wears his light brown hair in a Taper and Fade and it is complimented by his Hazel eyes. A small by noticeable scar streaks just under his chin. Becoming more noticeable when he hasn't shaved for several days due to the missing facial hair. Although that is a rare occurrence.
He wears his uniform with Pride. Always properly ironed and pressed. Even his pants have a perfect crease down the center. His hair always has some sort of gel in it and he often wears some cologne. This is all to keep up his facade about him being more Wealthy then he is. It usually works. He also wears non corrected glasses to complete the look.
Personality If people would assume John to be the typical rich kid stereotype, they would be dead wrong. In general public he is a very Charming individual that seems humble and kind to anyone. Even a little too formal to most. Regardless of their background or Dorm, John finds friends with all groups. He talks with a sophistic calm voice and is usually very knowledgeable about most topics and his teachers would confirm this as he is a Star student.
Some more pessimistic individuals would say it is all an act and he is hiding something. They would be right. Although it isn't as malicious as the Naysayers would think. He only hides his past from everyone and the True reason he came to the school. He also hides his short temper, which is usually built throughout the day and released with violent video games or loud Rock music.
During intense duels his 'street' side begins to come out. His accent changing from a low sophistication to a harsh slang. His anger also begins to peak out. It wouldn't be too hard for the ones who have been with him since day one at the Dorm to pick up on these subtle personality changes, but no one has yet found the truth to his past.
History John Joseph Graham IV was born in New York city, USA. His family was quite wealthy for most of his childhood until his Father was eventually caught up in a Large group that was involved in Insider Trading. This tore his Parents apart as his Father became an Abusive Alcoholic fighting the case. Although John's Mother, Mariam was a tough Women and took her Twelve year old son and Fifteen Year old Daughter away from the Home and to a small apartment in Tokyo, Japan. With them she took half of her Husbands savings and a collection of Vehicles.
While the money lasted a bit, it eventually began to ran out. Especially when his mother had to pay for his Sister's college funds. While they didn't live in a crime infested area of the city, it was still quite low income and the environment took it's tole on John. Several times he was caught and charged with his favorite crime. Gambling. The gambling that involved the Card game: Duel Monsters. No matter what his Mother threatened him with or punishment received, John continued to find his way on the streets. Not only for the fun of the game, but the nice money he made for someone of his young age. Of course, it was also a rebellious act from the fact that his former pampered life never brought much action to him and while no longer Rich he claimed he could properly fit himself in the Tokyo Ghetto.
John's Mother was a smart Woman. She knew no matter what she did, she couldn't stop him. He had this drive that she never had seen in him before. She wanted to direct this into something he could do for the rest of his life. This is how she discovered Harmonia United. Deciding to send him there so he could use his drive for something better than crime. Maybe even one day becoming famous and bringing honor back to his family. With a substantial amount of their money saved, she bough him his supplies and sent him off the Summer he had graduated. Much to his joy.
In his first year he was very... Average. The culture shock of these duelist trying to be professionals instead of just gambling for drug money made him feel out of place. To counteract this he became something he wasn't. Using his prior knowledge from his Rich life style as a child, he dressed, talked, and acted as if he was still a true member of the Graham family back in the United States. It wasn't until the beginning of the second year did he shine at the Academy. His drive renewed after hearing from his sister that his Mom was becoming sick. Stage Two Breast Cancer to be exact. The medical bills were stacking and with her not able to work often and his Sister being a full time Student the bills were becoming more than expensive. Now Jack had something more than himself to Duel for. Ironically it involved money, a constant Demon in his life that he wasn't new to.
Dorm Dark
Deck theme
CyberDark
Monsters
Cyberdark Dragons
Cyber Dragons
Red-Eyes Dragons
Hunter Dragon
Masked Dragon
Spells
Cyberdark Inferno
Cyberdark Impact
The Claw of Hermos
Foolish Burial
Overload Fusion
Polymerization
Swords of Revealing Light
Dragon Nails
Stop Defense
Traps
Red-Eyes Fang with Chain
Crush Card Virus
Trap Hole
Rivalry of Warlords
Jar of Avarice
Gamble
Nutrient Z
Final Attack Orders
Extra Deck
Cyberdark Dragon
Cyberdarkness Dragon
Chimeratech Megafleet Dragon
Red-Eyes Black Dragon Sword
Cyber End Dragon
Cyber Twin Dragon
Cyber Eternity Dragon
The 4 NPC's
-Description- The Second best in the Dark Dorm. Yoshii is also from Tokyo slums and is the best friend and Rival to John. A extremely gently man, but many wouldn't be able to guess from his looks. He also isn't what you would call an intellectual. He never received much of a Education growing up, but has a firm grasp of street smarts and commonsense. Definitely known as the friendliest of the Dark Dorm and the one that ends up pulling the most Ladies. Appearance: Yoshii is a rough looking man. With a large scar across his forehead and crossing down his left cheek, some find it scary while others find it unique. He is almost 6'5" with a wide frame completely composed of muscle. A beast of a man. Like John he takes Pride in his uniform, always making sure it looks presentable in public. Almost always wearing some kind of designer Sunglasses. Deck: Chaos(Light+Dark)
-Description- One of the few Females in the Dark dorm, she is feared by most of her Dorm. She resembles a Model which usually tricks other Students of assuming a beautiful personality. Although most know her as a extreme drama queen, arrogant, and cruel. The word 'Mean' would be a extreme understatement. She is never really seen hanging out with anyone and anyone who would talk to her for five minutes would know why. Nicked named Satan by her ever so growing 'Fan base'. Appearance: Green eyes, long Blonde hair, and a light complexion Kiya resembles a Fashion Model. Standing at only 5'5" she is a little demon that crawled out of Hell itself. Wearing a Red bow and always having longer Red painted nails in addition to her uniform. Deck: Blackwing
-Description- Another Foreigner in the Dark Dorm. He is extremely quiet to most his peers and is usually seen alone most of the time in the Academy. Preferring to keep most his friends online rather than in Real life. Although he is extremely smart and is a A+ student in every subject. Knowing anything inside and out about duel monster. While a loner, he is usually overly respectful to any that talk to him and is able to properly interact socially, just choosing not too. Appearance: Having a dark complexion, medium height, and a fatter build. Also having Black curly hair, Brown eyes, and extremely hairy. He resembles someone who hails from his home country of Jordan. Although his uniform slowly gets worse as the week passes before resetting after the weekend. Deck: Destiny HERO
-Description- Known as the most annoying person in the whole academy. A Prankster, Spaz, and Creep. He has gotten by the skin of his teeth every year, due to being a terrible student. In conduct and in grades. When he isn't in class, he is probably skipping to make a prank or spy on girls. The school matters little much to him and only truly gets away with so many of his antics due to his Family being an extremely wealthy Family and one with many connections. Still he duels well enough. Some would say extremely well for the Grades he receives or his personality. His Toon Deck representing him more than any other. Appearance: Esumi is Thin and tall, standing at 6'2" with a extremely light complexion. With messy Black hair and Blue eyes. His uniform is almost always dirty and wrinkled. His collar almost always flipped and his Tie loose around his neck. He is always wearing some kind of Designer belt, golden watch, and multiple rings and chains. Showing off his wealth in an attempt to hide his nature to newcomers. Deck: Toon-Monsters
@FairyPrincess yeah I don't see an issue with the sheet myself but... such a major part of her character is primarily left out of the history, like did she have this persona BEFORE or AFTER joining the academy?
like I would love to know myself, is it because she watched a ton of magical girl shows as a child or did she have this persona because of something happening in her life? did she create this persona to be more confident like tell me more
@FoxSoxs@Tenma Tendo Aight, so me and Sat sat around a round table and discussed this for the lesser part of an hour, and the TL;DR is that Tenma's through unanimously. I'll just sum up what both me and him thought of them:
Me
For Tenma's, I just love the amount of varied characters in it. There's a good balance and they feel like a cohesive whole that's not out of place in the universe. Felicitas seems like a charming and likable character and the other 4 feel like good additions to fill in the gaps. I'm not a fan of how many foreigners there are, but it's not a major issue. The BG is nothing special but still solid and overall it feels like they feel like a good addition to the cast.
Meanwhile, I'm not much a fan of the way Fox handled his characters. Some feel out of place in the YGO universe by being either too dark or realistic. (and with realistic, I mean just not anime enough) Another problem I feel is that there's quite a bit of overlap with archetypes already present, particularly in Kiya as she feels a bit too similar to my Emi. The backstory of the main guy also isn't getting me sold on the guy; it feels too grounded in our world and less like something you'd see in a YGOverse. We know Jounouchi's dad was an alcoholic and that he had a rough life, sure, but I'm not even sure if the anime even kept that aspect of his backstory. It was mainly a manga and S0 thing, while further series made backstories a little more light and surreal. The darkest one we had was in Yusei, and if you stop to think about it, his entire backstory is "My dad accidentally nuked a city and now I grew up in the slums, but I still got super good at card games and made a ton of friends," which isn't the pinnacle of realism lol.
Satoshi
He was just on-board with Tenma the moment the sheet went up and figured Fox would have a hard time trumping it. I didn't get a lot of details, but he's pretty freakin' alright with the dorm.
Meanwhile, his reaction to Fox wasn't great. He doesn't really like any of the characters and feel like they don't really feel like they have a reason for being in Dark, the dorm with the library and in a cool shade all the time. He feels that "dark character = dark dorm" was the justification there, rather than some personalities that happened to resonate with the staff. He also really doesn't like the backstory for similar realism issues as I described above, especially with how tacked on the love of rock and videogames seems to be. He just feels the characters belong more in a different setting and not this lighthearted series of 'Yu-Gi-Oh!'
@FairyPrincess yeah I don't see an issue with the sheet myself but... such a major part of her character is primarily left out of the history, like did she have this persona BEFORE or AFTER joining the academy?
like I would love to know myself, is it because she watched a ton of magical girl shows as a child or did she have this persona because of something happening in her life? did she create this persona to be more confident like tell me more
also, if it is before why earth specifically?
consider yourself accepted after explaining this
Oh yes. I guess I could explain more about her persona. I'll write some more stuff up and answer those questions you have.