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@Rex The character looks interesting! I think you meant to put Erubesco instead of Liberty for his backstory, though, as Liberty isn't the faction that has nobility- Erubesco is.
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oops, sorry about that. I'll change it
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@Rex Cool, just tell me once you've made the edits, and I'll accept him right away. c:
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all set, I also noticed I left something out in the weakness part of my character sheet. I changed it as well. long story short: because the Liquid Metal uses and consumes blood. The user can be subjected to hypovolemic Shock and Anemia.
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@Rex Sounds good! He's approved! Feel free to join the Discord, also, if you'd like, as I tend to offer more in-depth updates on there.
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will do, just a heads up. my username if different on discord then it is here.
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@Durnehviir He looks really good! The thing I would like for you to change, though, is him being a Prince. There’s only one King (and likely one Queen) in Erubesco, and at the moment they’re sort of being left ambiguous for a few reasons. You’re free to have him be the child of a Lord and Lady, though, as Lords and Ladies are essentially royalty in their own right.


Ah! I misunderstood. For some reason I thought there were multiple royal lines. (Lile how there are multiple sections of Liberty and their Councillors) She is more of an important lady as you say. I wanted it to be a minor facet of his life. Like some royal from some unimportant line under (and loyal) to the primary monarchy. I will edit accordingly~
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@Durnehviir It’s an easy mistake to make! Tell me once you make the edit, so I can check over it and approve.
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You know who it is. :D



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@EchoicChamber Apologies for the slowness - I apparently have the in-laws visiting this weekend so haven't finished off my sheet. Any downtime I have tomorrow at work I'll put into it but I'll have it up by Monday at the latest!
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@VitoftheVoid Both approved!

@Jinxer That's fine! I'm not gonna ban anyone from being able to join the RP if they have to take a while. I do really appreciate getting updates regarding the situation, though!
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Finally finished my character, sorry for taking so long. @EchoicChamber


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@CommisarJhon He looks good! There's a few little things that I'd like to mention first, though. In Liberty, gemstones probably aren't farmed or regarded in the same way as they are in Erubesco, as Liberty is all about efficiency, and there likely aren't careers in athleticism. I also noticed his desire to be a warrior is actually quite similar to the Erubescian mindset, but I think it could make for a sort of interesting contrast between him being a member of Liberty and working against Erubesco.
I'd suggest making a few edits and changing the careers of his parents potentially, but other than that I don't really see any glaring problems, so he's approved (though I'd still recommend making those edits, as I said). (:
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Removed out royalty, kept the nickname Prince but as a reference to the "storybook character".

I also realize I think I had to have been drunk when I did this history.
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@Durnehviir I think you missed a Prince in his bio, unless the lady told him that he was a Prince on purpose. I'd also recommend putting which sector he's a Speaker in, that way he its more specialized as to what his exact duties are. Aside from that, consider him approved!
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@EchoicChamber Alright! Thanks for the suggestion, edited some parts:

- Changed Athlete and Gemcutter to Drill Instructor and Scientist for his parents.
- Changed synthetic crystal to simply quartz crystal with above average electric potential.
- Made some word changes in general for History part.

Let me know if changes are good with ya or if there more suggestions you have to offer for the character.

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@CommisarJhon Looks good! Approved!
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