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Looking forward to the finished product! Some first remarks:

I do suggest you look at making her less of "good at anything". I am particularly talking about her skills and such. Maybe try and outline where she excels, is mediocre in and what's she's bad at.

Also, making her 25 would mean that she was 21 at the end of hostilities. So that would have given her just over a year of actual field experience.
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Cheers, asked some clarifying questions on Discord, but really appreciate the feedback!
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Double post, but updated some stuff, chiefly in the interview section, any unofficial feedback would be great (from anyone really, I'm not the most knowledgeable about the lore and I tried some new stylistic things that might not have worked as well as I had intended).
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Just to clarify, the mention of Darth Embrus's apprentice was cleared/discussed with @Jorick ahead of time.
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At ease. You've passed muster. Report for duty.
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Approved.
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Due to a sudden and crippling bout of boredom:

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