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I felt a need to write, so I wrote this writing sample, which is really more of an introduction post, but them's the breaks.

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Name: Maël DuClair

Age: 31

Appearance: More on the inconspicuous side of things might describe it best. He's 6'4", of average muscularity and slightly overweight. His face features blue eyes, a pointed nose, thin lips and a beard trimmed half-heartedly. Jeans, a black leather jacket and a hoodie for the more rainy days are his best friends. Aside from the cigs, of course.




Concept: Rookie with hard to explain talents, unless...


Powers/skills: The DuClairs are a family of nobles which can be tracked back deep into medieval France, but much of their fame and money has disappeared over the countless turmoils and societal changes of past centuries. Still they maintain a quite significant fortune and economic influence, but only in Europe. The American branch, dating back to the heyday of steamship-powered migration at the end of the 19th century, has never made much progress past the average in their new environment and isn't paid much attention to by family headquarters.

A record in the family register states that Beaumont DuClair, one of Maël's grand-grand-grand-grand-(...)-fathers, once had a joyful night with a woman later accused to be a witch. While she found a fiery death at the stake he subsequently was regarded as a victim having been seduced. A disproportionate fraction of his children and their children in turn either showed signs of mental illnesses, were physically crippled or generally rather frail and short-lived. What was deemed to be an 'evil curse' acted upon him by said witch seemed to fade away over time though and there is no lack of more strictly scientific explanations in present day.

Maël's situation is an entirely different nut to chew on though. He's the first down the bloodline who both inherited enough of the demonic seed planted by the succubus and whose human nature exhibits enough compatibility not for him to end up like his unfortunate predecessors. It's a component rather diluted given the many centuries that have passed since its origin, but it's there and -- that's the actual problem -- never considered explaining itself towards its owner.

Maël can tap into some demonic prowess, temporarily enhancing attributes such as strength, speed and (maybe most important for an investigator) conventional/magical perception to levels that would otherwise be undue not only for someone of his lifestyle, stature and overall background. However, in this state, he also suffers from a bunch of drawbacks such as an alteration of his skin and eyes that might attract or frighten the public to a disadvantageous degree. He becomes generally more prone to violence with bare hands, teeth and blood in particular and overreacts more easily with a certain disregard of his own well-being. It's not like there would be a simple on/off switch, instead it's more like a ritual during which he pushes himself to the borders of his humanity. It also takes time of forced calmness to get himself back to normal again.


Things your character wants to happen (probably wont):
  • Maël joined the group of paranormal investigators because he himself is, partly, paranormal. He hopes to discover more of his own nature and how to control it properly. This simply can't be done in the ordinary public environment.
  • Find out if there is any way to predict or even influence what will happen to his own childs, should he ever found a family. Too many of those have died in the past.
  • Not get dragged into the abyss by some full-blooded demon or get captured by crazy exorcists who might show interest in him when he is blazing like a star for those who can see it.


Things you as a writer wants to happen (maybe will):
  • Cry 'Havoc!,' and let slip the personal frenzy! Once more unto the warp core breach!
  • A good manhunt, maybe ? Be it him being the hunter or the hunted.
  • Some comedy is always good, be it ordinary or of a sarcastic subtype
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One could interpret this as a not so subtle hint to let him switch over to his second ego as often as possible, because then he's at least the least frenchmen-like?
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I'm trapped in a writing Vortex, updates and decisions soon!
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Careful, writing vortexes are well known to be fatal
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After much consideration I have selected the following characters for the first chapter of this story.

@POOHEAD189@Jarl Coolgruuf@Fetzen@Rapid Reader

Thank you very much to all who applied, I really enjoyed all your characters but I have to follow my instinct to keep the cast small.

If your character was selected please move them to the characters section when you have a moment. RP should commence early next week!
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Thanks for having me, excited to jump into this story. :)
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Clive showing up to the first combat encounter

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@Penny Don't mind if I stick around then to read the RP and for another chance to hang out with you fine folk.
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@Fetzen Wait a minute...

Appearance: More on the inconspicuous side of things might describe it best. He's 6'4", of average muscularity and slightly overweight

So... the kind of 6'4 people just don't notice?!
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>More on the inconspicuous side of things
>He's 6'4"

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Oh hey didn't see you there! *cranes her neck*
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Wait... You notice that now @Penny?

If I had known earlier that this game is run using an approve first, read later strategy...



Aside from that I'm confident that the statement in the character sheet holds true at least for the part of the world I live in (western Europe). It doesn't make people turn their heads often in the public. And this is a paranormal world with computers capable of some magic and horrible nightmares from distant space times.
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Do they also grind your bones to make their bread there?
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So... the kind of 6'4 people just don't notice?!

FBI director James Comey?
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Seen here not standing out :P

Literally every single man in this photo is thinking to himself 'Look how freakishly tall this dude is!'
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True but you never think of him like that behind a podium or on TV!
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Well if I can pretend magic is real I can believe someone six foot four is inconspicuous. Speaking of magic, I will probably have the first post up later today.
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<Snipped quote by Penny>
FBI director James Comey?


Seen here not standing out :P

Literally every single man in this photo is thinking to himself 'Look how freakishly tall this dude is!'


James Comey, at least according to quite a bunch of internet sources, is 6'8 and not 6'4. If 6' are more of an average height than he's as far away from my character's height than my character's height away from the average. We're talking about a +100% deviation of the measurand here that's just flat-out ignored by both of you. Don't tell me this is not a quite significant difference.




And now some nitpicking from my side. Sorry, but having participated in this entire debate the way you did makes your character the prime target for a more close inspection @Jarl Coolgruuf :)

>> "There's really nothing of note about him appearance wise and that's exactly how he prefers to look."
>> Just spent the previous two sentences on pointing oout how not normal his eyes are: "A prominent brow ridge frames tired, yet piercing eyes that seem to read your thoughts when you make eye contact for too long. Other than that, he appears like any other guy and would easily melt into any crowd were it not for his eyes."



So to sum things up: If you want to ridicule either me, or my character, then please have the decency to do so without using false facts and do so for everybody else equally where it is due!
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