Shit we may as well just make the eventual Avengers Tower clothing prohibited, bahahaha. JK.

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This is exactly how Caty will feel about the beautiful badass women on the team. Like how can she not?

Danny: The men tho!

I have been considering using a young Jason Mamoa as a modified version of Namor McKenzie. He would be a new mutant like the others, but instead of talking to ocean life or anything like that, his initial powerset would be more akin to waterbending from the Avatar world. Eventually that would progress to bloodbending, and he'd be an antagonist to the team for a while. At some point that might begin to shift, perhaps after he's betrayed by Wilson Fisk or something. He would form a loose alliance with the Avengers at that point, but he probably would not become a bonafide member until much later on, deep into the final Thanos arc.

I was going to wait for Kindred to post, but he can always add in the part about Caty explaining the mist to Samira retroactively. I'm gonna start working on the next big post to move the plot along.

Sorry about that. Would've posted sooner, but the last two days kind of got away from me.

Sorry all, had some RL stuff come up. I'll try to get my next IC post done tonight, but it may not be posted until tomorrow. It's gonna be another long one, which means a lot of proofreading and editing, lol.

This looks sweet!

I took light control of everyone just to get all our characters into a single group. Hope no one minds.

That game looks super cool! I hadn’t heard of it before, but now I’m pumped.

Yeah, I was a bit confused as to how Donny and Co. ended their convo and got over to where the others were. I was honestly thinking that Petra would win in the battle of wills with her brother, and so they’ll probably just dip and go to the hospital. Donny going and interacting with the others will give them just a degree of separation, anyway, so it’ll be easy to pull them in.

That game looks super cool! I hadn’t heard of it before, but now I’m pumped.

Yeah, I was a bit confused as to how Donny and Co. ended their convo and got over to where the others were. I was honestly thinking that Petra would win in the battle of wills with her brother, and so they’ll probably just dip and go to the hospital. Donny going and interacting with the others will give them just a degree of separation, anyway, so it’ll be easy to pull them in.

Feel free to retroactively implant their back and forth as taking place prior to Donny walking over towards the interns. My thoughts were that because Caty had drawn attention to herself on stage, it seemed realistic that most of our characters would approach her for answers as the crowd did. Plus I wanted to give all of our characters a reason to gather in one spot to better facilitate them meeting up in the future. By having Donny walk over and be invested in David's state, that gives him a reason to check on him later at the hospital, which in turn would help connect Waylon and Petra to everyone else.

I figured if we didn't anchor them all together in a way, then naturally, they may go their separate ways afterwards. If Petra and Waylon leave and go to the hospital alone, they could always meet back up with Donny later and follow him to check on David.

I think this might be a good time to clarify what the next part of the story will be. Is the team supposed to be forming that night? Because I thought that part of the function of this was to have everyone meet and maybe establish that whichever characters who end up forming it at first know which of the others have powers.

If the idea is that they all group up over concern for David, I’m confused as to why anyone outside of the interns would be more concerned for him than whatever other pressing issues they have.

I expected that part of the first arc would be the main core of the team (interns+Luke?) forming, and then bringing in the others.

I hope it goes without saying, but I hope nothing here comes across as argumentative or anything! I’m genuinely trying to clarify and get everyone’s input, haha.

I figured the team wouldn't form until at least the next day. With SHIELD presence in the city and the scientists framing the interns for the whole shebang. Effectively making them fugitives until they can Avenge the people and clear their names.

Yeah, they wouldn't form as an actual team until later, the idea of having them group up around the interns at the park is very short term, just to establish a connection so that they don't go their separate ways and never speak to each other again. As it stands right now, there is nothing connecting Donny, Owen, Waylon, and Petra to the others any more than the hundred-plus other survivors in the park. I figured the group needed a reason to at least be on speaking terms with each other. They will most likely get separated when everyone is taken to different hospitals and between the FBI and then SHIELD being called in the following day, it would seem increasingly unrealistic that the characters would all gather in one place unless a familiarity with each other was threaded in during the crisis at the park.

Though I understand how my post could have come off as confusing, and I'd be willing to rewrite it and point it in a different direction if the four of you would prefer. We're a team, after all. I want us all to be happy :).

Plus I wanted to give everyone something to work with for their posts. If just Luke and the interns form a core group, then the other characters would essentially have nothing to do in posts unless they were on solo side quests of sorts. It also makes it difficult for me to move the overall narrative forward if everyone is scattered and unfamiliar with each other.

Hmmm. I have work tonight, but give me some time to think of a different solution and I'll rework my post to avoid forcing everyone together.

Personally I don't have a problem with the post but my character isn't getting moved much. I'm just waiting for Sincerely to post before I post again.

I've added this above my post:



I won't have time to work on it tonight because I'll be at work, but I'll get the rewrite done tomorrow morning if I can and get it posted. I'm really sorry, everyone. It wasn't my intention to force anyone's character into something they weren't comfortable with.

Okay, so I've been mulling over ways to rework my post, and I think the villain section is fine since that takes place separately. In the first part, I'm thinking of rolling back the arrival of the emergency services and the feds and removing the reference to Luke and Donny going towards Caty and David. Instead of moving the overall narrative at a faster pace, I'll slow it down to give the characters more time to interact in their three current smaller groups. The emergency services will still show up since 911 is being flooded, but I'll hold off on the news cameras and feds coming until a future post. To prevent myself from pushing us forward too fast again, I will no longer be writing the really long posts like I have. I will restrict myself to two or three paragraphs per character and leave it at that. I won't introduce new major plot elements until we've exhausted all possible small talk/individual character interactions so that no one feels cheated or rushed.

Sorry all, I was trying to work on the updated post today I was pretty tired from work the night before and was having issues focusing. I keep writing parts and then backspacing and trying something different, wanting to come up with something that everyone will be happy with. I have work the next few nights as well, so the final rewrite may not come until my days off. I'll keep you all updated.

So I think the best way to get back on the right track is for each of you post your thoughts on the situation, where you feel I went wrong in the IC, and what you would like to see moving forward. That will help me steer us back in a good direction.

I don't think you went wrong anywhere personally. I liked the post as it was, but that's just me.