An Oriental Story [Martial Arts Themed RP] - LF Force Master

[FantasyChic]

@Holy Soldier Not like I was planning on Mei getting pregnant anyway

[Lexicon]

@Holy Soldier Son of a...wait, so if the Yun are infertile, then how do they lay eggs in the first place? I mean, I assumed two Yun wouldn't be capable of producing children, but a Yun and a member of another race might be able to. And that doesn't derail any plans I had. I wasn't planning on Amaya getting pregnant or anything like that lol.

[FantasyChic]

Amaya and Mei are gonna have to repopulate the Yun race, it seems.

[POOHEAD189]

@Holy Soldier

Eladar Takeda

The Stray Tiger

Age: 26
Region of Origin: West
Hometown: Xang Jian
Deity: White Tiger
Master: Blade Master
Gender: Male
Race: Jin
Height: 5'9
Weight: 150 pounds
Hair: His hair is thick, black and worn in an unruly fashion, pulled into a ponytail at the back of his head.
Eyes: Dark and sharp like swords themselves. Even feeling a bit displeased, a dangerous look comes upon him with those eyes.
Skin: Khaki colored skin, tanned by long hours training in the sun. His hands are lined and callused.
Handedness: True Blademasters train both, but in an odd mixture, he wields his sword in his write hand, and a pen with his left when need be.
Scars: Various battle scars line his chest and back, and a sword cut is still visible on his left cheek. Four scars along his back, two criss crossing on his right bicep and one on the back of his left hand
Tattoos: None

His hair is black and worn in an unruly fashion, pulled into a ponytail at the back of his head. His skin is tanned, close to Olive colored. He has a noticeable fit and trim body, with practiced hard muscle. Eladar is slim though, and he relies more on speed than strength. His face is not unhandsome, if not for his very dark, severe eyes. Even feeling a bit displeased, a dangerous look comes upon him with those eyes. He has a small scar on his left cheek, as well as 4 scars along his back, 2 criss crossing on his right bicep and one on the back of his left hand, and various cuts on his back. He wears a torn wool vest over a grey-tan shirt. He wears Hakama pants, tied by a blue sash belt. He wears a sarashi over both of his hands and forearms, leaving his fingers unwrapped. His feet are covered in open toed sandals, though he is not above wearing sturdy traveling shoes (kutsu) when donning his armor. His armor is a sleeveless breastplate of very sturdy burgundy scale mail with a matching Haidate. He wears kote Gauntlets and Suneate.

Likes: Kata, Training, Fishing, Horseback riding, art, and poetry.
Dislikes: Braggarts, Promiscuity, Cheaters, Deceit, couples.
Goals: To slay bandits, warlords, and those who use Dark Chi/Ki. To live content by himself. To slay his traitorous brother.
Fears: Giving in to a life of mediocrity.
Mannerisms: Eladar has a tendency to break the status quo, perhaps challenging a haughty Lord who constantly boasts about his combat prowess to put him in his place. This BladeMaster also has a soft spot for strays, both children and animals, or even adults who feel lost, though he'll not be their crutch for long. He often does not engage in much conversation with someone unless they have shared a battlefield together.
Psychological Condition: Dark dreams of his past.
Superstitions: None
Social Pressures/Problems:

• Is not very warm or comforting to those who need it, other than a kind smile perhaps and a pat on the back.
• Tactless to those whom he thinks deserve no respect.
• Has a hard time expressing his feelings.

Parents: Fukishama Takeda - Deceased
Mother (unknown. Deceased)
Siblings: Yan Shang - Alive
Rivals: Yan Shang
Enemies:

• Yan Shang Takeda - Brother
• Fukojutsi Tar'gaidon - Bandit Leader
• Koromomotatsu - Dark Assassin

Weapons: Chokutō
Skills:

• Herbal remedies/Healing light wounds
• Smithing
• Fishing

Powers:
Whirlwind Tiger: Designed to distract a single opponent, or defeat multiple opponents, Whirlwind Tiger is a fierce maelstrom of whirring blade strikes. To the casual eye, it would look like a typhoon of blades had engulfed Eladar.

Whirlwind Tiger (Unarmed): Summoning the Spirit of the West, Eladar uses a subversion of his sword attack to make a devastating unarmed technique. His hands are as dangerous as tiger claws, ripping, striking, and grappling his opponents.

Forge Fire: Can summon his Ki and give him limited fire manipulation along his hands, or even his mouth in a breath attack.

Predators Glare: A power of his inner chi and will. Strikes dumb those with weaker wills if he can take the sufficient time to gather his chi strength. A difficult technique to master, and does not work on experienced fighters.

Searing Sword: Transforms the sword's blade scalding, allowing it to cut through most material like butter and burning/scorching any flesh it even goes near (save the user).

Current Story: Samurai Lord Fukishima Takeda returned from war with a child swaddled in cloth, his bastard whom he named Eladar. The middle child of the Fukishima family, much to the Lord's wife's displeasure. Still, he grew up among his brothers and felt as if he truly belonged. Until he was age 12, when his family's manor was ransacked and his older brother and father were killed.

He fled in the night from the unseen force of Ronin, finally being discovered by his soon-to-be master Jian Bing, the White Tiger of the West. Eladar thought the man was a beast sent to kill him, and attacked. He was easily defeated, but the master saw Eladar's fighting spirit, even through the pain of his family's death.

For a decade he was trained in the art of the blade, learning swiftly and mastering his chi and ki usage. His master was tough and firm, brooking no room for weakness or slacking off. Jian Bing did not even allow Eladar to train with a steel sword until he himself could forge one. Many years Eladar spent in the smithy, honing his body into hard muscle, and giving him a keen eye for craftsmanship. Still, the Tiger of the West learned to care for Eladar and truly chose him to be his successor, watching over him day and night.

He gave him much freedom, some summers allowing him to travel and see the world. Eladar visited the North and the frozen mountains, and South with its innovations in Gunpowder, but it was the East that he felt a kinship with. He remembered his father telling him East had been where he had originally come from, and to honor this he taught himself various techniques that are reminiscent of both the Tiger and the Dragon. During his travels he fought in various battles as a sellsword or local hero, but always returned home to hone his skills and blade in the West.

It wasn't until he was 23 that he learned through a rumor and meditation that it was his youngest brother who, even at the young age of 10, allowed the enemy Ronin to infiltrate the castle so he could become the Lord. Now, his half Brother Yan Shang leads a group of marauders from a base in the mountains, while he flatters and lies to other Nobles vying for power at the Old Manor the Takeda brothers grew up in.

Eladar and Yan Shang have fought on various occasions, but despite Eladar's skills and powers, Yan wields a special blade imbued with dark chi that allows him to hold his own...for now.
For two years, Eladar has been out of the West, traveling and looking to hone his skills even further, a stray swordsman, and the Ronin who will become the successor to Jian Bing.

Damn, took me all night. But here he is for your consideration!

[Holy Soldier]

@LexiconI'm leaving that as an in-game secret.

[Holy Soldier]

@POOHEAD189@MilkmanAfter reviewing both CSes, I had to give Blade Master to Milkman. The reason why was the way he tailored his character was very believable. I can also tell that he took his time with it and didn't write it all in one go, allowing him to come up with a good story. All of his skills revolved around the Blade Master and didn't dip into other classes. I felt that Eladar's technique "Whirlwind Tiger (Unarmed)" was Kung Fu Master, "Forge Fire" Force Master, "Predator's Glare" I don't know what exactly that would be but it wouldn't be a chi move if it affects someone else without the user needing to lay hands on the person. If you mention any "Summon Of X," even metaphorically or it might have been literal without the actual summon, you're playing Summoner. Eladar is a name from Tolkien fiction and isn't Asian at all. I told everyone that they needed Asian names in this game, so you didn't thoroughly read the OOC or you simply forgot. You used the same "Young Brother gone evil" concept as your competitor. Regardless, Poo your CS looked absolutely rushed and you tried to make a hybrid of techniques, which is not allowed. It makes me wonder if you even have time for this game since it took you so long to write a CS. In the end, the CS was rushed and forced into one day, and not even formidable to compete with a juicy SL. If you don't have time for this game, then don't join. It is rude when someone who clearly has no time for another RP joins a game and then up and leaves. It puts a major gap in the story, especially in a game with only six people in it. So if you're planning to do that or if anyone is planning to pull that move, please leave now. I rather put a writer who actually has time for this game in your spot.

[POOHEAD189]

@Holy Soldier You're making a lot of assumptions about me there. I don't mind the verdict, but I spent 4 hours working on this, and to call me rude and assuming I'd quit after spending half the night on this is quite rude yourself. A simple 'no' could have sufficed. Plus I'd put up a W.I.P. earlier because I'd assume you'd see the name and maybe say "Not a good choice for that." But oh well.

@Milkman Congratz!

[Milkman]

Thanks for the congratz Poo. I am looking forward too starting the rp

[Holy Soldier]

@Milkman@CelticSoldier@Lexicon@FantasyChic

Since we have 90% of the characters, I went ahead and made the OOC, which can be found here.

Hopefully, we'll get the Force Master with the OOC being up. I'll also be working on the IC. Feel free to move your CSes over and add any more powers you think your character might need because once the game officially starts, you can't add anymore.

[Holy Soldier]

I'm still looking for a Force Master for this game. The player will have to be disciple of the Dragon Grand Master. I'm starting to wonder if the slot is cursed.

[Sunbather]

I'm very interested in playing either a Lyn or a Gon Force Master, if it is still available. I've never played non-humans before, but it sounds fun. I'll get to work on a sheet as soon as I can.

Edit: I'd generally be more interested in the Blade Master though. I saw discussion about it, but it's not yet crossed off in the OP. I just want to ensure it is taken, before I settle on Force Master instead.

[Holy Soldier]

@SunbatherHere is the link to the main game Game.

All roles are taken except for the Dragon Disciple Force Master. We need that person because his/her school is about to be attacked in the SL.

[Sunbather]

I'll try and get something good up as quick as I can @Holy Soldier. I know you're quite keen on quality, which I appreciate, but it likely will take me a bit to get everything just right. :)

[Holy Soldier]

@SunbatherNo rush.

[Sunbather]

I'm struggling a bit with pulling off my idea in a way that suits the roleplay and respects the role-restrictions (wouldn't wanna even try and dilute the roles, of course), so I apologize if this is taking long. I'm mainly posting this here so that a.) you are updated and b.) if someone else is interested and has something at the ready, they don't have to even consider it barging inbetween or something. :p

[Holy Soldier]

@SunbatherAll you got to do is bring your character concept to life and if there is anything you don't understand, then ask me.