[OOC] Harry Potter: The New Era

[Nyctophilia]

This looks really interesting. I'll certainly get a character up later.

[Nyctophilia]

Name:
Phoenix Woods

Age:
11

Gender:
Male

Appearance

Additional Appearance Information:
At 5' 1", Phoenix is certainly taller than the usual 11 year old you can find. Behind the brown hair and black glasses, green eyes shine bright with intelligence and awareness. A sharp nose and thin lips are the only other features of his simple face. His body is slightly lanky, and is hardly noticeable under thick clothes.

House:
Ravenclaw

Wand:
-Hawthorne Wood
-Unicorn Hair
-14 and 1/2"
-Unyielding Flexibility

Wand

Blood Type:
Half-Blood
-Muggle Mother

Personality:
Phoenix is normally quiet and independent, more comfortable tinkering with his various inventions rather than with people.
He is highly intelligent, but hardly ever shares much with others. He is also a perfectionist, and constantly self doubts himself to the point where it it crippling.

History:
Phoenix was born into a slightly rich family of four. His brother, Alexander, is homeschooled. His mother is a muggle that had fallen in love with his father, and even more when he warned her that he was a wizard. They conceived Phoenix on April 3rd, two years after their marriage. Growing up, Phoenix was slightly spoiled and well taken care of. He has an affinity for Charms, and looks forward to the class.

Pet:
Cyrus (Barn Owl)

Cyrus

RP Example:
Tugging at the uncomfortably-tight tie around his neck, Phoenix observes himself in the old, dusty mirror. With a sigh, he retrieves a rag from under the sink and wipes off a streak of dust, just enough so that he can see. The tie is still refusing to straighten, and he only has a few minutes before he has to join his family in the living room.

"Weddings are too much work for what it is worth..." he mutters to himself.

[canaryrose]

@Nyctophilia I have several problems with your CS. One- the appearance. It needs to be a bit more detailed. 'Tall for age'? Can I know how tall he is, please? Also, why in the world is he in Gryffindor? Looking at his personality, I can easily deduce that he belongs in Ravenclaw. Unless there is a facet of his personality that you are forgetting- something that tells me that he's brave, daring, or is chivalrous. Also, I would like an RP sample from you. You are a new person to this website- I have absolutely no idea of deducing whether or not your writing is adequate. And can you not put everything in hiders? It is very tedious for me to click through each and every one of them.

EDIT: Sorry for not clarifying that you needed to give me a roleplay sample.

[Wick]

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[canaryrose]

@Wick

I was fine with one of your characters being related to McGonogall. But- this? No. Don't go creating non-canon. The premise of this is to make characters that ARE UNIQUE. Your character is a product of a non-canon affair. Please, change the bloodline.

[Wick]

@canaryrose

What do you mean non canon? I'm not familiar with this term so it's a little confusing to me. I used a character from the book that was a background character that we never actually saw do anything and used a last name from the 28 pureblood families list but I made Miriam up totally.

[Wick]

@canaryrose

harrypotter.wikia.com/wiki/Sacred_Twen..

[Nyctophilia]

@Nyctophilia I have several problems with your CS. One- the appearance. It needs to be a bit more detailed. 'Tall for age'? Can I know how tall he is, please? Also, why in the world is he in Gryffindor? Looking at his personality, I can easily deduce that he belongs in Ravenclaw. Unless there is a facet of his personality that you are forgetting- something that tells me that he's brave, daring, or is chivalrous. Also, I would like an RP sample from you. You are a new person to this website- I have absolutely no idea of deducing whether or not your writing is adequate. And can you not put everything in hiders? It is very tedious for me to click through each and every one of them.

EDIT: Sorry for not clarifying that you needed to give me a roleplay sample.

@canaryrose

It's literally "one-liners", so I'm not quite sure how I could give you an adequate RP sample, unless you just want a paragraph.

[canaryrose]

@Wick

Non-canon means that it never happened in the books. Our characters are not direct descendants of book characters. I could get behind the McGonagall one (McGonogall did have nieces and nephews that were never named). However, Miriam Yaxley never existed, so Rabastan Lestrange would never have had an affair with her. Can you perhaps make him a descendant of a non-canon pureblood family? Or, perhaps still his mother was Miriam Yaxley and his father was another pureblood never named?

[canaryrose]

@Nyctophilia

Just a sentence or two. I need to see grammar examples.

[Wick]

@canaryrose
Sure I guess. I just wanted the last name to show some relation to the history of the families.

[Nyctophilia]

@canaryrose

I fixed my sheet and added a few things, including my RP sample. Better?

[Wick]

@canaryrose

Okay I made the changes.

[Wick]

@canaryrose

When were you looking to open the IC?

[canaryrose]

@Wick

Soon, and accepted. Also, I have a request. Could you perhaps stop liking/laughing things I post? And double-posting/ triple-posting. It stresses me out badly to get on the site and see 6 notifications in the corner of my screen, and then to see they're from one person.

[Wick]

@canaryrose

I hadn't realized I had liked more than a couple. Not a problem. I'll move him over.

[Dragonsinc]

Name: Lyle Lupin

Age: 11

Gender: male

Appearance:
Lyle's unaltered form consists of brown hair, and brown eyes. He is approximately 5 feet tall, and weighs around 90 pounds, creating a lean looking figure. He is not one to make an intimidating figure. His preferred shape is that consisting of white hair and light blue eyes, otherwise leaving everything else be.

House: Gryffindor

Wand: Yew wood with a phoenix feather core, 12 ½" and reasonably supple flexibility

Blood Type: pure blood ( however his family line is mixed, with multiple people having married muggles)

Personality: Lyle is primarily one to explore. Put a new experience in front of him, no matter the perceived danger, and he will take off running full speed. He is protective and loyal to those that are close to him, he couldn't not stand by and watch if something was going on. He is generally a gentle person, wishing for the best of everyone.

History: Lyle, while born into the family with the last name of well known people, is so distantly related to Remus Lupin that it could be considered that he isn't. His parents are two full bloods. As of now, he is an only child and doesn't believe that he will gain another sibling. His parents were shocked after his birth, discovering that his appearance, hair and eye mainly, was changing. It took a while for him to be able to figure out how his abilities as a metamorphmagus worked, and even now he is limited to very very basic actions. It's difficult to learn something that there are so few teachers aware of. As a youth, he enjoyed being outside, running around, exploring, and playing sports and that has not changed much at his current age.

Pet: His pet ferret Snowball

[canaryrose]

@Dragonsinc

Accepted.

[Wick]

@canaryrose

I thought this was going to be going up quickly. Do you actually have a day in mind?

[Wick]

@canaryrose

I know you are busy but if you are too busy to attend to your own rp then I am not going to wait around for it. I rescind my interest in this thread.