[OOC] An Artificial Timeline: A Post-Post-Apocalypse Sandbox RP! [The Actual Roleplay]

[Vordak]

I've edited the post, adding some more info on how i plan to "decrease the quantity".

[LeeRoy]

At least 2x average human strength and speed. (Despite being able to lob double decker buses.)
No weak spots to concussive, blunt, or sharp force trauma.
Chemo therapy causes your body to basically age to near-death before becoming any better. Treating yourself with it constantly could prove fatal.
Judging by the title, POST-Post apocalyptic. I'm assuming that chemo would be scare, and I'm being generous with that amount, so the character would likely die a quick death.

Again, these are just concerns I'm voicing because I'm noticing a character who will be quantifiably superior to everyone else in every way.

[Vordak]

LeeRoy said
At least 2x average human strength and speed. (Despite being able to lob double decker buses.)No weak spots to concussive, blunt, or sharp force trauma.Chemo therapy causes your body to basically age to near-death before becoming any better. Treating yourself with it constantly could prove fatal. Judging by the title, POST-Post apocalyptic. I'm assuming that chemo would be scare, and I'm being generous with that amount, so the character would likely die a quick death.Again, these are just concerns I'm voicing because I'm noticing a character who will be quantifiably superior to everyone else in every way.

I said that it is a DECRASE. No more double-decker throwing, no more full-body diamond armor - and even if there is some plating, a bullet would go through with ease.
What kind of powers do we have for now? Electrokinesis, acoustokinesis and expert gunslinging. All of those prove to be fatal, as he wont have enough diamond plating to protect every inch of his body, and he still will be flesh-and-bone somewhere, thus, internal bleeding from acoustic attacks will kill him and electricity will still find a way around the diamond insulation. Plus, he isnt fast enough to dodge bullets either.

As for chemotherapy, i may as well include a drug producing organ. When you have an "iron" stomach, aquiring the needed components can be done through devouring the evolved fauna/flora, hence why he has cancer in the first place. Plus, there are certain ways to decrease the damage. I dont fully understand how it is achived yet, so i will refrain from further explanations, but if you feel like it, you're free to join me in my Wikipedia-reading trip, there is some info there.

[WeepingLiberty]

CidTheKid said @WeepingLiberty: If it fits your idea of the character better, by all means use the anime picture. Style would seem to work way better than strict realism here, to be honest. Other than that, It seems to be just fine, and anxiously wait for you to finish it. There's plenty of neat things to look forward to there already, that I only haven't accepted you yet because of the couple of missing things.

Alright, good to know. I plan to finish it up some time today as long as there are no major interruptions.

EDIT: Being dragged out to lunch with my gma. Who knows how long that will take, so I'll edit what I can from my phone.

[WeepingLiberty]

Vordak I can see your point with the weaknesses. I haven't had a chance to really read yours yet but I think I'll give it a proof read when I get a chance. If there is any problems LeeRoy then maybe the person to ask is CidTheKid. From those comments I don't see a problem but again, I'll have to give the actual CS a read.

[CidTheKid]

@Vordak: Well, if your power is manipulating carbon allotropes, thats actually really powerful on it's own considering Graphene alone is rather magical. But it also wouldn't be as OP as it seems, if you start to consider the limitations that even exotic materials have.

InLong

Firstly, unless your entire body is made out of Lead, then radiation is still problematic for you. You can't be walking into nuclear reactor cores and then be walking out unscathed. Even if you didn't care about cancer, radiation poisoning is still not good for you, and if you constantly munch on mutant radioactive fauna, you'll be quite exposed to that. Luckily, any organic material is made out of carbon so you don't have to go out of your way to find it. Still.

Secondly, I'd say having hardier bones and muscles will not make you super-strong. You won't have enough force to lift double-decker busses, even if you wouldn't be crushed by the weight. You'd still be much stronger than average, but to a more reasonable extent. And you would be more durable, but not absurdly so. Any damage you do take is still going to heal at the usual rate, or require very unique resources.

I might as well mention that diamond is very good at cutting things because of it's hardness, but is also very brittle, and breaks easily, if I remember my science classes correctly. Cuts and punches, might not be such a big deal. Bullets, hammers, and very forceful impacts on the other hand, are rather nasty.

Thirdly, there's plenty of things even the strongest of acids won't dissolve, so while you could eat a wider variety of things, you won't be eating everything.

Lastly, in spite of the apocalypse thing, a lot of knowledge has remained intact. Medical knowledge, for instance. Chemotherapy, and plenty of advanced medical techniques have survived, albeit most of them are not widely available. I'm going to say no to making your own chemo-secreting organ, because even if it were possible without a very good working knowledge of biochemistry, such a thing would kill a lot of possible plot tension.

In short, it's an interesting idea when taken to down to something thats less than perfect. You're trying to justify a wide variety of powers with only one. Not inherently objectionable, but you will have to scale it back a little, on all counts. You wouldn't be invincible, merely hard to kill. Not incredibly strong, merely quite powerful. Not mundivorous, but with a very wide apetite. Perhaps you've already addressed some of these limits.

I just want you to convince me that you won't be no-selling anything that gets thrown at you. I'll reserve final judgement to when I see your CS.

[WeepingLiberty]

Hey Cid. I've finished my CS now, could you give it a look when you get a chance?

[CidTheKid]

WeepingLiberty said
Hey Cid. I've finished my CS now, could you give it a look when you get a chance?

Give it a look? I have.

WeepingLiberty, you are Approved.

[WeepingLiberty]

Sweet! Thanks.

[LeeRoy]

*Now waits until the first IC post goes up.*

[Joegreenbeen]

Here is my character:
Name: Max Patrice
Age: 36
Gender:Male
Appearance: A tall but lean man with dark brown hair and a round face. He has a friendly face and will wear pretty much any apropriate clothing, but is always wearing long sleeves. The reason for this is a long scar that runs down his left arm. He has small almond eye's, thin lips, and average sized nose and ears, which seem to be large because of his other features being small. He has long-than-normal legs and this makes him a decent runner.
Personality: Max is a happy and overprotective of the ones he loves. He loves teaching, his job, but when asked about his past he clams up or changes the subject. Besides this he is the happiest and most optimistic person you'll meet. He is very longwinded and his students often take advantage of it without him knowing. Max is not the most very observant but, he is never one to make rash decisions. He also would never use his telekinetic abilities to harm another human being, he is EXTREMLY dedicated to making sure of the well being of those around, even if they don't care about him.
History: Max and his brother wanted to be adventures since the days they could both talk. They would always play imaginary adventures in the rubble of his backyard as a child. One day Max and his brother found an ancient book, Treasure Island, once they read it they decided that it was a true story and dedicated their lives to finding the treasure. As they grew older their search lead them to learn many facts, both real and fiction, and eventual it lead them to an abandoned town full of zombies. Max's little brother died there and that is also where Max found his scare. Since then Max decided to use his knowledge to help people and not for self gain so, he decided to become a teacher.
He was able to set up a school system, and some parts of the government system, for his fairly large settlement. This he was able to do with what his parents left him with when they peacefully passed. Because of his influence in setting up the town he is a respected community leader.
Objectives: Max has convinced himself that all he wants to do in his life is teach and help but, deep down he has a hatred for the zombies, who keep showing up in his nightmares at least once a month, and desperately wants revenge.
Skills/Powers: Max has the ability to speed up cell division, in him and others, to an expeditious(Thank you thesaurus.com) rate. In his own body he quickly heal broken bones, cuts, and other injuries but, deep cuts and lost parts might take longer or not heal depending on the situation. In others he can quickly heal cuts and scrapes. He can also heal broken bones but, this may take a few hours and there is no hope for lost body parts bigger than a finger. Max's ability only works if the persons the cells around the injury are alive. Max has a control over his abilities and can control them with out a problem, this is because he was born into a wealthy family who had connections, his parents found the right people to train him.
Profession:Teacher

[Epiphany]

I'm deciding whether or not to join.

[CidTheKid]

@Joegreenbeen: Well, I feel like you could easily expand on the personality and appearance aspect, because as it is, some things are rather vague, and he does feel a bit generic. I also feel like stock telekinesis is quite a bit overused, and there isn't much here that gives me the impression you're trying anything different. Not to mention, being able to lift 500 tons is just ludicrously extreme, and implies incredible amounts of force. That's just... really overpowered, without much make things interesting again.

I'm going to have to ask you to rewrite your CS. I can't approve it as it is.

@Epiphany: Well, if you do decide to join, go ahead. I'm not closing things anytime soon.

[LeeRoy]

Weight comparison: Total weight of the Statue of Liberty is 225 tons.

[BKburke]

1ton is 2250 pounds so multiply that by 500. I'll make my cs after cid replies to my last pm.

[CidTheKid]

Right, I just googled it up, and the only other thing that seems to be capable of lifting 500 tons is a Truck about the size of my old school. And this is something that can be done at range, presumably.

Hence why I used the term, ludicrously extreme.

[LeeRoy]

I love that big truck.

[Epiphany]

Click here please

Name: Edmee Privette

Age: 26

Gender: Female

Personality: A very prideful woman who rules with an iron fist, she is extremely intelligent and calculating. She describes people as "pigs in human clothing", and justifies that the weak and foolish must be ruled. However, she respects those with resolve and has been quite forgiving to some.
As a woman of a serious nature, its often hard for her to slow down and and enjoy things. She is often so caught up in her own mindset that she forgets to include the feelings of others. Edmee pays attention to the big picture - which means she sometimes tends to take things for granted. She has a strong sense of loyalty and duty, often casting aside unnecessary debility in order to achieve the larger goal. Edmee has no problem speaking her mind to anyone, but her feelings are something she will usually cast aside as 'unnecessary' or 'distracting'. Edmee will to get a little preachy when she's fired up and rarely takes no for an answer, going to the ends of the earth to get her way. She can be over-analytic, yet small social graces fly right past her head. For the most part, she's pretty blunt as well. You probably shouldn't ask her if that dress makes you look fat if you only want feedback.

History: Edmee spent most of her life scrambling to find a good hiding spot. She was nomadic as a child, and as she grew older, her barbaric tendencies seemed to peel away from her. She migrated with a small group of people as a child, spending most of her days reading books and cowering. The girl was enthralled with learning, but nowadays it didn't seem to be as important as it was before.
As Edmee grew older, she grew independent and moved away from the herd, soon going down a spiraling path towards hoarding paper and writing stories for eyes that will never read them. Her little addiction allowed her to find her gift of literary manipulation, which of course made the downward spiral go quicker to the point where she was considered a passive aggressive hermit.
Nowadays, she settled down in a rural village writing and crying herself to sleep every night.

Objectives: She has no 'objectives' at the moment.

Powers. WHOA CLICK HERE

Edmee has something called Literary Manipulation. The user has the ability to manipulate all forms of physical literary objects that are printed, written or drawn (books, comics, magazines etc.), including their physical forms/materials and anything written, printed, illustrated, or drawn in them.

This power includes:
Linguistic Intuition: To read every language.
Reinforcing books so they can take more damage and can be used as shields and/or weapons.
Telekinesis over books

Known Techniques of this power include:
Knowledge Replication: to absorb information from books.
Melanokinesis: To manipulate text including removing it.
Speed Reading: Self Explanatory
Storybook Mimicry: to copy traits and abilities of character from a book.

Limitations:
Users who don't have a book handy is helpless.
Books aren't the most portable or compact objects.
Usefulness depends of the quality (fashion magazine vs RPG Bestiary) and quantity (single book vs library).

Profession: Edmee, surprisingly enough is a writer.

[BigPapaBelial]

Name: Tod Crayer

Age: 63

Gender: Male

Appearance:

Piccy

Personality: Distant, approachable but ambivalent until he gets to know someone. Makes friends very slowly, as he doesn't spend alot of time in the towns and cities. Perfering to spend his time alone and out scouting the areas that people can't quite make it too yet.

History: Spent his early years living with his family out on a frontier town mining and farming community. Actually to be perfectly blunt spent alot of his time out there. Most of his life in fact. First as a helper and assistant at the age of about ten running about and helping in anyway he possibly could. He worked the mines for a few years to, and the hard life of the farm hand as well. But what really got him going was joining the scout and hunting parties that went out regularly into the frontier to hunt down any dangerous beasts that might roam and threaten their settlement or hunt for meat for the settlement. The usage of a rifle and a blade came somewhat naturally to him. As he got older and older, he soon found he perfered the long range scout role in his community. Where he found his love of nature, and exploration of great use.

Objectives: Adventure, Exploration and the moon above his head.

Skills/Powers:

Rifle Marksmen
Medium blade fighter
Medium range Echolocation (Mutation): Gained through unfortunate circumstances when he was a boy. He was irradiated during a scouting mission when he accidentally fell into a cavern. He was rescued before he was radiated to a point of death, but over many years he learned that if he struck a rock or the ground and closed his eyes, he could get a general outline of things around him using the reverberation of the sound from surfaces. To the point where he can see footsteps and locate creatures or people, along with their location and if he's careful their direction of travel. To him he "sees" it as blue waves of light filtering out around him, giving him a picture of his surroundings.

Profession: Deep Frontier Scout and game hunter

[Joegreenbeen]

TY for the criticism, I am extremely new to rping and don't have the hang of it yet. I'll update my C.S. once I'm done with my HW

Edit: I have edited my character sheet, if it's not good enough PLEASE tell me.