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Neith








Low level Force user with abilities that haven't gotten any sharper over time without actual training?

Would still have to live with a high bounty, maybe even Jedi Shadow target, if accepted.
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For now the force powers she gained after leaving the Order have simply been crossed out. I think I'm just going to remove or rewrite that section later.



Backstory regarding faking her own death may need a rewrite as well.
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@BurningDaisies

Going to hold off any further feedback until those rewrites are done, feel free to poke when they are.
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I removed a few complex bits from the backstory since it was tied with players who may or may not return, and updated other parts as well.

Please review~

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Been awhile since I asked for a review, and I've decided to commit myself to other games in the time since, so I'm dropping out.

I may circle back in the future.

May all of you have some awesome adventures~ :)
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