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Just the one thing, you mention that while living in seclusion her family lived on the surface, going with the Legends version of Ryloth (which is what most people are familiar with) during 'hot storms' the temperature on Ryloth's surface outside of the safe zone of the vallies could reach 300 degrees Celsius. I'm sure rather than living on the surface they would instead have lived in the caves closer to the edge of the safe zone, to still give that isolated/hard life feel. Just a detail that stood out to me.

Otherwise, all good from my end.
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@Ezekiel Thank you for the feedback! I had the thoughts that the main city was in a mountain range which could provide cover, especially if the cave system ran deep enough. I can change it to the lower levels of Kala'uun if that would be more acceptable?
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@Ezekiel Thank you for the feedback! I had the thoughts that the main city was in a mountain range which could provide cover, especially if the cave system ran deep enough. I can change it to the lower levels of Kala'uun if that would be more acceptable?


That'd be fine.
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I have made some changes to the interview section, please let me know if it was acceptable.
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