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Username: hatakekuro

Name: Durandel Strauss

Nicknames: The Savage of Ferox

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Birthday: August 15

Class: Taguel

Allied to?: Regna Ferox (will join the Shepards)

Weapons: Beaststone

Appearance:

Personality: Durandel is a carefree soul that only seems to care about enjoying life to the fullest and having fun. He is a kind man who goes above and beyond for his allies and will always be there for the when they need him. An ability he has is to make people feel comfortable around him and then befriend them without much of a problem. It is undeniable that this guy is very rowdy and hardy, only showing that he is up for a good time at anytime. However he knows that there is a time and place to act like that so he will be on his best behavior when the situation calls for it.

Despite his bright and sunny personality, some people tend feel uneasy around him because of a "beast like aura" that seems to come off him. They are right to feel that; he is truly a monster on the battlefield. When he fights, people who have had the chance to fight tend to him describe as a demon that bathes in his enemy's blood. Durandel never uses strategy when he fights, he just uses pure instinct and skill to maim his opponents. Some could say that he has the most fun when he fights, especially against an opponent of great skill and power.

Biography:
Durandel was only a small child when he has abandoned in the cold winters of Ferox. Why he was abandoned is hard to say. Maybe he belonged to a family that couldn't afford to raise him and decided to leave him to die or a prisoner of some bandits that decided to leave him because he was extra baggage. Maybe his parents were just killed and he was the sole survivor of whatever tragedy? Whatever happened doesn't matter. He was still alone. He was still cold and he was still hungry. The child only wandered aimlessly although one would expect him to be crying and yelling for help, but that wasn't the case. Durandel wanted to fight for his life, so he can live even though the odds were against him. It was only natural for him to have a desire to fight; it's a pure animalistic instinct that all animals, including humans, have. Hours went by as he made his way through the icy forest, only for brigands to find him and attempt to kidnap him. These weren't ordinary brigands; they were ones stealing women and children to sell them as slaves to make a profit. This group attempted to grab the boy and steal him away...it didn't go well. Durandel stole one of the daggers being pointed at him and he quickly killed them all, their bloody painting the ground crimson. Meanwhile, soldier's from Ferox had discovered the whereabouts of the group of brigands and went immediately to put an end to their trade only to discover them already dead with only a young boy standing their with his hands covered in blood and a smile on his face. The troops were astounded and confused by the spectacle. They didn't know what to do with this kid until they decided to bring this child with him back to the barracks. After much discussion, they brought Durandel into their ranks as a trainee. As the years went on, the boy had become a man and as he became a man, his fighting skills surpassed even the mightiest of generals in Ferox's army. He became famous through out the continent for his beast like fighting style and his undeniable skill. As of now, he has been on a journey to go find as many strong opponents to duel to the death with.

Quirk: No one can out drink him. His alcohol tolerance levels are superhuman.

Strengths:
Has unnatural speed and strength
Has the fighting instinct of a wild animal.
Has a strong will to live and never die.

Weaknesses:
Dairy (lactose intolerance)
Is extremely reckless in battle.
Extremely prideful and will not turn down a challenge that stains his honor.

Likes: Beer, duels, music, his friends, reading stories of legends of long ago, dogs, parties

Dislikes: wine, sticks in the mud, politics, cats, yams, thinking

Romantic Interest: available

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While I'm not a GM of this RP, I can tell you that I seriously doubt hatakekuro's character will be approved as it is. He's hella OP.

Something to note when writing backstory: Make it make sense in context.

hatakekuro said Durandel was only a small child when he has abandoned in the cold winters of Ferox.

Small child means five to about twelve, right? By that, let's go to the far ends of the extreme in this example, and assume that Durandal is twelve when he does the following actions

hatakekuro said Durandel wanted to fight for his life, so he can live even though the odds were against him. It was only natural for him to have a desire to fight; it's a pure animalistic instinct that all animals, including humans, have.

Like hell. This is a twelve year old child. However, that could be explained because he's a taguel and I have no idea what's up with their mentality.

hatakekuro said Hours went by as he made his way through the icy forest, only for brigands to find him and attempt to kidnap him. These weren't ordinary brigands; they were ones stealing women and children to sell them as slaves to make a profit. This group attempted to grab the boy and steal him away...it didn't go well. Durandel stole one of the daggers being pointed at him and he quickly killed them all, their bloody painting the ground crimson. Meanwhile, soldier's from Ferox had discovered the whereabouts of the group of brigands and went immediately to put an end to their trade only to discover them already dead with only a young boy standing their with his hands covered in blood and a smile on his face.

This is the heart of the issue, right here. After trekking through a frozen forest for hours with no food(A feat that would down a full grown, healthy man), said twelve year old child meets brigands who are trained in the art of taking people alive(Something a lot harder when you consider how easy it is to kill someone with an axe), tears a knife away from a full grown man who's both well-fed and wearing proper clothing for the temperature, and then proceeds to butcher the group of men. While nearly freezing, probably starving due to burning all the calories just to stay alive, and most of all, twelve years old(A time where if you have muscles, you've messed up your body in the long run). And then the proper, trained soldiers show up.

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The troops were astounded and confused by the spectacle. They didn't know what to do with this kid until they decided to bring this child with him back to the barracks. After much discussion, they brought Durandel into their ranks as a trainee. As the years went on, the boy had become a man and as he became a man, his fighting skills surpassed even the mightiest of generals in Ferox's army. He became famous through out the continent for his beast like fighting style and his undeniable skill. As of now, he has been on a journey to go find as many strong opponents to duel to the death with.


Astonished and confused? They should have killed him on the spot, if this strange little child is smiling after killing several dozen men. Now then. The last part about the generals means that he's currently one of the most powerful people on the continent, despite having a crippled body due to his muscle structure being horribly developed at the age of twelve.



To recap. I don't think you'll be accepted until your backstory is reworked into something that doesn't instagib any other person in the RP, or at least makes sense.
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TentacleLord said something that doesn't instagib any other person in the RP


The only person capable of this feat at this moment is Xanxus
But yeah. All of that would pretty much sum things up.
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Okay, it will be edited as soon as possible.
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Been busy the last couple of days, college, work, deadlines, stress, etc... Will try and post soon.
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GUESS WHO HAS INTERNETS
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Hurrah. Does this mean we can work on a collab? Soz for not starting that btw, been busy. :(
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I'm trying to, Psy, but is anyone having trouble connecting to the collab site?
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dunno never heard of it before XD
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I'm trying to, Psy, but is anyone having trouble connecting to the collab site?


I was, as of yesterday. Said something about not being able to find the Web address.
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I'm trying to get into it now and it doesn't work either...
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Looks like it's working now, at least for me.
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Yeah, it is. Will post tomorrow as I was doing collabs tonight.
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