This goes for everyone: Stop using Ninshuu. It was a tool to bring people together, and ninjutsu was derived from it for battle. Stop having random NPC's know this and tell you about it only for you to use ninjutsu for bad things, like killing everyone who ever knew you. Knowing about Ninshuu was from the Sage himself, a long-passed legend, no one else should even really know about this because its that old. So please, stop using it, it's becoming troublesome. No more random npc's gifting you knowledge that has faded from history for what's likely to be thousands of years.
Seraph said
I can rework the history if it doesn't fit. This is what I've got for ya.
Please change his first name. There's an important character within that universe who already held it, I just want to avoid confusion. Sorry.
I'd assume you were being hunted or the word was put out that you escaped with that sword, but its never mentioned again. There is a shinobi in Konoha who worked within the Land of Iron for about twelve years, should he have caught wind about that blade being stolen he'll mention it, and trust you might've managed to earn will be surely hindered. Konoha's not really keen on housing thieves. Also, Konoha and Kiri are not desperate enough to hire mercenaries, especially given they have leaders who recognize the potential dangers of people who can be bought. If you haven't supported the cause of the rebels without money, then these villages will likely not hire you period. You can possibly claim that Iwa and Suna hired you, but you're in Konoha to assist with the revolt when the time comes. Kumo is in a bad spot right now so I didn't mention them. Just also going to point out how well your character adjusted to blindness, didn't seem like there was much difficulty overcoming it ...yeah.
As for your traits, I wouldn't expect a samurai to have a 'massive reserve' given their manner of fighting isn't entirely dependent on it. That, and we keep seeing massive reserves from people who already stuff their characters skills to the brim, and it comes off as obnoxious after a while. So given you have so many other skills of your own, we're asking you to compromise with us by removing a 'massive' reserve and to just have an average one or less if you're feeling humble or creative. We also ask that your 'chakra sensing' be removed. You can already see people with your mind and are sensitive to vibrations and energy(which can be chakra too) apparently, so please remove sensing and just base your awareness off of that. If you have another alternative that you feel is fair with that, let us know, but we're not comfortable with all of that.
Remove Ninshuu knowledge.
Remove Five Elements Seal and Unseal. Given your already considerable moveset and 'skills' we feel that restricting someone else's capability to fight back would be too hindered if you had gotten this off. You could almost effectively shut down anyone long-term with one move. You already have: "incredible speed, reflexes, agility and strength. His stamina and endurance are outstanding, and all the beatings in his life have led to a frightening durability. He is conditioned well and rarely fatigues." which means you're capable of fighting fine, so why hinder someone else's abilities when you have plenty to go off off? It's a little much.
Please edit "Senkaijin One Billionth Revolution" to block appropriate attacks. Piercing believes it shouldn't block any ninjutsu, and I can kind of agree with him considering your character isn't immobile and has a lot of attribute strength, so a shield isn't making up for anything and almost seems unnecessary. So an alternative could be that you can block weaker techniques like C rank things if you feel you need to, but the vagueness of 'deflects most powerful attacks' leads us to believe that you're just prepared to block anything you want. If you were a very immobile character this might be acceptable, but you've made your point that he is a highly capable swordsman and has multiple advantages. You're too capable of shutting down the ninjutsu-heavy characters at little to no cost to your own, and after all the hype you've given we don't see that as 'just'. So, block C-rank techniques and below with throwing projectiles involved, maybe lower it to B-rank to better make sense, and also remain stationary as a drawback to this? It's a VERY sensitive technique idea that we've basically seen already, you're not the first one trying to make himself immune to things with a vague shield. Believe me when I say we're tearing people a new one about that.
Fix this up, let us know when you do, or just pm one of us with concerns if you have it. Everything else should be alright.
