[OOC] Rising: A New Age of Gods

[BB]

Howdy erryone.

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Name:Jordan Black
Deity of: Fire, War, Chaos, Judgement
Age/DoB: 26 April 20th 1994
Gender:Male
Appearance:What Jordan Looks like Without his helmet
With Helmet Probably will wear when he finds out hes a god.
Personality:Chaotic, Violent, A Great Soldier, and most of all he believes he is passing judgment upon the wicked and that war and fire will find those who are guilty.
Background:Jordan was born the middle child and the first son of ten kids, his mother a house wife his father a soldier in the 75th Rangers. Jordan's father instilled in him a strict sense of right and wrong but allowed his son to flesh out how to punish those people and it followed him throughout life, In school he would often stand up and fight bullies.

It wasn't until high school that Jordan became more violent even burning a man alive because he did an unspeakable act to an friend, he got more violent until his last year of high school, he signed up for the military and made top marks on his ASVAB test guaranteeing him a spot in any military career he wished he joined the Rangers to follow in his fathers foot steps he spent 3 years in a war that never seemed to end bringing justice to what he saw were evil people then he went home.

Home wasn't right for Jordan things weren't the same the dead haunted his mind his house was in a constant state of disarray the only place he felt like he belonged was on the battlefield he tried to adjust for one more year eventually realizing that the battlefield is where he belonged and that's where he went but on his return to service instead of being transferred into his old unit he was transferred into a CIA ran unit and kept in the unit until the end of his tour four years later when Jordan returned home he felt alone and distant his home as chaotic as his mind.

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Flare was back for a lil bit folks.

[ActRaiserTheReturned]

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[GuyYouWishYouDidntKnow]

Enalais, you're approved, but note that your Domain's been tweaked slightly to War, Chaos(Battle), Violence. It still fits the same theme, just keep that in mind.

Act, you can't app a hero if you've already got a god slot. The heroes are for people who show up after the matter but would still like to join. Also controlling a god and a hero of that god makes it too easy.

[ActRaiserTheReturned]

GuyYouWishYouDidntKnow said
Enalais, you're approved, but note that your Domain's been tweaked slightly to War, Chaos(Battle), Violence. It still fits the same theme, just keep that in mind. Act, you can't app a hero if you've already got a god slot. The heroes are for people who show up after the matter but would still like to join. Also controlling a god and a hero of that god makes it too easy.

Oh, okay. . . . :D

[GuyYouWishYouDidntKnow]

Sorry~

[SrslyAnArtist]

I hope you dont mind but I changed the god that Soren serves from Ellona to Alex. My original plan was for that god anyway.

[GuyYouWishYouDidntKnow]

No worries, seeing as we haven't started the RP yet.

[SrslyAnArtist]

Yay! :D

[BuriedComic7]

Alex has a hero! Hello Irish!

[SrslyAnArtist]

Hello Buried Comic!

[BuriedComic7]

This is the start of a beautiful friendship....*evil laugh*

[CallaLily180]

BuriedComic7 said
This is the start of a beautiful friendship....*evil laugh*

You make me excited BuriedComic, very excited. Evile laughs are my thing though, so unless you'd like to square up with me, please take it somewhere elsa.
No, I am kidding.

Or am I? Hehehe™

[SrslyAnArtist]

lol. you guys are something thats for sure.:D

[enkas]

Irish, while I know your application is accepted, I am not a GM, and this will sound harsh, but I'll be completely honest and blunt.

In my opinion, you need to put more effort in your application. This is not Free RP, this is Casual, where acceptable grammar is preferred and where we like to put in a little bit of depth. I don't mind you using the cliches, because we all do that sometimes, and I am slightly OK with the shortness of it, but please, at least fix the spelling and grammar.

Peace.

[CallaLily180]

Well, mine isn't very good either dude...

Name: Samantha Merles

Deity of: -(Beauty, Wisdom, Love, Pleasure):

Age/DoB: 24/ 2-16-1996

Gender: Female

Appearance:
Samantha Merles
Height: 5 feet 4 inches/ 126 centimeters
Weight: 180 pounds/ 81 kilometers
Markings: She has two butterfly tattoos, one on the back of her neck, and one on her waist. Tattoos

Personality: Samantha isn't a very tame girl, she is unable to keep her mouth shut, has a temper that is over nine thousand, and of course thinks she is the queen of the world. When she isn't acting up or being a total smart*** she is studying or reading a passtime. She really enjoys, talking, and has always had a d small social life; custom fit with people who tolerate her. As a Goddess she may cause some trouble, and she will have a hard time filling her position as a 'Wisened, pure, bimbo.'(that is she likes to call herself).

Background: Before the change, Samantha was anything but pure and wise. She was a smoker, a rocker, and she was on the verge of becoming an alcoholic. Fun right? To her, it was.

She started off as a goody-goody, the typical golden child that every other parent loved; she had good grades, she presented herself well, she wasn't too moody, she went to church with her family and respected her parents. People liked her, and she enjoyed the limelight.

You can say she started to spoil at the age of sixteen; breasts and boys and makeup and dirty acts! That was what she wanted at the time, she had never really cared about those things before. And yet back then it was all she could wrap her little head around. It was getting to the point where she stopped going to church, she got a belly button peircing, and she stopped talking to her family. She even started to smoke, if that is important. Things were going downhill swiftly, an she did nothing to stop it.

At the age of seventeen, her parents forced her into counseling. She had suscessully vandalized twenty-two neighborhood buildings, and she was now being accused of arsony. She couldn't understand that, the flames barely made it out of the mall...oh, and they had no proof. One witness would get them nowhere, at least she hoped. As long as she could make it through these years she would be fine, it was almost time for her to go to college.

Surprisingly, the years did pass for her and she managed to make it through without going to jail. She thought the therapy sessions helped, the doctor she visited was long forgotten now, but he had been nice. Things were looking up, and she was at least studying again. She refused to go to church, and still had problems with her parents, but she was passing classes like she used to. So in the end, it wasn't much of a surprise that she made it to college.

College was...tough for Samantha, when she finally paved her way to the community campus she was excited, yes. But things were rough, she was surrounded by people that either ticked her off for triggered her. So yeah, she was confused, on the fence about going back to her old ways, and above all, she was angry. Around that time, she got into partying, drinking, and started to smoke once again.

All was...kind of right actually. She enjoyed this life more than the shallow life of a person who studied. Because really, who did that anymore? She definitely didn't, which made it cool. Until she finally went to jail for a year, then it wasn't cool...but she doesn't talk about that.

The summary, of her story is; after she got out of jail, she started to live life a little less. Studying and keeping in touch with her family, but she still drank and partied.

The moral of her story is; YOLO.

[SrslyAnArtist]

Enkas what do you mean by cliches? And sometimes its hard to figure out what your character is like at first. Im still planning on how I'm going to edit Sorens story. Yeah we all have typos. Why single me out dude? its kinda rude. Dont worry you didnt seem harsh to me.

[enkas]

Calla, you did put effort in your application, by spell-checking, giving an interesting read of a story, that I did like. Also, your grammar wasn't tearing my eyes out. One thing go, you mixed up kilometers with kilograms. C:

As for you, Irish, here's the definition for that word

A cliché or cliche (UK /ˈkliːʃeɪ/ or US /klɪˈʃeɪ/) is an expression, idea, or element of an artistic work which has become overused to the point of losing its original meaning or effect, even to the point of being trite or irritating, especially when at some earlier time it was considered meaningful or nove

Try to figure out which parts of the short story were such, as I do not want to go further and seem very mean.

As for the typos.. It was your typos that got to me most, I didn't notice any on the others, as I myself am not a native English speaking, but the others did seem to put more time into looking at the text, rather than quick-typing and hitting the post button. So I didn't exactly found it acceptable for the standards of the Casual RP forum.

There are a lot of other things that bugged me, but I'll just look past them. All I ask for you is to fix the spelling, the rest of that will go with me.

Hold it against me if you wish, but all I want is that you'd improve.

[SrslyAnArtist]

I did the spelling ng fix and such. And it wasnt that bad. But go check it out now. And i wasn't trying to speed type. I have a touch screen and sometmes my finger slips and taps the wrong button. Thats all that is. I understand your pet peeve with typos because it gets to me too.