[OOC] The Heroes of Beacon

[harinezumikouken]

KabenSaal said
Yes, that's a good thing.

Then, I thank you for your compliments.

[Lucius Cypher]

harinezumikouken said
That's great. I never got into the games but I watched the short-lived fan-made OVAs and some stuff on the YouTubes. Never read any of the manga/doujins though.

You're missing out. I can recommend some for you depending on your tastes.

LowKey123 said
Solution.PRACTICE YOU BITCH, I DID.GET MONEY, YOU BITCH.WORK FOR YOUR SHIT.

Lowkey! Do you want to do a collab to introduce your character into the story?

[harinezumikouken]

Lucius Cypher said
You're missing out. I can recommend some for you depending on your tastes.Lowkey! Do you want to do a collab to introduce your character into the story?

Nah, I'm good with my current backed-up list of manga to read, but I appreciate it. So, Mr. Evil Ferret/Bunny-thing, any criticism for Kuhaku's introductory post?

[Lucius Cypher]

Looks good to me. You play monster hunter? Your weapon reminds me of the Charge Axe. Once it gets localized for the USA and I get myself the correct device, I plan to use one myself. As for the writing itself, I like it well enough. Lots of detailed but spaced well to make it seem less cluttered. But I don't think you asked me because you were fishing for compliments, are you? Well, my only gripe are a few word choices that are grammatically incorrect and make it awkward to read out loud as well that you have a lot of fragmented sentences, but I wouldn't fault you for that. The intent got through well enough, it just needed proofreading.

Also, do you need a partner? Cause I do.

[KabenSaal]

I wonder if I can use my Semblence to make the boomerang hit one of the artefacts and use it as a homing beacon to their location. Would be an amusing cheat. Could even steal all the Artefacts and hide them somewhere.

[The Irish Tree]

KabenSaal said
I wonder if I can use my Semblence to make the boomerang hit one of the artefacts and use it as a homing beacon to their location. Would be an amusing cheat. Could even steal all the Artefacts and hide them somewhere.

And then the divine GM fist crashes down on the boomerang, atomizing it forever. So no. You can't.

[harinezumikouken]

Lucius Cypher said
Looks good to me. You play monster hunter? Your weapon reminds me of the Charge Axe. Once it gets localized for the USA and I get myself the correct device, I plan to use one myself. As for the writing itself, I like it well enough. Lots of detailed but spaced well to make it seem less cluttered. But I don't think you asked me because you were fishing for compliments, are you? Well, my only gripe are a few word choices that are grammatically incorrect and make it awkward to read out loud as well that you have a lot of fragmented sentences, but I wouldn't fault you for that. The intent got through well enough, it just needed proofreading.

I appreciate the constructive criticism and no, I wasn't fishing for compliments. They make me feel uncomfortable. I realize I I reuse/repeat quite a few words and I'm working on my grammar and my fragmented sentences though I'm not sure how I should go about correcting them. I try to be a stickler and keep myself to a high standard of literacy. I use too many commas along with the word 'and'. Not sure how to cut down on that. Any advice on how I could remedy this?

Also - It seems I've been discovered. Yes, I have played the Monster Hunter games for years and absolutely love them. Kuhaku's weapon is directly inspired (*cough cough* RIPPED OFF *cough*) from the Charge Blade/Axe from Monster Hunter 4 Ultimate.

[The Irish Tree]

harinezumikouken said
Also - It seems I've been discovered. Yes, I have played the Monster Hunter games for years and absolutely love them. Kuhaku's weapon is directly inspired from the Charge Blade/Axe from Monster Hunter 4 Ultimate.

Charge Axe looks so ballin...

[KabenSaal]

We need an updated list of who is here, so I know who to bug for a partnership.

[harinezumikouken]

Also, yes, I do need a partner, but I think Kuhaku will have issues with Gren. For one, didn't you previously mention something about 'cannibalism' in past posts? That wouldn't sit well with him. Secondly, I believe Sauron's future CS is lined up to be my partner but it seems he won't be able to join for some time due to IRL issues/business. But, we can form a team in the future so if you're fine with Tiger-Boy, I'd be down for a partnership.

[harinezumikouken]

The Irish Tree said
Charge Axe looks so ballin...

It's my favorite weapon to use in MH. Second is the Great Sword. Do keep in mind, Kuhaku's weapon comes with some RWBY twists and hidden functionalities.

[The Irish Tree]

harinezumikouken said
Also, yes, I do need a partner, but I think Kuhaku will have issues with Gren. For one, didn't you previously mention something about 'cannibalism' in past posts? That wouldn't sit well with him. Secondly, I believe Sauron's future CS is lined up to be my partner but it seems he won't be able to join for some time due to IRL issues/business. But, we can form a team in the future so if you're fine with Tiger-Boy, I'd be down for a partnership.

Has he said how long it'd take for him to get that dealt with? Cause if not, I have to give his spot to someone else for the time being.

[harinezumikouken]

The Irish Tree said
Has he said how long it'd take for him to get that dealt with? Cause if not, I have to give his spot to someone else for the time being.

Well, two people dropped out so there's plenty of space to be had isn't there? And no, he hasn't given me a specific timeline of when he'll be returning and posting.

[The Irish Tree]

harinezumikouken said
Well, two people dropped out so there's plenty of space to be had isn't there? And no, he hasn't given me a specific timeline of when he'll be returning and posting.

we got 2 people lined up to come in behind him. but either way, with 2 spots open, I'll get that person behind Sauron in.

[Lucius Cypher]

harinezumikouken said
Also, yes, I do need a partner, but I think Kuhaku will have issues with Gren. For one, didn't you previously mention something about 'cannibalism' in past posts? That wouldn't sit well with him. Secondly, I believe Sauron's future CS is lined up to be my partner but it seems he won't be able to join for some time due to IRL issues/business. But, we can form a team in the future so if you're fine with Tiger-Boy, I'd be down for a partnership.

That cannibalism bit was just my form of OOC humor. Nothing I say in the OOC guarantees what happens or what is true with my character in the IC. Anyways, I'm just waiting for a good chance to get Gren involved, because as it stands I'm waiting for either Alice to respond as Serara towards Priscilla, or for Lowkey's Yael to do a collab with me. And in the event that neither occurs, I'm making sure I'm keeping all options open. I have no issues with personal partners or team make up. I make shit work, one way or another.

As for helping you fix your writing, I can't say that I'm the best person for it. I too put in lots of commas when I write often for no discernible reason. I write the same way I speak, which is to say not always correctly and with lots of pauses, thus commas or ellipses.

[harinezumikouken]

Lucius Cypher said
That cannibalism bit was just my form of OOC humor. Nothing I say in the OOC guarantees what happens or what is true with my character in the IC. Anyways, I'm just waiting for a good chance to get Gren involved, because as it stands I'm waiting for either Alice to respond as Serara towards Priscilla, or for Lowkey's Yael to do a collab with me. And in the event that neither occurs, I'm making sure I'm keeping all options open. I have no issues with personal partners or team make up. I make shit work, one way or another.As for helping you fix your writing, I can't say that I'm the best person for it. I too put in lots of commas when I write often for no discernible reason. I write the same way I speak, which is to say not always correctly and with lots of pauses, thus commas or ellipses.

Then sure, we can partner up for now and see how things work out. Maybe the fact that the two of them are both Faunus' will help ease the transition. I'm on nearly every day so I'm at least active.

[Lucius Cypher]

Alright, than I'll have a post up with Gren and find a good meeting spot for us. How about you and I meet by the train tracks, which a ride, and ride that to the location of the artifacts?

[harinezumikouken]

Lucius Cypher said
Alright, than I'll have a post up with Gren and find a good meeting spot for us. How about you and I meet by the train tracks, which a ride, and ride that to the location of the artifacts?

Sounds fun.

[Sho Minazuki]

I was a Switch Axe and Dual Blades guy, and a Bowgun sometimes if I go with a team.

[Lucius Cypher]

Sho Minazuki said
I was a Switch Axe and Dual Blades guy, and a Bowgun sometimes if I go with a team.

Personally, I mastered the Hunting Horn and the Great Bowgun first time I played. Sometimes I used a hammer if I bothered to gather the materials for it. Never got the chance to use the Switch Axe, which I wanted but I didn't have the game for it.