[OOC] Myriad Reality

[LegendBegins]

DarkwolfX37 said
turns out my whole "was always told to be a lawyer cause loopholes" thing still applies :p

I considered being a lawyer, but I don't lie, so there goes that. But seriously, can you be any more mature?

[DarkwolfX37]

LegendBegins said
I considered being a lawyer, but I don't lie, so there goes that. But seriously, can you be any more mature?

no comment
and yeah i know i'm pretty much maxed out huh

[Nimda]

DarkwolfX37 said
no commentand yeah i know i'm pretty much maxed out huh

I'll take that for what it's worth.
Seriously though.

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
Done.Blaaaarrrrgg.

Yoy.
About this: "I would really recommend making sure the pain behind Scootaloo’s need for revenge is astronomical, to drive it to the point of wanting to kill Guilda for it. That’ll need a lot of detail to be convincing. Most of all, make sure that the plot isn’t repetitive (ie >Go to village >Overcome anti-element >New group member realizes element)."

Scootaloo: Scootaloo trusts Rainbow Dash very, very much. Rainbow Dash promised Scootaloo that when she was gone, Scootaloo would get Loyalty. Scootaloo feels like Gilda broke Dash's promise and her loyalty, and then there's that foalish greed driving it. Although, if it makes it more believable, I can do this: Scootaloo scoots up to where Gilda is going where the remains of the elements are. Gilda gets there before her and picks up the pendant. She is about to put it on when Scootaloo gets there and calls for her to stop because it's supposed to be hers, but Gilda (being Gilda) just sneers and puts it on. Scootaloo is devastated when the element shines and Gilda is shown as the true bearer, and once Gilda defeats Discord she can gloat a bit.

Repetitive plot: The way it goes down is actually quite different. Dak (what I've chosen for Daacad) will think that Gilda getting to know him was just one big lie and will throw the element at her before running off. Gilda will have to nudge him toward doing the right thing and being honest about the terrible secret his friend entrusted to him, thus saving the tribe, and she'll have to get him the element just as he tells the truth.

Sera (Seraphim, what I've chosen for Udāratā) will accept the element even though nothing happens, because she wouldn't think of it as something mean. The only thing that the two of them can think of to cause Sera to have to overcome her anti-element will be getting Sera to hate Gilda and then having Sera save Gilda.

Kang (Temp for Kangkai) will accept the element, but won't wear it, so Gilda and friends have to somehow find the element in his home behind his back and get him to wear it just as he gives away all his long-earned money.

Smee won't accept it because he thinks that it'll be useless, since penguins don't think of accessories as useful and the only use they have for gems is for their magic. Gilda and friends have to figure out how to get it to work the same way as Smee's crystal, and they won't be able to think of something to get Smee to overcome his anti-element. That actually happens naturally, and they only figure out that the element was already tuned to work like Smee's crystal just in time to get it on him as he saves the suicidal penguin.

Veninde will accept it like Sera did and there won't need to be any fancy business, although Gilda will take a while to realise that it's supposed to be friendship guiding her and not magic.

Commentary: Explain how a “daymare” could occur: It's basically a daydream, but it's involuntary like a nightmare. It'd strike her like a vision (because they basically are visions) in the middle of the battle and change her sight to that of the scene in the dream, causing her to nearly get killed.

[Nimda]

Mammalia said
Yoy.About this: "I would really recommend making sure the pain behind Scootaloo’s need for revenge is astronomical, to drive it to the point of wanting to kill Guilda for it. That’ll need a lot of detail to be convincing. Most of all, make sure that the plot isn’t repetitive (ie >Go to village >Overcome anti-element >New group member realizes element)."Scootaloo: Scootaloo trusts Rainbow Dash very, very much. Rainbow Dash promised Scootaloo that when she was gone, Scootaloo would get Loyalty. Scootaloo feels like Gilda broke Dash's promise and her loyalty, and then there's that foalish greed driving it. Although, if it makes it more believable, I can do this: Scootaloo scoots up to where Gilda is going where the remains of the elements are. Gilda gets there before her and picks up the pendant. She is about to put it on when Scootaloo gets there and calls for her to stop because it's supposed to be hers, but Gilda (being Gilda) just sneers and puts it on. Scootaloo is devastated when the element shines and Gilda is shown as the true bearer, and once Gilda defeats Discord she can gloat a bit.Repetitive plot: The way it goes down is actually quite different. Dak (what I've chosen for Daacad) will think that Gilda getting to know him was just one big lie and will throw the element at her before running off. Gilda will have to nudge him toward doing the right thing and being honest about the terrible secret his friend entrusted to him, thus saving the tribe, and she'll have to get him the element just as he tells the truth.Sera (Seraphim, what I've chosen for Udāratā) will accept the element even though nothing happens, because she wouldn't think of it as something mean. The only thing that the two of them can think of to cause Sera to have to overcome her anti-element will be getting Sera to hate Gilda and then having Sera save Gilda. Kang (Temp for Kangkai) will accept the element, but won't wear it, so Gilda and friends have to somehow find the element in his home behind his back and get him to wear it just as he gives away all his long-earned money.Smee won't accept it because he thinks that it'll be useless, since penguins don't think of accessories as useful and the only use they have for gems is for their magic. Gilda and friends have to figure out how to get it to work the same way as Smee's crystal, and they won't be able to think of something to get Smee to overcome his anti-element. That actually happens naturally, and they only figure out that the element was tuned to work like Smee's crystal just in time to get it on him as he saves the suicidal penguin.Veninde will accept it like Sera did and there won't need to be any fancy business, although Gilda will take a while to realise that it's supposed to be friendship guiding her and not magic.Commentary: Explain how a “daymare” could occur: It's basically a daydream, but it's involuntary like a nightmare. It'd strike her like a vision (because they basically visions) in the middle of the battle and change her sight to that of the scene in the dream, causing her to nearly get killed.

The Scootaloo commentary wasn't about what you wrote, but about how you portray it in the final version. You have to be careful go do it right.

[Mammalia]

Nimda said
The Scootaloo commentary wasn't about what you wrote, but about how you portray it in the final version. You have to be careful go do it right.

Ah. And does the plot for each villagething seem reasonable?
EDIT: In the post I just made, I mean.

[LegendBegins]

Mammalia said
Ah. And does the plot for each villagething seem reasonable?EDIT: In the post I just made, I mean.

Yeah, not bad.

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
Yeah, not bad.

Great. I didn't want it to be repetitive from the beginning, which is why I made something special for each of them.

[LegendBegins]

Mammalia said
Great. I didn't want it to be repetitive from the beginning, which is why I made something special for each of them.

As long as the formula is always differing.

[LegendBegins]

I often question why I speak to my parents.

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
As long as the formula is always differing.

Technically, the same bare-bones formula is used for each: Go to village, overcome anti-element and thus realise element. Realising one's element in this story means fully exemplifying it in the face of extreme adversary. But that's the bare-bones, the details differ greatly.

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
I often question why I speak to my parents.

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[LegendBegins]

Mammalia said
, the same bare-bones formula is used for each: Go to village, overcome anti-element and thus realise element. Realising one's element in this story means fully exemplifying it in the face of extreme adversary. But that's the bare-bones, the details differ greatly.

That's what you may want to toy with. Readers can sense an underlying formula.

[LegendBegins]

Mammalia said
?

Long story. This morning, my brother and I put out a lot, a lot of oversized flags for independence day. The ground was hard, which made it difficult to hammer them in, and they ended up being crooked. Long story short, my mom made us do that because our dad didn't do it last night, so when he got home, Rhett and I had to pull all of them up, while our dad hammered them in, and finished in a tenth of the time it took us. I thanked my dad, and I can't tell if it was actually there or not, but it felt like he was disappointed that we couldn't get the flags straight or spaced correctly (which anyone who knows me knows that I have no sense of distance). Afterwards, I tried to talk to her about it and she turned it around at me as always. I've even tried to tell her before how I can't ever talk to her because she turns anything serious hostile towards me, and she turned around and made me the bad guy then too. I'd probably spend more time with them if I didn't feel that anything I say would be used against me.

[Extra]

Hey guys, I'm back for like a minute. Just a heads up, I'll only be on for four days starting Monday. Can't wait.

[LegendBegins]

Extra said
Hey guys, I'm back for like a minute. Just a heads up, I'll only be on for four days starting Monday. Can't wait.

I FLIPPED OUT WHEN I SAW YOUR COMMENT

But why?

[Extra]

LegendBegins said
I FLIPPED OUT WHEN I SAW YOUR COMMENTBut why?

I'm going to Seattle with my mom for Vacation.

[LegendBegins]

Extra said
I'm going to Seattle with my mom for Vacation.

Oh, well have fun! I'm excited to have you for as long as we do.
(141 of Fairy Tail)

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
That's what you may want to toy with. Readers can sense an underlying formula.

Butbutbut the only way to be able to fully use one's element is to exemplify the trait under great duress from the opposite! At least in the canon of my story. And also, the barebones formula is beginning and end. Not Beginning, middle, and end, just Beginning and End. The steps to get to that end are very different in each story thread.

[Mammalia]

LegendBegins said
Long story. This morning, my brother and I put out a lot, a lot of oversized flags for independence day. The ground was hard, which made it difficult to hammer them in, and they ended up being crooked. Long story short, my mom made us do that because our dad didn't do it last night, so when he got home, Rhett and I had to pull all of them up, while our dad hammered them in, and finished in a tenth of the time it took us. I thanked my dad, and I can't tell if it was actually there or not, but it felt like he was disappointed that we couldn't get the flags straight or spaced correctly (which anyone who knows me knows that I have no sense of distance). Afterwards, I tried to talk to her about it and she turned it around at me as always. I've even tried to tell her before how I can't ever talk to her because she turns anything serious hostile towards me, and she turned around and made me the bad guy then too. I'd probably spend more time with them if I didn't feel that anything I say would be used against me.

Wow.

Extra said
Hey guys, I'm back for like a minute. Just a heads up, I'll only be on for four days starting Monday. Can't wait.

See you then! :D