[OOC] The Road To Indigo (Pokemon RP: Chapter 1: Intros and Out We Goes!) (Open for Applications!)

[NeoAJ]

Sorry I haven't been more active. Work, work, impromptu date, dad's birthday kinda wrenched my week.

@Alchemist All right, first I support any criticisms my co-GM may have brought up. He is in that position for a reason. So I can confirm everything he has put forward. Now as for the edited sheet, I will bring up my own points.

- First of all, she needs a last name. I don't care if she calls herself Snow, Sand, whatever. Madonna would use her real name to register for something like this. She needs a full name.
- The contradictions in character are rough to balance. She's kind to the point where people take advantage of her, yet shy and untrusting. Does that mean she judges character that poorly? Can't be, since you say right after "she's been known to read others well." The patient yet reckless line, I'm willing to overlook, because I believe I can see where you're going with that, but you're veering dangerously into a case of Meredith Brooks Syndrome (I'm a bitch, I'm a lover, I'm a child, I'm a mother, etc.)
- Orphaned on it's own is sketchy, especially if you're giving her access to a bunch of materials to allow here to be a mythology expert and a martial artist. Giving her a direct link to multiple established canon characters is sketchy as well, definitely to the extend where you're claiming one as a brother and another as a step father.
- Amnesia is one of the defining Mary Sue character traits, and I'm definitely not having that.
- Your starter Pokemon would be at level 5.
- Aura in general is a subject I'm not looking to bring into this RP. It just adds stacked on layers that is going to be lost in the main plot. I don't see a way to incorporate it without bogging it down more than my current life schedule is already doing.
- Nitpicking, but the English graduate in me sees the writing with all the capitalization in random places, and spelling errors, and I die a little inside.

@Shiny Figment
- There are some editing errors in here as well "somethe, ofthe, himso" Other than that it looks pretty good. Welcome aboard. Place your sheet in the characters tab and go try and convince an angry Gary Oak to give you a Pokedex.

[Alchemist]

Sorry I haven't been more active. Work, work, impromptu date, dad's birthday kinda wrenched my week.

@Alchemist All right, first I support any criticisms my co-GM may have brought up. He is in that position for a reason. So I can confirm everything he has put forward. Now as for the edited sheet, I will bring up my own points.

- First of all, she needs a last name. I don't care if she calls herself Snow, Sand, whatever. Madonna would use her real name to register for something like this. She needs a full name.
- The contradictions in character are rough to balance. She's kind to the point where people take advantage of her, yet shy and untrusting. Does that mean she judges character that poorly? Can't be, since you say right after "she's been known to read others well." The patient yet reckless line, I'm willing to overlook, because I believe I can see where you're going with that, but you're veering dangerously into a case of Meredith Brooks Syndrome (I'm a bitch, I'm a lover, I'm a child, I'm a mother, etc.)
- Orphaned on it's own is sketchy, especially if you're giving her access to a bunch of materials to allow here to be a mythology expert and a martial artist. Giving her a direct link to multiple established canon characters is sketchy as well, definitely to the extend where you're claiming one as a brother and another as a step father.
- Amnesia is one of the defining Mary Sue character traits, and I'm definitely not having that.
- Your starter Pokemon would be at level 5.
- Aura in general is a subject I'm not looking to bring into this RP. It just adds stacked on layers that is going to be lost in the main plot. I don't see a way to incorporate it without bogging it down more than my current life schedule is already doing.
- Nitpicking, but the English graduate in me sees the writing with all the capitalization in random places, and spelling errors, and I die a little inside.

@Shiny Figment
- There are some editing errors in here as well "somethe, ofthe, himso" Other than that it looks pretty good. Welcome aboard. Place your sheet in the characters tab and go try and convince an angry Gary Oak to give you a Pokedex.

@NeoAC

I can adjust my story and any thing else as much as you like and am very willing to. Elm is not her step father and I do not have Amnesia. I was to young to remember the full events of that day. She was 6, and now ten years have passed so the memories are at very least foggy.
But my Riolu and the ability to tame Aura is an unnegotiable term for me even if I was not allowed to catch any other pokemon I would be happy with a Lucario that can do every thing it is suggested to be capable of.. If you can not fit that in, then this is simply not the role play for me. I am Sorry for being so stubborn but Lucario Really means that much to me! ^^
On the other hand I will fix any thing else if you can tell me that you will try to give me that lucario the way it's meant to be. (With the ability to tame Aura and every thing! As seen in "The Mystery of Mew" Pokémon movie)

[WriterRaven]

I can adjust my story and any thing else as much as you like and am very willing to. But my Riolu and the ability to tame Aura is an unnegotiable term for me even if I was not allowed to catch any other pokemon I would be happy with a Lucario the can do every thing it is suggested to be capable of.. If you can not fit that is then this is simply not the role play for me. I am Sorry for being so stubborn but Lucario Really means that much to me! ^^
On the other hand I will fix any thing else if you can tell me that you will try to give me that lucario the way it's meant to be. (With the ability to tame Aura and every thing! As seen in "The Mystery of Mew" Pokémon movie)

@Alchemist

This is not a negotiation. We set the rules, and applicants must follow them. Both GMs have now stated several things that we won't accept in applications, and you persist. Neither of us will allow an Aura Guardian character, nor a level 10 starter Pokémon (and especially not one with unusual abilities).

If you aren't willing to do as the GM and co-GM have asked, then we don't want you here. It's as simple as that.