Ardent Dawn

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@EclipseDragon

Sliding "Don't. Trust. Humanity." into the gaps while registering sold me on the post immediately, so there's that. Really nice technique. The inner dialogue and self-conflict is generally great - you could maybe break up descriptive paragraphs with some inner monologue for variety when he's reacting to the action, but the words on the page are all perfectly fine. Most importantly, you fleshed out your character's nature and started preparing some future drama that I can really get behind without rushing the build-up, so I'd call that a solid post all-around ^_^

Now, I need to figure out whether Seras is a nervous wreck or is still holding herself together after that rollercoaster ride - having a friendly face around will probably help :)

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@EclipseDragon There ain't no brakes on this runaway train :P

Love it.

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I'm working on a post, trying to work on the lore of the avatars.

From my original design of David, to seeing other peoples characters such as Germaine - I've kinda made it that David was in control, with Regirock slumbering inside of him, rarely if ever coming to the surface - but Germaine woke him up a little.

I feel if the logic process of the more in control the legendary Pokemon is, the more efficiently they can use their powers makes sense. I don't know what you guys think of that though?

@EclipseDragon

Sounds fine with me - as long as you aren't doing anything that the other players aren't able to, then I don't see any harm adding some narrative depth :)

It can also be a used as a retrospective explanation for how Seras used her Dazzling Gleam to help break up the fight - I was considering describing some sort of Death Star II-esque array of gemstones focusing the light as a metaphorical shot at the roof, but I think I'll save that for when she actually uses it during a battle :P

Edit: Englishing better :P

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Barring any surprises, I'm probably going to chat and hang around with anyone who's interested in doing so (since I've sort of drawn attention to myself), then explore any interesting booths and start selling gemstones to small children until closing time - I'll happily timeskip that or play it out depending on everyone's plans. Considering that meet-and-greets with tourists is part of the festival plans, I'd happily bounce dialogue with someone else while we both handle our PR :)

@Zanavy, would you do the honors of showing how the crowd's responded once everyone's had a chance to post?

Have to say guys, this is easily one of my favourite RPs so far ^_^

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Posting now.

And done, without a spot of blood on the carpet.

For now at least ^.^

@Leos Klien

And somewhere deep in the internet, a DEFCON scale ticks down to a safer level :P

Nice post :)

Also, some bits of Seras' speech seem to have been flipped around in @Rethel34 and @Leos Klien's posts - it's not a huge deal, but I was rather happy with the original version :P

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Rebel-1 to Base: target has been shot down :P

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Seras’ heart dropped like a stone as Germaines lashed out against the Porygon-Z. Arceus purge it. Why here? Why now?! The surrounding crowd was frozen in terror, caught between the desire to flee and reluctance to break the tension. There are so many ways this can go badly wrong.

She gave the young girl a short, tight squeeze, for herself as much as the child, then laid her gently on the ground and rose to her feet. With a thought and a push of energy, each gemstone in the surrounding area began radiating a brilliant light - the statue, her orbiting gemstones, even the feathers piled on the desk near the avatars - until both the avatars and the space around here were shaded in pink. Illuminated by the dazzling gleam, she quietly strode towards the assembled avatars. No sudden movements. Slow, measured steps.

So many ways this can go horribly wrong.

As she stepped into the line dividing the avatars, she felt her heart skip a beat. The cherry-pink light flickered briefly, but did not fade. Gazing up at Germaines, she swallowed deeply and began to stutter. “You’ve been gone for a long time, and by my word as an avatar, you’ll be back for a long time as well. Let’s do things better than the fools of the past.”

Or the present, she thought darkly. As the adrenaline set into her blood and the chains wrapping around her chest loosened, the words began to flow off her tongue smoothly without passing through any censors.

“As an avatar, you have ample time to settle old scores and ample space to travel the earth - none of us lack for either.” She gestured broadly at the assembled crowd. “But this event isn’t about us - it’s about the people who came here to welcome us. Thousands of strangers who’ve never met us and have no concept of any of our separate lives, but who cared enough regardless to travel across the globe to be here.”

Her tone softened.

“None of us can comprehend your past - that goes without saying. But if you want your future to be any different, then it has to start today, in front of everyone who came to welcome you. We don’t need to comprehend your pain to hate the fact that you’ve suffered.” She offered a feeble smile.

And if the speech didn’t work, then he’ll probably kill me.

With cold sweat pooling down her spine, she turned her back to the looming terror and faced the rest of the avatars, face etched deep with the resigned determination of a woman with nowhere left to run. Her voice was level and stern.

“If this is a matter for avatars, then let us keep it among avatars, where we can freely exchange thoughts that do not reflect our group as a whole. If this is a matter of pride, then we have already have a time and date for combat. But brawling a public space will do nobody good, especially the people who came here to thank you.”

She shot Wells a disgusted glare. Maybe I should have waited until this guy was out cold.

“Or you can pick a fight surrounded by thousands of experienced trainers with families to protect,” she remarked snidely. “Oh, and several trigger-happy avatars as well. Your call there.”

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How was the post by the way?
I hope I lived up to the expectation everyone had sleepless nights over haha :D

@Leos Klien

Absolutely fantastic. I'm almost done with my reply and refreshing frantically in case anyone changes the context :P

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<Snipped quote by Ardent Dawn>

Kirlia will probably assist - feel free to use her in your post ^.^

@Leos Klien

Perfect! ^_^ Feel free to tweak her dialogue/actions if you want her to come across differently, but I'll probably keep her non-verbal in the post for simplicity.

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I have posted!
Enjoy!

@Leos Klien

Yeah, it's Gardevoir time :p