Burthstone

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

I'm just going to type down my thoughts after reading the entries that weren't mine.

Closure

I believe this story would have benefited from a bit more information. I see what's going on, she became famous for killing someone she was close to because he was a demon or something, when it was entirely an accident. But, that last paragraph ended so very quickly, and I'm not entirely sure who exactly she put a knife through. A little too many commas there. Hm.

But, yes. Your method of telling a story is fine, I just would have liked to know a little more and see a more properly expanded last part. That's the part that the whole labour was about, after all, I'd like to hear a bit more of it. That's that.

@PlatinumSkink

Yeah, I do agree the piece does need more information as to what Locus was. As for the ending, endings are probably my biggest weakness in writing; I usually can never think of how to end it, then the deadline comes along, and I panic some awful ending together. I'll certainly take this all into consideration if I decide to re-write this later.

Overall, thank you for taking the time to read and review my piece! I appreciate it greatly, and good luck in the contest.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

Okay, so, I will finally un-die and get up a post sometime in the coming Friday to Sunday period. Schools been grinding its knee into my groin for the past few months, but it's going to lighten up some next quarter (Though I will be trying to do NaNo so I'll probably be less active as far as writing goes during November). This quarter ends tomorrow night so once I finish the last of my essays I'll finally be free to post.

Sorry for basically not existing for the past month, give or take.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

So what is the exact status of the games right now? Are the guilds assembling in the Arena now?

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

Okay, because I can't think of a way to put this reasonably in the IC so I'll say it here.

Iron Enigma isn't going to show up for the Games today.

@Caits Distribute this to any parties you feel it necessary to.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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Yes yes, I haven't forgotten the collab! I've just been very busy. I'll be able to write a response to it Sunday evening, since I'm celebrating an early birthday this weekend.

@Leslie Hall

Ah alright, that's fine!

Happy b-day?

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

@Leslie Hall Cool

I'm gonna do that too now.

*Coughs something about a collab*

@Hatakekuro I've finally responded to our collab! Sorry it took so long, but my English teacher is like "ESSAYS! WOOT!"

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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O_o For some reason I mistook you for Oblivion. I'll do something with that first before I got to bed!

@hatakekuro

Oh huh. But that's fine, I can't wait for your response!

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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Wait you mean the Frenzy Plant thing right?

*brofists*

@hatakekuro

I meant the dinner with Iron Enigma.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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You did. I'm the one who needs to post, which I apologize for. I'm only just getting used to college and I'm starting a small rp with a group of friends. On the bright side, I have a girlfriend now!

@hatakekuro

Cool. I hope college treats you well! (Also, I'm waiting for you in our collab as well, or should I mark that as "Abandoned because we're all overworked?")

_{I got a gf recently too! *Brofist*}

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

@Burthstone sure that works for me

@Leslie Hall

Alright!

TitanPad or just plain PM?