With Mr. Lindhall out of the way, you can go into as much or as little detail as you want with the rest of Ellie's clothing purchases, and maybe start browsing other things too if you want. Then Lindhall and the boy (who's one of the new students btw) will show up, you'll be introduced, and the guided purchases can continue while the boy browses for clothes. Sound good?
I also want you to know that I'm trying to write my replies so that we only see into Ellie-Mai's head, for the time being. She's the only important character here right now, for all that I hope to make Lindhall memorable, and stories tend to read better when they only stick to the main characters' thoughts or the most important thoughts of others. So basically I'm trying to describe only what Ellie can see, hear, and perceive until someone else's thoughts are important enough to share. Are you okay with that approach? I should still be able to keep most of my posts nice and long, or at least medium-length.
The above note is in reference to this post.
I also want you to know that I'm trying to write my replies so that we only see into Ellie-Mai's head, for the time being. She's the only important character here right now, for all that I hope to make Lindhall memorable, and stories tend to read better when they only stick to the main characters' thoughts or the most important thoughts of others. So basically I'm trying to describe only what Ellie can see, hear, and perceive until someone else's thoughts are important enough to share. Are you okay with that approach? I should still be able to keep most of my posts nice and long, or at least medium-length.
The above note is in reference to this post.