Okay, so that's three responses of meh quality done, but I'm also going to try and give Frengo and Killbox things to do so I'm not done.
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@Leslie Hall
Well basically they are above the law and tasked with protecting the the galaxy from any threat worth their time and talents using whatever means necessary.
Well basically they are above the law and tasked with protecting the the galaxy from any threat worth their time and talents using whatever means necessary.
Thought. Maybe the Kingsguard should act more like spectre's in mass effect.
@Leslie Hall
Well, you got me. That makes sense.
In other news I'm bored and if anyone wants to talk to me directly in the next few hours there will be a Discord link bellow.
Anyway, writing stuff.
@Crimson Raven
Are Aegis' arms up or down? Not sure its important, but it might be.
Well, you got me. That makes sense.
In other news I'm bored and if anyone wants to talk to me directly in the next few hours there will be a Discord link bellow.
Anyway, writing stuff.
@Crimson Raven
Are Aegis' arms up or down? Not sure its important, but it might be.
@Leslie Hall
Lucinda has been slowly inviting all of the children to the meeting. And here I thought Rida was going to have the opportunity to crash it. I do appreciate that you are trying to hurry things along by saying its almost time for the meeting, but that can just as effectively be achieved by skipping time as it is still hours away.
@Cuccoruler
Might want to copy and paste Nyarlathotep. Also to say that you will win through strategy is kinda cringy to me as of course people win wars through some strategy or another.
I'll post later.
Lucinda has been slowly inviting all of the children to the meeting. And here I thought Rida was going to have the opportunity to crash it. I do appreciate that you are trying to hurry things along by saying its almost time for the meeting, but that can just as effectively be achieved by skipping time as it is still hours away.
@Cuccoruler
Might want to copy and paste Nyarlathotep. Also to say that you will win through strategy is kinda cringy to me as of course people win wars through some strategy or another.
I'll post later.
@Leslie Hall
Well okly is happening in the past. So our one kingsguard character will be at the meeting in time, though firetigress has been absent these past few days so that may be a problem... As for the the dark side, they've sworn their allegiance to you, just give them orders to prepare and or scout out for an attack. Maybe send @Legion02 and his dragons to make a declaration of war at the capitol or something. we could put Okly in the present if we did that.
@Leslie Hall
EDIT: I don't think breakfast should go on much longer. I think I'll wrap that up and then we can be preparing for the meeting. that may be interrupted by raining hellfire.
Well okly is happening in the past. So our one kingsguard character will be at the meeting in time, though firetigress has been absent these past few days so that may be a problem... As for the the dark side, they've sworn their allegiance to you, just give them orders to prepare and or scout out for an attack. Maybe send @Legion02 and his dragons to make a declaration of war at the capitol or something. we could put Okly in the present if we did that.
@Leslie Hall
EDIT: I don't think breakfast should go on much longer. I think I'll wrap that up and then we can be preparing for the meeting. that may be interrupted by raining hellfire.
@KillBox
Sorry for taking so long. Its still a little light, but I won't concern myself with that this time around. The only thing that needs to change is to put willpower into talents, but I suppose I will be doing that when I put it in the characters section and then there's how you describe him as a natural leader, which does not seem important to his character or supported by anything else in the bio except his royal blood. I'll just let you think about that one. Accepted.
@SgtEasy
So I thought I was going crazy, because it seemed like I could not find reason to accept anything and maybe I was just making excuses. Because despite the length and fairly good quality of your character sheet, I was still apprehensive about accepting it, so I put it out to everyone I thought would respond. And I'm not crazy. Not everyone has responded to those pm's but the consensus of those who did is the character does not fit. Some particular concerns people had were...
That it felt like you were trying too hard to be different from everyone else and that it clashes with the pseudo medieval theme.
The race seems like it would fit more easily into a sci-fi setting than fantasy.
Being of light and dark is the natural state of every being in the world and would definitely not be unique to the Dorn.
His first sword cannot be allowed to cut through steel, and I'm not convinced that a cavalry saber is capable cutting all the way through a man's torso. Precision is certainly not the way I would describe it achieving this.
The marks seem very powerful and even if they threaten death obviously they won't be allowed to kill you.
Should not have the best of both worlds of fast maturing and long lived.
The backstory does not add to, but does not contradict the character.
Having created an entire nation could be abused in the future and seeing as they are a naturally op race and warlike they would probably wreck Celakor if desired. Such a triple threat would also distract from the intended plot.
However there were some suggestions to change it. The character could be made human, like some cavalry commander from another nation with really deadly military training. It would fit in better and be way less op, but not much about his backstory would need to change at all. Being a centaur from not a great important nation somewhere would also fit better. However the idea that I think works best, because it ties him into the story, is to make him a demon.You can keep all of his abilities this way and lead the armies of darkness because I am perfectly okay with Dark side characters being op in order to be obstacles to everyone else. Perhaps you could even combine this with the human cavalry commander idea and he was just so evil or otherwise made a deal with demons for power. My character Raven made a deal with demons for power, so its already something that can be done.
Anyway I cannot accept it in its current state, because I'm not crazy and it clashes too much with what is already there. I am willing to work with you on this though if you want to change things.
That can be arranged.
@Frengo
I don't think that you had to die, but assuming you want to be dead, do you want to be my undead minion? possibly with powers. Possibly trying to fight against my control. My being Raven's of course.
@Leslie Hall
What's holding you up? Can I help?
Sorry for taking so long. Its still a little light, but I won't concern myself with that this time around. The only thing that needs to change is to put willpower into talents, but I suppose I will be doing that when I put it in the characters section and then there's how you describe him as a natural leader, which does not seem important to his character or supported by anything else in the bio except his royal blood. I'll just let you think about that one. Accepted.
@SgtEasy
So I thought I was going crazy, because it seemed like I could not find reason to accept anything and maybe I was just making excuses. Because despite the length and fairly good quality of your character sheet, I was still apprehensive about accepting it, so I put it out to everyone I thought would respond. And I'm not crazy. Not everyone has responded to those pm's but the consensus of those who did is the character does not fit. Some particular concerns people had were...
That it felt like you were trying too hard to be different from everyone else and that it clashes with the pseudo medieval theme.
The race seems like it would fit more easily into a sci-fi setting than fantasy.
Being of light and dark is the natural state of every being in the world and would definitely not be unique to the Dorn.
His first sword cannot be allowed to cut through steel, and I'm not convinced that a cavalry saber is capable cutting all the way through a man's torso. Precision is certainly not the way I would describe it achieving this.
The marks seem very powerful and even if they threaten death obviously they won't be allowed to kill you.
Should not have the best of both worlds of fast maturing and long lived.
The backstory does not add to, but does not contradict the character.
Having created an entire nation could be abused in the future and seeing as they are a naturally op race and warlike they would probably wreck Celakor if desired. Such a triple threat would also distract from the intended plot.
However there were some suggestions to change it. The character could be made human, like some cavalry commander from another nation with really deadly military training. It would fit in better and be way less op, but not much about his backstory would need to change at all. Being a centaur from not a great important nation somewhere would also fit better. However the idea that I think works best, because it ties him into the story, is to make him a demon.You can keep all of his abilities this way and lead the armies of darkness because I am perfectly okay with Dark side characters being op in order to be obstacles to everyone else. Perhaps you could even combine this with the human cavalry commander idea and he was just so evil or otherwise made a deal with demons for power. My character Raven made a deal with demons for power, so its already something that can be done.
Anyway I cannot accept it in its current state, because I'm not crazy and it clashes too much with what is already there. I am willing to work with you on this though if you want to change things.
hello zombie kalar
That can be arranged.
@Frengo
I don't think that you had to die, but assuming you want to be dead, do you want to be my undead minion? possibly with powers. Possibly trying to fight against my control. My being Raven's of course.
@Leslie Hall
What's holding you up? Can I help?
@Leslie Hall
Glad to have you back. Would you like me to pm you all that has happened in your absence? it hasn't been too much.
Glad to have you back. Would you like me to pm you all that has happened in your absence? it hasn't been too much.
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