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<Snipped quote by DirtyDingo>So your basically saying that every analogy must be spoon fed to the reader like they are a child who has no clue what an analogy is then. I can work with that. I will update the post to reflect that level of reading.


I'm not saying that at all but if you want to be a sarcastic arsehole over a little criticism you can just leave?
Then my point stands! I missed the point because it was not properly conveyed, nowhere within the post did her feelings feel analogous to those directed towards the Mandos; she is just coming across as racist. Furthermore the main problem (to which the god-mode comment was addressed) I had with the post was the final sentence. "Harma then sent the beast to the infirmary."

HOW? It's all well and dandy that you win, I'm not disputing that, I'm not disputing that she wouldn't beat the Gamorrean hands down. My problem is you essentially end the post with 'I win.' With that wording she could have done anything from punch her in the throat to simply saying "pip-pip, cheerio lad, off to the med-room you go. There's a good chap."
@Burning Kitty I'm going to need you to alter your post a bit to either include more detail about the spaff with Gamorrean or change the way in which she is defeated. I have also never heard in any legends or canon material of a Jedi being able to perform such an action as making themselves immovable, especially when it's a Gamorrean that would weigh at least twice what you do bull-rushing you. Now, using the force to enhance your strength or slightly tip the Gamorrean off balance? Fair enough, easily done. But what you just wrote is very border god-mode and it seems that there isn't much actual point to the post itself. Please rectify these problems or I'm gonna have to give a first warning.

All our characters are super-hard, let's not call that into question, even the non-Jedi. However the scenario depicted just doesn't seem likely to me and it is incredibly vague. I wouldn't even have a problem if you did the same thing but just explained it more. Right now it very much reads as "I don't like Gamorreans, let's antagonise her." Fair enough. (But not really as she's been trained as a Jedi but let's not get into that.) Then you explain what she's doing with her powers, but then Harma just...wins? No-go I'm afraid chap. Especially when it seems the only points (that I can tell) of the post are to establish that she can handle herself and that she doesn't like Gamorreans.
Alessia Arvenni



The Krayt Fang

@Delta44 @The Elvenqueen



"We're under orders from master Antilles to sabotage the listening post which has been established here at the former acadmy on Dantooine, Maz has also requested that if we are able to remain undetected for long enough, we are to perform a data mine on the archives and recover as much of the knowledge as possible. Once that secondary objective is completed, the acadamy is to be destroyed to prevent the Mandalorians studying our combat forms and technologies." Alessia replied, swinging her chair around to face Aether as she spoke. Her voice was soft and sullen as it always was, something that a lot of people found to make them uneasy. It was one of the reasons Alessia had been enjoying the company of Merak and Aether so much. They didn't seem to be bothered by the general lack of self-confidence she always seemed to display. Though the fact of the matter was that she held all the confidence she needed, everyone was so used to Maria's outgoing and boisterous nature that they tended to expect the same from her.

Perhaps they could both sense that within her, even though Mer wasn't a force sensitive, she could tell that he was at least a little fond of her and that alone was enough to set Alessia's mind at ease. "Perhaps it would be best if you were to go and see to it that Captain Craske and his men are ready for landing. There's only ten of them, so it shouldn't take long." She continued, stopping for a moment to think of the man and his chalky white skin and matching hair. Alessia had read a lot about the Echani before, and was always surprised to find they were intense rivals with the Mandalorians at almost every turn. A gruntled veteran of many battles in service to the Republic, Alessia knew from studying his culture that he hated these missions wherein he was forced to don the heavy armour of the Mandalorians soas to to remain undetected.

But it was a necessity to allow the strike team to hide in plain sight and impersonate a patrol around the exterior of the enclave, whilst feeding information to Merak and the two Jedi within the base. Alessia was glad that it was Craske and his men alongside them, their success to fatality ratio was the lowest of any squad among the surviving Republic forces in the Valkaina enclave, and with good reason. The Blitz Crew's tactics and infiltration skills seemed to be second to none among their peers. If they had any at all.


Maria Arvenni



Valkaina: The Port

@Sohtem




"Not much, just glad to be getting out of these damned caves again! It feels like it's been forever since I last went out on a mission, even if this is only a recruitment bit. Is your gear already on the Dragon? We won't get far on Tatooine without a disguise of some form. My kit is." Maria exclaimed, she was ever so excited to be able to explore the galaxy again, though she had never been to Tatooine before, she had read that it was covered in sand, nothing but sand everywhere. The prospect of this excited her, she loved sand, the planets and regions that tended to be littered with it were always hot and temperate places, much the opposite of Valkaina where it was cold and bitter. Maria much preferred warmth than the cold. Though then again, she also hated being underground, so perhaps the vast openness of a desert was so pleasing to her because of that fact? She didn't truly know, all that she knew was that soon she would be out in the wide galaxy, and nothing would stop her from achieving her goal.
Little shorter than I had wanted, but I'm sure that'll change as we progress. :P


I'm sure that will change once [@Zutsuko] comes online :)
MACHINES CAN SENSE FEAR! XD I nearly died at that haha. Writing now.
That is accurate. They are on their way to Dantooine, which the Mandos have transformed into an outpost since the war's end. Mer, Aether and Alessia are tasked with taking the Jedi temple from their hands, by any means necessary.
@DirtyDingo Yeah I was just going by the CS XD I'll have to edit it in later :P


No worries buddy, I look forward to it.
@Delta44 Just so you know bud, it is Maria whom is this ataru instructor, not Alessia. It's my bad, for some reason a tonne of stuff in their CS was the wrong way around 😂
@DirtyDingoYou still allowing players?


It would depend on what you are thinking at this point if I'm honest. Pm Me.
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