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Everyone looks to have gotten their first choice, woo hoo! Lucky ducks.
I'll work on my character tonight and tomorrow and we should get things rolling either Sat or Sun. I do have family coming tonight and staying for a week so they may take of some of my time.
@FernStone I didn't really need the additional paragraph about his personality, as it just adds more clutter in my mind but it's totally fine to keep it, I just didn't need folks putting in extra work when we've got an IC to divulge contextual details about how they react to situations and people.
Moving on to history! "But soon he was one of the few left without them." Assuming the city they're in is vast, he wouldn't be considered part of a 'few' without a power but the only one, so you should tweak that phrasing. And your final paragraph regarding the reunion is also unneeded since that is something I'll be explaining in my introduction post. And the awareness of having a power shouldn't be included in the CS since that will come a tad bit into the RP itself.
Other than those things needing tweaks, you're free to post in the CS tab and you're also given Air, congrats!
@Sterling No tweaks needed, you're good to go! Your girl has Fire. Feel free to post her into the CS tab at your leisure.
@Silverink You gave additional information a bit prematurely as your CS shouldn't include life after the 'second' kidnapping. The first kidnapping is fine but the CS itself should not have information about them discovering their skills (or finding fame) since it will happen in the IC itself, as opposed to before we kick things off. So the two paragraphs in his personality section can probably be deleted.
Like above, your history needs to be rewritten a bit since halfway through he gets his power but that isn't the case. He'll be taught the power in the IC so you'll have to change the half or your history. You could touch upon his first kidnapping if you'd like or you could talk more about the others in his family, since it sounds like he had a big boisterous upbringing and still felt like the black sheep of sorts.
You'll be given Beast but you can't post in the CS tab until I see the edits done on your guy. :)
@Panic Like SI, you may be better off deleting the paragraph portion of your girl's personality section. We won't talk about their circus life/powers since they won't have been informed of them yet.
Your history looks good to me, save for the last paragraph which you'll need to delete but you can touch upon it in the IC, likely your introduction post.
So with her job, you'll just put maid instead saying "before the show" etc.
And she'll be getting Greenery. So once you tweak those and run it by me again, you'll be able to post it in the CS tab.
Everyone looks to have gotten their first choice, woo hoo! Lucky ducks.
I'll work on my character tonight and tomorrow and we should get things rolling either Sat or Sun. I do have family coming tonight and staying for a week so they may take of some of my time.
@FernStone I didn't really need the additional paragraph about his personality, as it just adds more clutter in my mind but it's totally fine to keep it, I just didn't need folks putting in extra work when we've got an IC to divulge contextual details about how they react to situations and people.
Moving on to history! "But soon he was one of the few left without them." Assuming the city they're in is vast, he wouldn't be considered part of a 'few' without a power but the only one, so you should tweak that phrasing. And your final paragraph regarding the reunion is also unneeded since that is something I'll be explaining in my introduction post. And the awareness of having a power shouldn't be included in the CS since that will come a tad bit into the RP itself.
Other than those things needing tweaks, you're free to post in the CS tab and you're also given Air, congrats!
@Sterling No tweaks needed, you're good to go! Your girl has Fire. Feel free to post her into the CS tab at your leisure.
@Silverink You gave additional information a bit prematurely as your CS shouldn't include life after the 'second' kidnapping. The first kidnapping is fine but the CS itself should not have information about them discovering their skills (or finding fame) since it will happen in the IC itself, as opposed to before we kick things off. So the two paragraphs in his personality section can probably be deleted.
Like above, your history needs to be rewritten a bit since halfway through he gets his power but that isn't the case. He'll be taught the power in the IC so you'll have to change the half or your history. You could touch upon his first kidnapping if you'd like or you could talk more about the others in his family, since it sounds like he had a big boisterous upbringing and still felt like the black sheep of sorts.
You'll be given Beast but you can't post in the CS tab until I see the edits done on your guy. :)
@Panic Like SI, you may be better off deleting the paragraph portion of your girl's personality section. We won't talk about their circus life/powers since they won't have been informed of them yet.
Your history looks good to me, save for the last paragraph which you'll need to delete but you can touch upon it in the IC, likely your introduction post.
So with her job, you'll just put maid instead saying "before the show" etc.
And she'll be getting Greenery. So once you tweak those and run it by me again, you'll be able to post it in the CS tab.
