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7 yrs ago
Current Take time out of your life to find something to laugh about and smile at least once a day.
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7 yrs ago
Netflix is to blame for the sudden resurgence of my animu phase. >:c It was supposed to be background noise, but then I went and got invested... twice in a row.
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7 yrs ago
What techniques do you use to open these "pickle jars"? Or is it just raw pickle jar opening strength? (not to be confused with regular strength)
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7 yrs ago
I feel honored to be Miss Capn's Valentine! (/ε\*)
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8 yrs ago
What a sick, masochistic lion.
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@Undine That's actually not a bad idea. And I think Esmeralda can find her way to the diner


Join ur diner bbys Esmeralda. Order ur eggs and bacon. Get ur coffee. Ahaha AHAHAHAHAHAHA
@Witch Cat@Didos

We'll have to wait for the GM team to all get together tomorrow before we can accept these characters! You guys keep catching us when we're asleep or busy. ;3;

Or in this case, when we're about to go to sleep. Or well... *cough* I mean half the team is asleep already—you know what, sh. I'm going to bed. SH. I have class tomorrow. SHHHH
@Holy Soldier

I think it's insofar as, these Gods have domains within their grasp that are among the ones they have majority of control in. Ra is the God of the Sun, therefore his main domain is within that area. Horus' eyes are the sun and the moon, but that's a small tidbit - a factoid. It's like saying that Freyja, because she resides over half of the warriors brought in from the battlefield by her valkyrie is currently the 100% domain rule of the dead and death. You have to account for subcategories within these domains and how a power would fit within them, given their children have just a modicum of godly wrath.

What you've done with this power is that you've amped it up more than you necessarily should have. You've essentially taken these rather strong powers associated with Solar and Lunar manipulation and attributed to a God of the Sky who has only his foot in the door, so to speak, in both of these domains. We had this issue with Apple's Apollo child in that he interpreted powers and certain domains in a way that shies too far from the God itself. You've done that in a different way, though. You've taken something minor and amplified it as if Horus was both God of the Sun and God of the Moon. If we're basing his own domain, his own powers off a modicum of what his children potentially know, we can assume that Horus is just as powerful as both Ra and Khonsu in domains they feature quite heavily in - and in Khonsu's regard, one he only features in.

There can be overlap. That's going to happen no matter what and in no matter which pantheon you're in. It's just the fact of how you treat that overlap, and whether it truly personifies the God and their perceived personalities. It's more in line with how they ruled over their domain, rather than just what their patronage was known for. For instance you have Freyja, a Vanir who's essentially queen of the Valkyries, among many other gods, she also resides over death. However, unlike Hel, she presides over the death of warriors she chooses - half and half with Odin, essentially. She's still a goddess of death, but her domain is interpreted differently in a way that it's not just death, it's a subset of it.

Thanatos - bringer of death. He's essentially the Greek's grim reaper. Hermes delivers the dead. Hades presides over the dead. There's overlap, yes, but they're all different even between each other. You have to be aware of that prior to making your character."




Now to get to the point of taking care of each of your points.

1. Cool, as long as you know Horus wouldn't reveal himself to her, would likely have not told her any of his past, etc. She can construe stories about him, have a notion of him, or he can just be the general, "My father said he was heading out for smokes. He's been out for smokes for about 18 years now." Kinda of deal. That would put a lot of that resentment you seem to tie closely to your character.

2. Yes, we'd definitely love for that not to be included in his actual CS. It's a tricky concept, fusing with anyone's characters because it removes control, gets too complex, and just gets generally too sticky. When it's two of your own characters, it's easier to deal with, but when it's someone else's or an NPC, it gets... too complicated.

3. I already touched upon this. We're not looking to suck out your originality, we're looking out for anything that can be considered too over powered. This entire section of your CS is too overpowered and has the issues I've touched on prior. You've got an assortment of powers in this one section that you've labeled one solo power. There's a difference between having various uses of a power, like being psychic, having telepathy, etc. and then there's having sub-powers hidden beneath one umbrella term for a power. I mean, most things like solar manipulation, darkness manipulation, light manipulation, etc. have sub-categories within themselves, but those are essentially built upon a foundation. Adom's Sun and Moon just mesh all of these multiple powers that have too much variation. I can see the connection between each, but there's too much going on for this power to be anywhere near an acceptable level.

4. This is difficult to analyze from any standpoint without harshly critiquing it. This is acceptable in an environment where this character is the main character, definitely. When you're writing your own story, usually the main character has a charisma about him/her. Commander Shepard, Harry Potter - my mind is currently drawing a blank regarding literary figures, but you get the gist of it. They're great to use in an environment in which you can shape everything yourself. In this setting? Not so much.

There's also that good adage: "Show, don't tell." You're all telling us, "This character is a born leader. He can draw people toward him. Be decisive. Lead by example. Take responsibility." However, that's a very, very, very good way to ultimately kill your character preemptively, especially when you're surrounded by amazing writers like this. You're staking your claim on the leadership role in this group without anyone's consent. You're making your character charismatic and that's a dangerous personality trait to use in Roleplaying where you reply on the interaction and the consent of 6+ other people. You're very much assuming we're okay with this by including this. I'm not. In fact, anytime I see someone put: Charismatic, Manipulative, Intelligent, Perceptive, etc. I immediately want all of my characters to refute those claims. It makes me want the exact opposite of what you do and immediately creates conflict right off the bat.

These traits, these specific traits, rely far too much on other players' consent. You see where I'm going with it? I could rant for days on this. But, you have to think, "Does this personality trait I'm giving my character absolutely require another's compliance to work?" and if it's solely dependent on another player, or all players' consent, it's not a trait you should use in a Roleplay. The only things I can think of you can get away with something like that is if you absolutely plan on making people hate your character, but again, that's a very cheap way to get people to loathe who you're making. It's more rewarding when your character's actions speak a lot louder than what you've told us.

But, yeah, the reason we don't particularly want traits or powers like this is how much it relies on utter manipulation of other characters. You can be manipulative, you can be conniving, you can be backhanded ICly, we aren't barring you from that, but simply stating that your character is in such a manner as that particular power has portrayed doesn't really fly. There are certain traits that you can simply state: generous, malicious, kind, capricious. And then there are those that have to specifically be shown and built upon and require not only your knowledge of the character, but your knowledge and skill in writing.

In essence, it's very difficult to be manipulative. It's very easy to say your character is manipulative. In this particular case, it's very difficult to be a good leader. It's extremely easy to say your character's a good leader. Simply saying your character are these things with the language and the word choice and the context being used, as it is now, totes the line of Godmodding very, very precariously. So, no, you can't just tell us, "My character has innate charisma. He's a natural born leader." You have to specifically show this to us in the IC. In written word. In plot and character development. You can tell us your plans and what you want out of the character, but you just can't state it the way you did with, "Blood of the King." When it comes to something like this, we want to see it shown to us. Having it spelled out leaves out the fun of it and creates unnecessary conflict from the assumption that every player is okay with this.

(I mean, even if you were to go around asking everyone here, "Are you okay with my character having X Trait?" it's still... it's still not going to fly. Because then this entire thing just went over everyone's heads. We don't want these traits explicitly stated as fact and truth; we want things of this nature to be developed in a way that gives everyone a choice to accept it. Where's the challenge and intrigue if you can just say, "My character is charismatic and intelligent and a leader"? I see CSes as a base format. A kind of "Begin Here" thing and if we start at the beginning with not enough room to branch out the plot and our characters, then what's the point? These things severely stifle growth, especially concerning growth between characters.)
@HalfOfLancelot So, the person who reserved Flynn hasn't been on in three days. Should I post what I have for Rapunzel and fix the history portion later? I wasn't sure how to write it without including some information that might affect Flynn's backstory.


Yeah! By all means, go ahead. Cas is currently busy with some RL stuff, so I don't think it would hurt to post her and then see what needs to be changed a little later on - likely won't be much, or at least not a lot that's too big of an issue.
@fluorescent

Take your time! Thanks for checking in with us, though. ;p We aren't too stringent on posting within a certain time frame, as long as you keep us up to date on whether or not you're still alive lol.
Sorry this took so long; classes have started for me and it's a bit chaotic~


Same, tho. Classes are dumb and I am totally using that as an excuse for laziness. Sh.
@Morose

DO WHAT YOU GOTTA DO GIRL.

I know a lot of 'Muricans are starting college/uni like right now. And a lot of Europeans be movin into their dorms soon. Minus @McHaggis who's a loser and takes trains to Hogwarts. Ugh.


the past in a gnarled, twisted arm





prince phillip's apartment ⇒ fae's bar and diner
just wants his usual order, jess :( @MiddleEarthRoze









Rare is this love, keep it covered
I need you to run to me, run to me, lover
Run until you feel your lungs bleeding





He slouched over the edge - a burden laid dead weight against his back. The smoke twirled from his lips, pressed against the cracks in the surface and billowed in the cold sting of morning air. Rain pattered against the side of the building, a steady thrumming a head faster than the beating in his chest. He slouched further, let the scaffolding of his windowsill rustle underneath his cotton shorts. Wind carried the weight of trees and the quiet chirrups of a cuckoo intermingled between the low sounds of a mourning dove. Phillip craned his head low, let the sounds reach his ears before he hummed and leaned back.

A deep seated dread mocked him, hung above his head in the low light of dawn. Sleep came fleeting, sprinkled between restless dreams and that aggravating in between that taxed him more than gave him needed rest. The earthquake from a few hours prior had tossed him from a dreamless slumber, something deep and fulfilling. It dumped him on the side of the road and left him puttering behind, just within reach, but never able to grasp. It thrust him into bad habit after bad habit: alcohol, 'internet browsing' cut short from a power outage, brooding, and ultimately hanging precariously out of his window with a cigarette in his mouth and rain splattering against his entire front half.

Hours later, the call had nearly succeeded in tipping him over, though he caught himself mid jump. His grumbling stopped him from sliding back in and answering, letting the message beep and the voicemail go through. Eventually, Phillip told himself, his finger tapping the end of the cigarette over the edge. The ashes coated his bare knees and another grumble rumbled in his chest. The mourning dove stopped, addled by the rain and likely seeking shelter. Or something got it; he didn't see a hawk swirling by, but the rain wouldn't stop an animal from a good meal.

Contemplating wouldn't do him any good. It wouldn't provide him the next five hours he wanted of sleep, nor would it allow him respite from the day ahead. And it sure as hell wouldn't fix him any coffee. Yet, Phillip staid still, slouched over the scaffolding with his eyes peering onto the untouched grass below. How to avoid pestering neighbors? Paranoid tales looking toward him among others? They would, just out of sheer misfortune and not because he could do anything - everyone knew how capable they all were and he was no different. Still.

Phillip scowled, spitting out another billow of smoke from his lungs and tossing the snub of a cigarette into a bush below. He slid back, tucked himself in and swung into his room with much pause. The window sill shut with a click and he pattered through his small apartment and into the one bathroom he had. The water spouted cold for a good solid five minutes, of which left Phillip gritting his teeth until it turned a searing hot. He screamed for a good few seconds, unabashed and only slightly ashamed. It took longer to adjust to the swing in temperatures than it did getting cleaned. Once he did - adding in a few touch ups here and there - Phillip took a good long stare at his phone until he finally slid in a password and pressed the speaker to his ear.

Meeting. Library. Dorothy missing - dead, Phillip corrected himself. Dorothy was almost certainly dead. He rolled his eyes and let the phone bounce onto his mattress, still chattering away. Admitting anything was against everything Phillip stood for and the stubbornness that ran through him refused to let go. No Cataclysm. Not another one, that would take too much caring to deal with. Phillip pressed the heel of his hand into his eye, rubbed until light bloomed in his sight and growled at nothing. He slid his phone on again to check the time before tossing it aside once more.

Hours stood between him and something to do. Anything to do. Phillip shoved on enough clothes to be considered decent and left his apartment with as much haste as he could muster. Phillip's own concerns stopped at the low rumble of his stomach, quickly masked by his beat up truck's engine literally roaring to semi-life (Schrodinger's Vehicle, he called it). The ride to the library remained terse and Phillip idled in his truck for far too long before shifting back into gear and barreling away. No use wasting time likely sleeping on one of the desks - he settled for Fae's Diner and upon arrival, settled in the farthest booth he could find. His sneer passed over Beauty and Adam, then Sherlock before finally settling onto the leather across from him.

"I doubt coffee's going to help anyone," he mumbled, opening the menu, though he never did order anything different - two English muffin filled to the brim with egg, sunny-side, and bacon, never sausage and a side of hash browns with a hot, spattering cup of decaf, black as night coffee. He was certain Jess would already be exasperatedly cooking something up for him. Maybe. Phillip didn't spare a glance, his own pride getting in the way of a hearty meal. Aside from the earthquake, the call, the general sense of 'Oh shit, something's going down,' crawling all over his back and shoulders, it seemed like any normal day. Though, it was never a good sign if Phillip ever decided to step out of his home past noon, looking for something to eat with his usual coffee travel mug.
@Sailorsadie@Hunter of Dreams

I'll notify Undine! :o (there is a Flynn Rider on the way, so for the Rapunzel, if you're writing about anything concerning him, I'd suggest keeping it vague or shooting a PM to @flightless-angel-castiel if you'd like to discuss a few things with her)
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