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Jorick said
IT'S GONNA BE FUCKING INTIMATEI'M GONNA LIGHT ME SOME CANDLESLIGHT UP SOME INCENSEGET IN THE FUCKING MOODAND THEN READ THAT BITCH LIKE IT AIN'T NEVER BEEN READ BEFOREEVERY SENTENCEEVERY SYLLABLEEVERY SINGLE LETTEREACH ONE GIVEN A LOVING CARESS BY MY HUNGRY EYESIT'S GONNA BE SO FUCKING HOT MAN


Hey now, you're making it awkward.
Hey Valeric, no input for what to do in Rendezvous?
Basically, as others have said, it's up to the RP, but once every week is a good minimum for starting up. One problem with advanced... Or well a lot of RP's is that when someone stops posting or is very delayed, others will think the RP have died. So weekly, until mutual trust is formed, is a decent goal to strive for when you're starting up a game.
Fallenreaper said
Be thankful, Emily just committed murder and is about to get her ass handed to her because of it. :p She's not doing too hot.


Well, Vignar might have been of help there ;p
Well, there is now! Nathair and Quartz at least. Also put up a little something for Clayman and Piper. That should help.
Free Billy


Quartz and Eowyn were close enough to see what had brought itself to the beach. It was a giant version of the fish in the tank; with an equally menacing collar in the shape of a sea-star... But at this distance they could see something peculiar the smaller fish did not have. Humanoid creatures, dressed in algae took the shape of buxom women and handsome men. Each sung it's own song, and it was these creatures that lured the crowd towards the water...

Quartz' fangs dug into the fish, but it's thick fat protected it quite well.; The struggle that ensued did more damage to the alagae creatures (several of which were ripped off and sent flying) than the monster itself. The same wasn't true for Eowyn; whose eruption launched the monster on it's side; displaying heavy burns on it's belly...

Not that this stopped any of the hypnotised to approach it. One particularly unfortunate woman made it to the monster; only to be grabbed by one of the sea-star arms and thrown onto it's back, where the algae creatures fought for the woman like bridesmaids for the bouquet; ripping her apart limb by limb in the process before devouring her flesh...

The monster-fish would attempt to turn around, back on it's belly and if it managed to do so; attempt to beach it's massive girth to reach it's young... No matter how many holder, or hypnotised people were in the way...

A Clayman's Finale


The gravity sphere posed a problem... Or so it would have if the woman didn't dismiss her staff in favour for a large hammer, which she promptly used to smash in one of the corridor's walls. If Soneillon and Adeline paid attention, they'd be able to hear doctor Valenci shriek at the sight of this. The man with the golem's arm, on the other hand, remained to pull the chain. If Soneillon was going to lock him down, he would do the same to the spirit...

Will 'o the Piper


When Charles (and a little later Sigmund) passed through the portal, they would find their spirits could not. Perhaps that was only for the best... However, what was not for the best were the two oni noticing them. “Why you bring big humanses!” The red oni barked at the kappa when it noticed Charles. “Big ones too chewy!” It shouted in rage. As it spoke, a thick saliva was spit all over. The kappa were unaffected by it, but Charles and Sigmund would find it very sticky if they stepped into it...

The red oni, unable to control it's growing rage, used it's tree to swat several kappa at once in the air. “Throw it off mountain!” The oni commanded the kappa, who shivered in fear as they would attempt to follow it's command. However, besides sending his minions, the red oni too approached the holder, threateningly raising it's tree-cudgel...

The blue oni, on the other hand, remained a lot calmer. From the back, it leered at scene. It seemed to prefer thinking before acting, which could mean it was very dangerous...
You don't get the message at all...

Alright; this is how it is. The article in itself isn't a bad advice... If you're writing a novel or are this super-ambitious (and slightly delusional) RP'r and have the time on your hands to rewrite posts constantly without annoying your co-players that you take too long. However, the point of working with multiple iterations is trying multiple approaches, rather than assuming your first idea is best (it rarely ever is). Through writing the same thing twice over, you're actually learning from your first attempt. If you wanna sell a book without jumping on the vampires-are-hot train, this is pretty good advice.

However, the lot of you posted some seriously stupid shit. If you change something after 2 paragraphs, your iterations are far too short and your writing style will likely suffer from inconsistency because you lose the same flow over the course of writing. Too many breaks = bad. Also this isn't about planning, it's about re-imagining and gaining new perspectives through experience. Even if you plan what you want to write (and yeah you should plan ahead probably) this method doesn't lose an inch of it's usefulness. If you think it does, you're either arrogant or stubborn.

Also, here's an edit, because I couldn't help myself.

The purpose and practice of novel-writing are completely different. As Dervish touched on, roleplaying is an activity you do for fun. Or well, most of us. The majority of RP'rs uses it for escapism. Rewriting can be a chore, which means that you're now spending the time you are trying to have fun or escape RL doing something you don't like. Kinda counter-productive, no?
Well, they'll probably not like you very much. Or see you as food. Prolly both.
Free Billy is waiting on Hedya.

Speaking of which, I think it's been Chukkle's turn for Will 'o the Piper for a while.
West Watch Tower
Naraem & Esyllt

Naream cursed, hoping that beheading the succubus would not prove problematic if he decided to experiment his necromancy on a demon corpse, those thoughts vanished as he noticed the giant demon, charging right at him and some of the others in his path. He glanced at the mage who had summoned a golem of some kind. "You, what do you need for a golem to match that demon, quickly!"

Esyllt was surprised by Naream’s sudden question, but instantly understood his intent. “Something heavy for it’s body and a human soul!” She shouted back, although knowing summoning a golem powerful enough to go toe-to-toe with the hooved monstrosity would put her out of a fighting condition. Would it be worth it, she wondered, but if they didn’t stop the demon it would get behind them and everyone would be in a bad position if they were flanked…

When he heard the words human soul he forced the wight to turn around and spread it’s arms, with a grunt Naream reached inside the ribcage and tore out the soulstone of the fallen warrior that gave the wight it’s memories of how to be a warrior. As soon as he did that the wight collapsed, as it only became bones without the stone powering it. He tossed it the golemancer, “Use that!” He growled and then grabbed his amulet and opened the portal, sweat pouring down his forehead and the other wight collapsed as he no longer willed it to life. This time instead of opening the portal to a part of the extra-plana laboratory with wights or other undead already ready he opened it to the ‘waste’ area and out came various bones and skeletons that were not fit to be made into wights or undead beasts, along with corpses stinking of rot and decay. Naream stumbled, unbalanced as his vision blurred, yes, definitely too much magic, he gagged and spit out a pleghm of blood and tried to stumble out of the way. “Use it all!” He managed to shout as he fell to his hands and knees and started crawling out of the way as fast he could, hoping he’d be able to do it before he passed out.

Esyllt caught the stone, and it sent a chill down her spine. She never had been comfortable forging with human lives. The drow necromancer had supplied her with all she needed, but all the magic took it’s toll on Naream. “Leave it to me!” Esyllt assured Naream, hoping that her words would give the drow confidence in their survival. She then stared straight into the soul in her hand, and stretched her other out at the pile of flesh and bone.

“Rise!”

Mana surged from the soul stone through her body, as it’s magic shot through her veins like a burst of adrenaline. Esyllt felt the fallen warrior pass through her, as she channeled it towards her building blocks. The bones twirled into the air and stuck into a pile of meat that shaped into a horrific undead juggernaut to match the size of the charging demon. Spines wrapped around the meat to keep it in place, ribcases stuck out it’s chest and hands like blades, and skulls fortified it’s weak points.

“And fight!”

Barely to completion, the undead golem dug it’s feet into the ground and prepared to meet the threat it was created to deal with, head-on. It would be a clash of titans, but Esyllt would not be able to see it. Like Naream, she had exhausted her mana. The lack of magic circling through her body made her muscles feel as if they were burning. She would wheeze if she tried to talk, so heavy was her breathing. The golem had better do it’s job, because she and Naream were clearly no longer in fighting shape… Esyllt’s body slowly collapsed towards the ground, unable to keep herself standing.

In one last attempt to contribute to the battle, Esyllt used her telepathy to warn Draza (for some reason, Esyllt didn’t trust she realised this charge was a forebode for two threats who would be coming after her) as well as to rely a message to the rest of the team… As her other golem had not yet been spotted and the hooved demon ran right past it; no longer being a wall between the walking piece of chessboard and Meryl.

“To those with ranged attacks.” Esyllt spoke directly to all their minds, “Pay attention to the girl, I’ve sent a small golem to hold her down. When it does; you have a clean shot. I plead you make it count. We must end this, the necromancer and I are no longer able to fight.”

And with that, Esyllt closed her eyes and lost consciousness. Whether they would win or lose, she wouldn’t be able to see it. Her and Naream’s fates were in the hands of their allies now...
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