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@SoleAccordExcellent! That was really good! Detailed, well written, no grammar mistakes. Beautiful! I'm sure ProPro will love it.
I feel me and you will either get along really well or totally hate each other....pretty good odds I'd say.

On a separate note, I made this in case I don't get Blue or Green, a profile for Violet....which I would really like to discuss a name change for.



I also added VIOLET to my sample so that's cool

Already done, like my character, I can make optimal use of any ability I have. I'm kind of on the creative side on how to fight with obscure powers so I can always make do.

But I really don't wanna have to in this situation.
Hmmmm, on a serious note, I might need to think of a back-up to my back-up.
@Charnobylisk I'm glad I could make you smile, comedy and action, those are my two best categories. Probably why all of my stories are anime-comedies.
@ProProHow do we decide who wins?

I think my history, personality, and sample are all solid. I've minimized grammatical errors and I think my scene's were on some level of creative and showcased my character's best attributes, both his struggle with his reasons for fighting and his calculating nature.

Also....I will destroy anyone who gets in my way...so yeah, I'd very much like to be either the blue or green ranger.

All jokes aside, I think I've done a pretty good job on my CS so I'm just crossing my fingers here.

@TorikRedguardWelcome to the game, friend! ProPro tells us that you like to think things through a lot. I can't wait to see how that transfers into the RP....also, I will destroy you...

*backs into the shadows*
Nothing I've done looks good. I'm better at people (points to his avatar) than miscellaneous items. I think you should rely on @Wade Wilson for this one.
They melt. Like, they turn into protein goo and wash away.


......So, let me get this right...

These minions are stronger than average, beat us up in normal mode, are still tough in ranger mode and turn to ooz when destroyed....

I think some one might like the Power Rangers movie more than I do.

@alexfangtalon

Did they actually suspect him to be one of the rangers.
This should end in a question mark, not a period.

*Oh crap. What happened*.
Again, question mark, not period.

"Hey, are you alright."
Once more, the ole question mark should go here....because it's a question..

How can humanity live like this."
That question mark still not makin an appearance...

They didn't hurt you did they."

AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!!!
*flips table*

Ya know what, go through your story and please check your punctuation.....just...check your punctuation..

Other than that, you have-

"Crap," Ollie knelled down beside the man while making sure no Githkin were watching,
“knelt” not “knelled “

And there are a few others, maybe you wanna skim over it yourself. It's small things but it's enough small things that they add up.
@ProProDone




So yeah, they're the exact same just with different powers.
I like how we think similarly but don't copy each other.

“Four targets left, their intelligence is low but I knew that already, Remember, even in my ranger suit, I'm not a tank, I'll need to make use of their weak mindedness and avoid a head on confrontation.”

They closed in quickly.

“Dodge, don't block!” He dashed backwards to avoid an incoming punch from the next Githkin to close the distance, firing twice into its chest before splitting into two.


*Remember what mentor said. I'm faster than they are and should dodge not block.* With that advice in mind Ollie bob and weaved around the Githkin working like a boxer against a tougher opponent.


We both use the holographic projection for the same base purpose but we go about it differently in our execution. I can clearly see the talent of a boxer in your writing. I enjoyed seeing your character's fighting style and comparing our different executions of the same ability.


He dashed backwards to avoid an incoming punch from the next Githkin to close the distance, firing twice into its chest before splitting into two.

“Now, misdirection!”


Both greens dashed forward to strike, one going airborne to come down on the alien soldier with a superman punch. The soldier held up its hands to block but felt nothing when the airborne ranger dispersed into light and it was instead faced with a round of laser fire-


*Crap. There are too many of them. Gotta distract 'em.* Suddenly four other green rangers appeared to distract the Githkin. The Githkin didn't know which one to attack so they swung wildly at all of them making it even easier for Ollie to avoid the hits.


Very good, there were one or two grammatical errors but this is the casual section so I don't think it'll be a huge problem down the line.

I can't wait to see who gets the projector and who gets the shield!
@ProProMe next!

Putting these in one place for the sake of convinience




Sorry for any grammatical errors!
PS: If ya notice, my fight scene's location is in homage to a certain movie I recently stated still enjoying...
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