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Sounds good to me then. What do you want the setting of our encounter to be?
I sincerely doubt that any of us are going to die this early on. First of all we are the main characters of the story and no good writer would kill off his main cast without the reader being heavily invested in the character emotionally. Secondly, this RP is called "The New Breed" not "The sad apprentices who died" 
Also, the warriors are all non-Benders and anyone who moved outside the dining hall would be faced with more to fight.
Also, the warriors are all non-Benders and anyone who moved outside the dining hall would be faced with more to fight.
Just killing vamps for money? That seems a bit mundane. From what I got from the synopsis I assumed you had at least a general plot in mind that had more mystery to it. I'm fine with meeting each other along the way but if we're just bounty hunting that's not much of a story. The synopsis also says people have only been disappearing which suggests that no one knows what's really going on.
Our main bad guys are vampires in this one so why are they kidnapping people instead of just feeding from them like usual? I think that should be an important plot element. Morthal is also a fairly small town so people would notice if others started disappearing but Falion the court wizard would be the prime suspect since he's generally under suspicion by the townsfolk. It seems like a waste of a good title for us to just start beating up vampires with no real substance to the story.
Our main bad guys are vampires in this one so why are they kidnapping people instead of just feeding from them like usual? I think that should be an important plot element. Morthal is also a fairly small town so people would notice if others started disappearing but Falion the court wizard would be the prime suspect since he's generally under suspicion by the townsfolk. It seems like a waste of a good title for us to just start beating up vampires with no real substance to the story.
Let me know what you guys think of my writing so far.
PLOT POST ON BEHALF OF iSUSPECT
The still morning was turning out to be relatively nice as our apprentices each enjoyed their meals. The masters of The Order of the White Lotus enjoyed their own feast on the opposite side of the dining hall. Unbeknownst to them all, an evil force was about to come crashing down on them, literally.
So Hai: You know Bison I just don't get it.
Bison: Don't get what?
So Hai: You let that girl run around and do as she pleases without so much as a slap on the wrist. You're much too soft on her.
Bison: Well, Master So Hai, if you're- wait.
So Hai: Hm?
Just as So Hai spoke an enormous pillar came crashing down through the roof of the dining hall effectively splitting the room in two! Luckily no one was crushed by the pillar itself but before anyone could react a flood of warriors stormed into the room on both sides. The warriors rushed the apprentices with their various weapons swinging to make a kill. The apprentices would barely have time to react before the hoard was upon them. Each of them would have their hands full simply staying alive with such a force.
Meanwhile, on the other side of the enormous metallic pillar. Each of the Masters readied themselves for a fight as more warriors piled in. Coming in right behind them was a mountain of a man clad in metal armor, only his eyes were visible through his helmet.
Armor-Clad Mountain-Man: I am the Juggernaut and you are all my prisoners!
The resulting fight was a sight to behold, yet for all their skill they were fighting a losing battle. There was simply too many men for them to deal with. Their battle led them away from the dining hall and into other parts of the compound as the Juggernaut rampaged in his pursuit. The apprentices would have to fend for themselves as the Masters fought with every fiber of their being to fell the Juggernaut. Despite their struggle the Masters would eventually be subdued by the man who called himself Juggernaut.
The still morning was turning out to be relatively nice as our apprentices each enjoyed their meals. The masters of The Order of the White Lotus enjoyed their own feast on the opposite side of the dining hall. Unbeknownst to them all, an evil force was about to come crashing down on them, literally.
So Hai: You know Bison I just don't get it.
Bison: Don't get what?
So Hai: You let that girl run around and do as she pleases without so much as a slap on the wrist. You're much too soft on her.
Bison: Well, Master So Hai, if you're- wait.
So Hai: Hm?
Just as So Hai spoke an enormous pillar came crashing down through the roof of the dining hall effectively splitting the room in two! Luckily no one was crushed by the pillar itself but before anyone could react a flood of warriors stormed into the room on both sides. The warriors rushed the apprentices with their various weapons swinging to make a kill. The apprentices would barely have time to react before the hoard was upon them. Each of them would have their hands full simply staying alive with such a force.
Meanwhile, on the other side of the enormous metallic pillar. Each of the Masters readied themselves for a fight as more warriors piled in. Coming in right behind them was a mountain of a man clad in metal armor, only his eyes were visible through his helmet.
Armor-Clad Mountain-Man: I am the Juggernaut and you are all my prisoners!
The resulting fight was a sight to behold, yet for all their skill they were fighting a losing battle. There was simply too many men for them to deal with. Their battle led them away from the dining hall and into other parts of the compound as the Juggernaut rampaged in his pursuit. The apprentices would have to fend for themselves as the Masters fought with every fiber of their being to fell the Juggernaut. Despite their struggle the Masters would eventually be subdued by the man who called himself Juggernaut.
No worries friends! I shall be posting on behalf of iSuspect tonight.
No need to apologize. Anyway there are some basic things that we should cover before we start. Like the relationship between our two characters. Are they strangers or have they met before? How are we going to start out the story? How are our characters going to meet or are they travelling together? Are we just going to stumble on to an evil vampire plot to do evil stuff or are we going to be given a mission by a Jarl to investigate some disappearances that later lead us to vampires? I think these are just a few basic things we should work out before we really get into it. Otherwise, I won't really know where you're trying to go with the story.
Uh.... okay. What am I supposed to do with your IC post? I'm truly lost. I get that you're on the road outside of Morthal but where am I supposed to come in to it? You just started a fight with a vampire after getting bounced from the Inn. Am I supposed to jump in? I would have liked to discuss how we were going to play this out before you jumped right in.
Name: Rina Greenfield
Age: 21
Race: Breton
Appearance:
Hair Color: Red
Eyes: Green
Height: 5'2''
Personality: Optimistic and inquisitive. The kind of person who always has to know everything.
Spells:
-Restoration: Healing, Lesser Ward, Fast Healing, Healing Hands, Steadfast Ward, Close Wounds, Greater Ward, Heal Other
-Destruction: Sparks, Lightning Bolt, Lightning Rune
-Alteration: Candlelight, Magelight
Robes: Adept Robes of Restoration, Adept Boots of Restoration (shown in image)
Backstory: Formerly a student at the College of Winterhold. Born to a middle class Breton family as an only child. Currently venturing out to see the world.
Finally got my screen capture to work lol. This is Rina at a glance. Let me know what you think.
Age: 21
Race: Breton
Appearance:
Hair Color: Red
Eyes: Green
Height: 5'2''
Personality: Optimistic and inquisitive. The kind of person who always has to know everything.
Spells:
-Restoration: Healing, Lesser Ward, Fast Healing, Healing Hands, Steadfast Ward, Close Wounds, Greater Ward, Heal Other
-Destruction: Sparks, Lightning Bolt, Lightning Rune
-Alteration: Candlelight, Magelight
Robes: Adept Robes of Restoration, Adept Boots of Restoration (shown in image)
Backstory: Formerly a student at the College of Winterhold. Born to a middle class Breton family as an only child. Currently venturing out to see the world.
Finally got my screen capture to work lol. This is Rina at a glance. Let me know what you think.
Synopsis Since the Dragonborn defeated Alduin, things have been quiet. However, now there is talk of disappearances, strange shadows and sounds at night. Dozens of people have disappeared after only a few short months. Some whisper that the threat of the dragons has simply been replaced by that of a more nightmarish creature. They aren't wrong. Two intrepid souls will embark on a journey across Skyrim to uncover the mystery and discover the true face of the beast that haunts the night.
Mage20GG as Dantus Ovell
&
Latino as Rina Greenfield
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