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Gorbo Grandman said
I'm a little confused now. I didn't know Tavon had spoken to anyone since your introduction post. I might've misread something, but I simply assumed the other characters you were controlling weren't Tavon himself. If I must I'll edit it for continuity's sake.This was the post I assumed to be your most recent centered around your god.


I understand, this is the other post: Tavon talking to Lyah. You don't have to edit, the talking would just be at a time before this happened.
Wodgev said
So the crop god was born because crops were being planted, and the god of war was born because people started fighting.


It was Tavon who taught the man how to plant crops, since he was one of the two gods of nature at the creation of earth (with Era being the other one).
Gorbo Grandman said
Alright, I was bored, so I made this monstrosity of a post. I hope I didn't make it too big, but I really enjoyed writing it, and I hope you'll enjoy reading it.


I did enjoy reading that. The only problem is that now I have to split up my god. Or say that this talk with Tavon and your god happened before Tavon met Lyah. I will write an answer tomorrow, I'm going to sleep right now.
It's better than it was before, but let me give you some criticism.

Every God was there at the creation, only some not in the form they are now. So there is really no meaning in calling yourself an older god.

What has the animal Dragon to do with your god? Something like a mountain ram would fit more.

No one has yet done anything with dwarves, this is a great opportunity for your god. Maybe focus more on that and less on the earth shaper thing. It's great to sound all powerful, but that puts a barrier between you and the common folk. Don't get me wrong, you could still be the creator of mountains. Allow your god to have mistakes and a need to rely on other gods. That makes interaction a whole lot easier and creates a way more interesting story.

Also I don't get the torch as symbol, why not just a diamond in a stone/rock. Seems more symbolic for the feeling you want to give to your god.
akje said
"Hah, we'll see about that." Misha grinned. Lyah had accepted the letter with grace and silence. She walked off with the paper close to her chest. “I have something special planned for the gods tonight. How about you?"Lyah sat down in the grass and looked up at the fireworks in the sky. She wondered how they got the sparks to take such complex shapes in the air.Magic perhaps? It was nice to take her mind of her mother for a second. She hesitated as she held the sealed letter in her hands. Her fingers trembled.She was curious, yet, afraid. Afraid she was getting worked up over nothing.Carefully she released the seal from the paper.


"And he was the only one who immediately understood that I had stolen from him, but his guards were too far away. You should have seen him run on his short legs, his big fat belly bouncing from left to right.” Tarvin demonstrated the movement with his hands. Misha’s and Tarvin’s discussion started with what they were going to offer to the gods, but now Tarvin was telling Misha about his life as a thief. Misha seemed to have accepted it, since he only stole from those who could afford it and gave money to the poor. “And what did you do in the three years I was gone?”

"Dear Lyah, Since you are reading this, I guess I am no longer in the land of the living. First I want you to know that I love you with my whole heart my little flower. Second I want to tell you why I never spoke much about your father. You see it’s kinda hard to tell this without people laughing at you, but I fell in love with a god. Not the praying to the sky kind of love, but the sweaty sort. I met him at a festival like this, one honored to the summer. We talked the whole evening and later he took me to his beautiful garden. I saw him a few times after that, but at one time he stopped coming. Please don't be mad at him, this is just the way he is. He probably doesn’t even know you exist, but when he does I’m sure he will look for you" She could literally hear the words she realized. And with that realization she immediately turned her head to the left. There a farmer sat right next to her side. A golden rose in his hair reflected the light of the fireworks. He looked at her while speaking the last words of the letter. His eyes seemed wet. “Please come with me, I have much to explain to you. The other two won’t notice and you won’t be away for long if you wish,” he spoke while standing up, reaching out his hand to her.
akje said
The two accepted the gifts and looked at them shimmer in the sunlight with marvel. "Thank you so much, they're beautiful. But we don't have anything to give you in return."When Tarvin mentioned her mother Lyah suddenly looked down at the ground. "She passed away last year."Memories of the fire where still fresh in her mind.Misha looked worried. Hoping to change the topic he spoke up. "Hey what about you? Where have you been these years?"


Tarvin looked at the two with wide open eyes. The news shocked him. "Death... how?.. no never mind, this must be though for you." He blinked a few times to regain his posture. "I.. uhm.. traveled the world. I went to other villages and worked there. It was though at first, but I learned how to survive on my own in this world. The toughest thing was missing my friends. I really missed you guys, but I had to get out... because... you know...." Tarvin looked away. His eyes got a little wet. He brushed it away with the back of his hand. "Here Lyah, this is for you," and he handed over the letter of her mother. "I was instructed to give it to you. Please open it when you're alone tonight. First we have a party to enjoy, don't we? you two coming? I heard they serve the best roasted meat over there."
akje said
say it IC. it'll be fun.


SO MUCH TEMPTATION
Wodgev said
Slight change to Vryad's domains and history. Hope you like it.

Wodgev said
Secret Lore
Vryad also wears the mantle of Death and Repose. By utilizing a complex "system" of servitars (impossible to comprehend by the mortal mind, and sometimes even an immortal mind), Vryad makes sure that the dead stay dead, and are brought to whichever deity they worshipped in life (contracted souls are, naturally, a different story entirely). However, when an atheist (or someone who doesn't worship just one God) dies, their soul is "judged" by Vryad, and their soul can end up anywhere Vryad's "system" deems "logical".


I don't mind you taking an extra domain, but I can't think of any logical explanation why your god would do that. He is the cheater/chance god and he is chaotic evil. The distributer of souls should be a judger god and neutral.
Berdagon said
AND AS ALWAYS KIDS, REMEBER:

"THE SECRET IS IN THE SIGN!"


It's a boob O,o

EDIT: Sorry, but had to post it ;)
Just a face in the crowd. Nothing more, nothing less. Dressed like a famer he walked among the people, enjoying the festival. If someone followed him with his eyes, he sometimes would be able to see a glimmer of gold in the man’s hair. Next to a market stall filled with sweets, he saw a man hugging a girl and a boy. The girl was wearing a golden ring and the boy was holding a goat. A man walking with the step of a hunter passed him. Someone stormed through the people next to him. A little girl accompanied by a little boy ran through an alley. For a moment the voice of a rather pompous man sounded above the music, shouting at some villagers. The old priest was still sitting high above the rest of the people. A man was drinking next to the largest pyre. This were just a few of the images of the evening. He enjoyed this festival, watching the people of this town from a distance. Walking among them, smiling with them. He wished the other ones would keep it this peaceful.
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