Bluetommy
Danyel
Ookawa
Musoka
Simple Unicycle
Plank Sinatra@Crimmy Story's good. Its focus on an academy outside of Beacon already makes it something worthwhile reading because there's not much development going on there, and the characters got endearing rather quickly. Made me start rooting for Aeronwy without knowing it. Favorite scene was the phone call with her rather excited family. It's a simple story with a surprisingly adequate amount of details that makes me want to know more.
@HereComesTheSnow I honestly didn't know what to expect but I'm overall satisfied with the long read. Luke's always been a likable character for me, but it's interesting how the change in his perspective on Hunters in the end overall contributed to both him and the others that appeared in the story. Opal struck out to me as an interesting character and her mixed (both neutral and negative) interactions with Luke did make help me experience his own frustration. There were several typos but they quite literally did not hurt any of my immersion with the story.
@Plank Sinatra I felt like in some ways, this story had a potential to be disappointing. It wasn't, though. I don't know much about Nicole, but I did learn that she's a rather interesting contrast to Jericho in some ways, while also being similar to him. And said mix of differences and similarities made both of them not expect some of the things brought up by them, like the topic of a certain Fiordilatte. Luke's side in this case was more on the lighter side (aside from the rather mysterious ending), and while it could have detracted from the depth Nicole's perspective had, I personally think it showed your writing's flexibility.
@FlitterFaux A lot of stories tend to focus on the strength of certain Grimm, and in this case, you showed the terror they can propose through their sheer quantity. It's a short story, and while it didn't have the luxury of having enough time to flesh out the characters in the story, their rather composed reaction to what should be a tense situation made an interesting contrast.
@Onarax A racing story. It's different from the other submissions in that it pretty much had no focus in the Grimm at all, and rather, more on a side without them. It's quick to the point and gets to the race rather quickly- and I seriously like this, because for stories like this, a lot of writers often attempt to establish everything before the big event rather than during the event, and when it fails, it ends up being cumbersome to learn about the backstory of the characters in the competition instead of being fun. I think you did the right thing.
@Krayzikk I like Benjamin. And from what I learned from Snow's story, his dad miiiiight be an asshole, but I like Benjamin. The story actually covered something I was curious about a bit, which was how Benjamin took in his initial failure in admission. It certainly portrayed Hunters in a pretty cool light- something that reasonably reignited Ben's confidence. He felt human with both his worries of failure and his ability in bringing himself back together for another chance at succeeding something, and as such, I think this submission was a very relatable one.
3 Credits: HereComesTheSnow, Crimmy, Krayzikk, Plank Sinatra
2 Credits: Onarax, FlitterFaux
Thank you for participating!
@HereComesTheSnow I honestly didn't know what to expect but I'm overall satisfied with the long read. Luke's always been a likable character for me, but it's interesting how the change in his perspective on Hunters in the end overall contributed to both him and the others that appeared in the story. Opal struck out to me as an interesting character and her mixed (both neutral and negative) interactions with Luke did make help me experience his own frustration. There were several typos but they quite literally did not hurt any of my immersion with the story.
@Plank Sinatra I felt like in some ways, this story had a potential to be disappointing. It wasn't, though. I don't know much about Nicole, but I did learn that she's a rather interesting contrast to Jericho in some ways, while also being similar to him. And said mix of differences and similarities made both of them not expect some of the things brought up by them, like the topic of a certain Fiordilatte. Luke's side in this case was more on the lighter side (aside from the rather mysterious ending), and while it could have detracted from the depth Nicole's perspective had, I personally think it showed your writing's flexibility.
@FlitterFaux A lot of stories tend to focus on the strength of certain Grimm, and in this case, you showed the terror they can propose through their sheer quantity. It's a short story, and while it didn't have the luxury of having enough time to flesh out the characters in the story, their rather composed reaction to what should be a tense situation made an interesting contrast.
@Onarax A racing story. It's different from the other submissions in that it pretty much had no focus in the Grimm at all, and rather, more on a side without them. It's quick to the point and gets to the race rather quickly- and I seriously like this, because for stories like this, a lot of writers often attempt to establish everything before the big event rather than during the event, and when it fails, it ends up being cumbersome to learn about the backstory of the characters in the competition instead of being fun. I think you did the right thing.
@Krayzikk I like Benjamin. And from what I learned from Snow's story, his dad miiiiight be an asshole, but I like Benjamin. The story actually covered something I was curious about a bit, which was how Benjamin took in his initial failure in admission. It certainly portrayed Hunters in a pretty cool light- something that reasonably reignited Ben's confidence. He felt human with both his worries of failure and his ability in bringing himself back together for another chance at succeeding something, and as such, I think this submission was a very relatable one.
FINAL CREDITS GIVEN
3 Credits: HereComesTheSnow, Crimmy, Krayzikk, Plank Sinatra
2 Credits: Onarax, FlitterFaux
Thank you for participating!
