Alright, :D I'll work on it. May not be good as some of you pros though <3
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I don't know. But I'm going to make my posts really avoid my characters actual thoughts, and more based on his actions and expressions. Not to mention you can always leave details out of your answers or your reasons on why you might have a certain opinion about a scenario. It's how you can seem like a potential candidate for the actual player and not just know that this character is definitely not the murderer. For instance, if a character thought in his head "Who would do something like this?"no one lies in their head about such a thought. So you OOCly know that so and so isn't the murderer, but your character doesn't know that information so you have to pretend your suspicious of them, and that wouldn't make it fun. :P I've never done this style of rp, I don't think anyone has, since the murderer hasn't even been determined by anyone. It's how the ball roles and where and how hard you roll it.
Ebil, if you re-read my post it sorta signals the end of his performance. One example being on the first paragraph,
and at the beginning of the second paragraph
Also, I feel like you're not exploiting the potential of your posts. :P For instance, when you said you were performing. What was your performance? You also simply stated your character had chosen a spot. You could've been more descriptive on where that chosen spot was, or what it was near. Sort've like Pyotr and the bridge. Another thing is what your characters thought process is when he's performing. Does he enjoy doing what he does? Does his thoughts go back on the past while he does his performance? Maybe relating to a memory in real life or such?
Also, just one more thing. I really don't want to come off as rude, or arrogant like I probably have above. But there shouldn't have been a large crowd for Xris to notice. Pytor had thanked the crowd and sent them away before Isaac began to speak to him. You could say maybe Xris noticed Pytor's crowd as Xris performed, and waited for his performance to end by Xris performing himself before confronting Pyotr. Or something of that sort,
I just don't think your post really connects or fits with the collaboration post. When did Xris decide to come into the conversation? Was this after Isaac and pyotr talked and began to go on their lil' quest to find people? :3 Cause when I read your post it makes me think you thought his performance was still going on, and you decided to interfere with it.
I don't know. I just want to clear some stuff up I might just be seeing things wrong here. :L Apologies
PureThoughts said
Isaac continued to watch the Harlequin's performance with interest, his smile gradually growing as he began to forget the scenario he was in. It went on for a blissful 5 minutes, as laughter, cheering, and good moments were created. It was going great until he wondered if the Harlequin used to be a performer in real life...Isaac's smile faded. Yet he continued to watch, and when the Harlequin had finished, Isaac was the first to clap, and it was followed by cheers and other chatter from the crowd as they made comments about his performance. Isaac sighed, his gaze still on the Harlequin.
and at the beginning of the second paragraph
PureThoughts said
Pyotr went on and on in his performance, going from an over the top heartbreaking monologue, trying his earnest to draw sympathy from the crowd, to a rousing speech and finally ending his encore performance with a few light-hearted jokes, trying to break up the dire situation some might find themselves in, and make them forget about their worries if just for a few minutes. He flounced and waved his hands, the smiles and cheers driving him on, till he finally called an end to it with a last joke to send the crowd on their way happy, thanking them profusely all the way
Also, I feel like you're not exploiting the potential of your posts. :P For instance, when you said you were performing. What was your performance? You also simply stated your character had chosen a spot. You could've been more descriptive on where that chosen spot was, or what it was near. Sort've like Pyotr and the bridge. Another thing is what your characters thought process is when he's performing. Does he enjoy doing what he does? Does his thoughts go back on the past while he does his performance? Maybe relating to a memory in real life or such?
Also, just one more thing. I really don't want to come off as rude, or arrogant like I probably have above. But there shouldn't have been a large crowd for Xris to notice. Pytor had thanked the crowd and sent them away before Isaac began to speak to him. You could say maybe Xris noticed Pytor's crowd as Xris performed, and waited for his performance to end by Xris performing himself before confronting Pyotr. Or something of that sort,
PureThoughts said
He flounced and waved his hands, the smiles and cheers driving him on, till he finally called an end to it with a last joke to send the crowd on their way happy, thanking them profusely all the way. (then talking stuff with happens with Isaac yada yada)
I just don't think your post really connects or fits with the collaboration post. When did Xris decide to come into the conversation? Was this after Isaac and pyotr talked and began to go on their lil' quest to find people? :3 Cause when I read your post it makes me think you thought his performance was still going on, and you decided to interfere with it.
I don't know. I just want to clear some stuff up I might just be seeing things wrong here. :L Apologies
I know the answer to this but my explanations are horrible T_T
Silent Observer said
With this many people I would be surprised if we even get to post once a day, that is if posting order rules and such are followed. Also, to comment on there being too many people, I don't think that is the case. A lot of roleplays fail due to lack of consistent participation, and a few people will naturally not post much with their characters. The GM mentioned wanting at least 9 characters, so I don't think 11 is that bad.
Absolutely agree with you on the amount of people. It'll be nice :D
Only thing I hope is that posting doesn't get ridiculous. A post or two a day is how I go for an rp is good for me:P If it gets a bit absurd it might be hard for me to keep up.
I hope the collabs are coming soon. I'm excited :3
I'm liking the variety of characters I'm seeing :D
Ooooo :D Can't wait to see~
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