Thecrash20

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*Retracted*

𝕋ℍ𝔼 𝕊𝔸𝔾𝔸 𝕆𝔽 𝕍𝕀ℕ𝔻𝔼ℝ𝕍𝔸𝕃𝕃

Actually guys Im swamped, I really dont have time to put out in this level of RP and have really lost inspiration on this one. SO count me out. Sorry, but hope you guys have fun and this rp continues.

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Hitori Mitarashi

That's sounds like...fun

Basic Information

Name: Hitori Hatake
Nickname: Hit
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth:13 03/14/463
Age Appearance: 16
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents:
Hunto Hatake(Father of Shi)
Nawo Hatake(Mother Of Shi)
(Habi being born an orphan)
Parents:
Hebi Mitarashi
Shi Hatake
Siblings:
None


Length and build: 5' 10" athletic
Weight: 170lbs
Favorite weather and season: Rainy days are considered the most beautiful to him esepecially after it has ended. Spring is his favorite season due to the drastic changes of death and darkness that Winter brings.




Village/Nation:Konohagakure
Birthplace: Konohagakure
Organization:Shinobi Forces

Clan/Bloodline:
Hatake

Rank:
Genin
Chakra Nature:
Lightning


Appearance:
Hit is a fair skin man that appears older then his is. With blue eyes and long hair down to his neck, he seems quite approachable, especially when he always sporting his goofy smile. Although to some that don't know him, his deep scar crossing his right eye might make his seem scary, even though that's the furthest from the truth.

Detailed Information

Personality:
Hit is a very laid back, borderline lazy individual. He has a great sense of humor, finding dark or ironic humor the funniest. While he can get serious or mad, it's usually nothing that last more than a few hours, but this could be just a trait shared with all newer ninjas due to the ignorance of the dangers that come with missions.

Playing pranks and getting in trouble is usually his forte. If he is kept bored for any period of time and missing, he is probably up to trouble or out in the wild enjoying nature. The former being the usual.



History:
Ever since a child Hit would cause problems to his parents or anyone in his general vicinity. Usually they were harmless pranks, but the frequency and the lack of discipline forced his parents to send him out to be a ninja. A defender of the village just like his father used to be. While his Mother had lost hope for the child, his father saw great potential in his son. At first, he trained his son to build discipline and to give him something other than to cause trouble when he was bored.

As a Genin he began to train with his father more and more. Teaching him the Clan's own technique and He had actually taking a liking to it, especially when him and his Father practice sword play. By the end, he was asking his father to take the Chonin exam and see if he could possibly be a true ninga and follow in his footsteps.

Combat Information

Weapons/Items

Weapons/items

Name of Weapon or Item:
Star Light Shine
Description:
A Short straight sword colored in hue's and purple. A heirloom of the Hatake Clan that was passed down to Shi and then to Hit. It produces a purple chakra streak when swung.

Appearance

-Small field Medical Kit
-Fūma Shuriken


Skills/Abilities
-Good Kenjutsu
-Good Ninjutsu
-Good stamina
-Average Strength
-Average reaction
-Average Sword Play
-Poor Medical Jutsu
-Poor Genjutsu


Special Traits

Swordsman: A trait passed on to those of the Hatake clan. The clan members are training in all kinds of Sword strikes and parries.
Kekkei Genkai
Name of Kekkei Genkai:
Lighting Infusion
Clan: Hatake
Description:
The Shinobi of the Hatake Clan can let their Lightning Element Chakra flow through the weapons they reveal, making them extremely hard to break and give them a power boost.

Jutsu

Cannon Jutsu

Chakra Enhanced Strength
Lightning Beast Tracking
Shadow Shuriken Technique

@Jasonhero A newer one. The Hatake Clan has no real KG, So I just made one that makes sense due to their lightning affinity.

"Plug up his damn air holes with your bodies".

@Halvtand

Oh my...

The Gregorian - Imperium (Warhammer 50K RP, The Shape of the Nightmare to Come)

Sorry was really busy this week. Ill give you the cs in a few.

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@Thecrash20 You do you. You're allowed to have a creative an interesting character, but its got to make sense.

On that note, do look forward to seeing what you come up with next. Let me know when you're finished, or PM me if you got questions.

@Jasonhero

Oh dont take that the wrong way. It's just a lot easier to be less creative and just jack things from the og show. Which ill probably be doing now. The char sheet took like 2 hours to make, so I'll try in under an hour this time.

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@Thecrash20 I am going to point out a few things here.

1. Mitarashi clan doesn't actually have a Kekkei Genkai. The snake summonings are related to Oorchimaru, who doesn't even exist in this universe. So I'd need a good reason how your character learns it. Not to mention, the clan which you are using is associated with the Fire Release, so why would their KG rely on the Lightning release? Furthermore, the Thunder part of it isn't anywhere in the canon, meaning you created this custom KG. Which as I have stated in the Interest Check, which you were apart of, must be pm'd to me beforehand and approved. However; I do not approve this KG. Considering that you state it gives the ability to use the Space-Time Jutsu of summoning snakes. Space-Time Jutsu is; 1. Extremely high-level, most techniques are around 'A' ranked for Space-time. 2. Is not a Kekkei Genkai trait, and has nothing to do with the summoning jutsu. Furthermore, snakes cannot conduct electricty terribly well, so it just makes no sense to even exist.

Therefore, I will not be accepting this Kekkei Genkai.

2. Read my rules. You have it listed that he is a Genin, which is what the rules say, then in your background turn around and say he already took the Chuunin exams and graduated to Chuunin? Thats against the rules. You all start as Genin. The Chuunin exams come later in the rp, and there is still no guarantee that you would even pass. Fix that, and read the rules.

3. Your lightning limbs technique is basically a more advanced version of Chidori, which is an A ranked technique as is. You're a Genin, you can have C rank as your highest technique. Your lightning limbs is an A ranked, minimum.

4. Lightning Serpent Strike, to be the level you stated, would have to be about the same power as the Lightning Beast Tracking Fang, which means it can't kill on its own. But stuns rather effectively.

5. Running lightning along the snakes to make a ranged attack is pretty complex, making that technique B ranked. So you can do it once you reach the rank of Chuunin.

6. Why did your character and his mother leave their clan? Literally abandoning their family because their father died in an unrelated incident? That... doesn't make sense.

Overall: Your character is not accepted at the moment. I will need you to correct what has been stated. Meaning;

* Remove the KG outright.
* Fix the rank issue and backstory so they both make sense.
* Fix and adjust your custom techniques.
* Give me a good reason in the backstory why you know the summoning snakes technique.

@Jasonhero

You got me on 2nd point(Funny enough I just read it and was coming to edit it). But the rest you basically told me to make a whole new character. So ill try again, I'll be a little more bland this time. Not to confuse anyone with anything.

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Hitori Mitarashi

That's sounds like...fun

Basic Information

Name: Hitori Mitarashi
Nickname: Hit
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth:16 03/14/460
Age Appearance: 16-18
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents:
Hunto Mitarashi (Father of Shi)
Sakura Mitarashi (Mother Of Shi)
Parents:
Hebi Mitarashi
Shi Mitarashi (Deceased)
Siblings:
None


Length and build: 5' 10" athletic
Weight: 170lbs
Favorite weather and season: Rainy days are considered the most beautiful to him esepecially after it has ended. Spring is his favorite season due to the drastic changes of death and darkness that Winter brings.




Village/Nation:Konohagakure
Birthplace: Konohagakure
Organization:Shinobi Forces

Clan/Bloodline:
Mitarashi

Rank:
Genin
Chakra Nature:
Lightning


Appearance:
Hit is a fair skin man that appears older then his is. With blue eyes and long hair down to his neck, he seems quite approachable, especially when he always sporting his goofy smile. Although to some that don't know him, his deep scar crossing his right eye might make his seem scary, even that is the furthest from the truth.

Detailed Information

Personality:
Hit is a very laid back, borderline lazy individual. He has a great sense of humor, finding dark or ironic humor the funniest. While he can get serious or mad, it's usually nothing that last more than a few hours, but this could be just a trait shared with all newer ninjas due to the ignorance of the dangers that come with missions. He has tried to be more serious after the chunin exam, but in his own words. "What would be the fun of that!"

Playing pranks and getting in trouble is usually his forte. If he is kept bored for any period of time and missing, he is probably up to trouble or out in the wild enjoying nature. The former being the usual.



History:
Ever since a child Hit would cause problems to his parents or anyone in his general vicinity. Usually they were harmless pranks, but the frequency and the lack of discipline forced his parents to send him out to be a ninja. A defender of the village just like his father used to be. While his Mother had lost hope for the child, his father saw great potential in his son. At first, he trained his son in his clan's ancient art of the Thunder Serpent.

As a Genin, Hit's father left his son to train with his team and his assigned Junin. The chunin exam was quite rough for Hitori, during and after. Almost meeting death twice and being extremely fatigued the whole time, his motivation quickly ending just during the extremely hard test of the First stage. While making it to the second stage, he failed in a match, but was still passed into being a Chunin.

As he got the news of his ranking up, he also received that his father had died. The doctors deemed it due to natural cause as he was an older man. While this would crush some most, it inspired Hitori to carry on with being a Ninja for his father, a choice he once regretted every day. Although the news was not well received by him or his mother. Only Hitori and his mother are the two left of the Mitarashi clan.

Combat Information

Weapons/Items

Weapons/items

Name of Weapon or Item:
Buster Breakers
Description:
A pair of sliver bronze knuckles with round copper pieces at each knuckle. The copper parts help conduct electricity to the weapon.

-Small field Medical Kit
-Flak jacket
-Fūma Shuriken


Skills/Abilities
-Good Taijutsu
-Good Ninjutsu
-Good Speed
-Average Strength
-Average reaction
-Average Endrance
-Poor Medical Jutsu
-Poor Genjutsu


Special Traits

Eternal Rest: Hitori can sleep anywhere at almost any time. He could also control the time he wakes up by the minute.
Kekkei Genkai
Name of Kekkei Genkai:
Thunder Serpent Teaching:
Clan : Mitarashi
Description:
An ancient art that takes years to prefect, but is easy taught by those who already possess the skill. It provides the user the ability to use the secret Space-Time Jutsu of summoning snakes and the ability to combine them with Lightning Chakra.

Jutsu

Cannon Jutsu

Hidden Shadow Snake Hands]Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Body Flicker Technique
Shadow Shuriken Technique

Custom Jutsu

Custom Jutsu

Name of Technique:Thunder Serpent Binding
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Range: Medium-range
Nature Type: Lightning
Handseals: Snake→ Tiger→ Monkey
Description: This Technique can only be used when Hidden Shadow Snake Hands is used before. The summoned snakes are coated with Electricity and gives the ability to make ranged lighting strikes.
Weakness: As each snake makes a lightning strike it is killed. Also if any Wind element technique makes contact with the snakes they are instantly killed off. The technique is supposed to be used as a spread "shotgun" attack as each individual strike is horribly inaccurate.

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Name of Technique:Lightning Release: Lightning Serpent Strike.
Type of Jutsu:Ninjutsu
Rank:C
Range:Short to Mid range
Nature Type: Lightning
Handseals:Ox→ Snake→ Tiger
Description: By manipulating lightning chakra into their hand, the user can make the lightning expand to create the form of a snake.
Weakness:The Snake summoned is not controllable, the only control the user has is the target(s) that are presented. This could mean that the intended target is not the one chosen out of a group of enemies. The path it takes could also lead to its death as any Wind Element technique will destroy the serpent.


Name of Technique:Lightning Release: Lightning limbs
Type of Jutsu:Ninjutsu
Rank:D
Range:Short
Nature Type: Lightning
Handseals:Ox→ Tiger→ Monkey
Description: The legs and arms of the user is wrapped in Electricity. Each strike causing Lightning damage.
Weakness: The user can no long stick to surfaces or walk on water. The longer this technique is used, the user suffers burns and their limbs begin to sear under the Electricity. No other techniques can be used when it's currently used.

Summons

Summonings

Name: Shadow Snakes- Gurīnsurēbu
Species: Snake
Size: Five medium Snakes
Unique Traits: Poisoning
Jutsu:Summoning
History:
The origins of the contract are unknown, but a deal was made where every Member of the Mitarashi clan wold be granted several scrolls. Each member controlled its own group of these serpents, the contract owned by Hitori was once his Great Granfather's.

These snakes have a bit of a protective personality, occasionally moving against or without order to protect the contract holder. They do not talk often but when they do, they speak in unison in one voice, yet can move individually when controlled by Hitori. Five Red and White snakes appear from the arm of Hitori completely covering the limb. These snakes are quite large compared to natural size and can be individually controlled as if the fingers of Hitori. These snakes are only summoned when using the Hidden Shadow Snake Hands Technique.

@Jasonhero Edited it and "completed". Give me an hour to fix some thing further before you review pls!

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My Mata

That's sounds like...fun

Basic Information

Name: Hitori Mata
Nickname: Hitori
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth:16 03/14/460
Age Appearance: 16-18
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents:
Unknown
Parents:
Yakudachi Mata(Adopted Mother). Unknown
Siblings:
None


Length and build: 5' 10" athletic
Weight: 170lbs
Favorite weather and season: Rainy and Spring



Village/Nation:Konohagakure
Birthplace:Unknown found in Konohagakure
Organization:Shinobi Forces

Clan/Bloodline:
Unknown

Rank:
Genin
Chakra Nature:Lightning


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Detailed Information

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Theme Song:
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Combat Information

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Special Traits
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Kekkei Genkai

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Jutsu

Cannon Jutsu

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Custom Jutsu

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Summons

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Unique Traits: (Just like the one for you character. This can mean flight for birds, or swimming for fish.)
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Not even close to done but is a place holder. Will get it finished by today.

The 20th Floor ~ Sword Art Online

Enyo

Enyo chuckled to himself slightly. He thought the whole situation was pretty Ironic. Of course they would be attacked, and at least one of them might know him. A wide smile painted his face as the lieutenant spoke. It quickly changed when he was charged by the man. He saw his scar, what a edgy teenager... Egging him on, Enyo taunted his opponent. "Are you the leader here? Honestly im not sure."

He tossed of his poncho towards his enemy, with just quick swipe of his hand his avatar was surrounded by blue and green crystalline shards revealing his true form to the Pkers and the team. The Apparition had appeared.

Enyo stood his ground, letting the opponent get cocky before he was fed to his Axe. Hoping the toss would throw him off, but even then with his available hand he dropped a few picks in front of him, just as a fail safe. He was prepared to allow his opponent to get the hits he wanted, but would take a hard slow down effect for his arrogance. Holding his weapon down, preparing a Low Swoop. A single higher damage attack that would come up vertically and surprise the enemy from his feet, using the natural blind spot of every human.

He could assume the rashness of his prey probably meant he was almost completely unaware of such tactics, honestly it was the most basic of his last Guilds defense. When explained it almost seems like common sense, but in the heat of battle instincts usually take over. Plus common sense doesn't seem all that common in this world.
@Noodles

𝕋ℍ𝔼 𝕊𝔸𝔾𝔸 𝕆𝔽 𝕍𝕀ℕ𝔻𝔼ℝ𝕍𝔸𝕃𝕃

Oh my. Im embarrassed... I forgot I was in this!

Tomorrow Ill get a post out. Ill be busy all day, and I wont really have the time for a good starting post.