@ArenaSnow Very good writing. It was quite descriptive and atmospheric. In my uneducated opinion, there isn't really any grammatical errors that are very noticeable. However, maybe ease up on the Oxford commas a little? Perhaps use more sentences? I also grapple with such a prospect.
TwelveOf8
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STATUS: Now that I have given up video games I should have a lot more time to RP now. I'm sure that I'm not the first person to have declared this but hopefully I won't be the last. 7 yrs ago
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Now that I have given up video games I should have a lot more time to RP now. I'm sure that I'm not the first person to have declared this but hopefully I won't be the last.
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7 yrs ago
To all those who are awaiting a post from me I'm sorry. I have no excuses. I expect the very best from myself and frankly that kind of pressure brings about some major procrastination.
7 yrs ago
I very well may be the worst fps player the world has ever known.
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7 yrs ago
Has anyone heard of this Smitty Werbenjagermanjensen guy? They say he's number one.
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7 yrs ago
Alright, no more screwing around. I have to get started on my various projects. I can't let another week go by with nothing done. Lady France awaits and I'm not getting any younger.
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I guess this is where I explain myself.
All I can say is that my existence is an endless void occasionally interrupted by passing flashes of light.
Interlaced with a little randomness here and there to, ya know, keep things interesting.
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@pugbutter Send whatever you like. Anything is fair game.
@Rhythmloid
I don't have access to discord right now so I'm just going to announce it here. I have finished editing season 1. I am ready for season two whenever you are.
I don't have access to discord right now so I'm just going to announce it here. I have finished editing season 1. I am ready for season two whenever you are.
@Didos I would also like to throw my hat into the ring and help you construct this fever dream of yours.
@Silverink
Should my character be a bartender at your club? Just imagine, a superhero with a super villain boss. If not then that's alright.
Should my character be a bartender at your club? Just imagine, a superhero with a super villain boss. If not then that's alright.
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The title says it all. Basically, my idea is to create a thread where each user can submit a paragraph or two of text. This text may be crafted specifically for the thread, or it may be lifted from the users other written work. An example that comes to mind would be an excerpt from an RP in which the user is currently involved. Another user could then come along and critique the submitted text of the former. Give tips or even full blown explanations regarding the quality of the grammar and how to improve.
Feel free to critique anything I've written so far. After all, no matter how good we may think we are, we could all use some improvement.
Feel free to critique anything I've written so far. After all, no matter how good we may think we are, we could all use some improvement.
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