UnendingEmpire

A Great Bloody Mess

We now have legit Italian happening in this thread.
And the "let's make a scary monster that can only take orders from an 11-year-old" plan has been stealthily disposed of in the process

Looking forward to seeing how and where this RP goes with the plot getting ready to turn :)

Yu-Gi-Oh! Spirit

Vern seems to be a guy with some good motives, but...for the below-listed reasons, I'm going to have to respectfully turn him down this time around.

1) I can take a few grammar mistakes here and there, but yours had very glaring issues that ruined the flow of some sentences. Which could turn to ruining the flow of a post. Which could turn to ruining the flow of an RP, and subsequently killing it. My inner grammar nazi is screaming in nonsensical fake-German.

2) All four of your custom cards are ungodly levels of powerful in a ritual deck. Creation is essentially Necloth Exomirror for ANY one ritual monster, Rebirth is even worse since it's Exomirror for ANY one ritual monster in your Graveyard, Power is bordering on the second freaking coming of Solemn Judgment, and Sword of Despair gives you a one-sided Judgment Dragon with 3400 ATK points. Even if I liked everything else, I'd say "Fix that shit immediately."

3) Those are some awfully tiny paragraphs you've got for his personality. I'm actually pretty sure just two sentences doesn't qualify as a paragraph at all, but even so...isn't this just basically every "Kaiba character" (Seto Kaiba, Jack Atlas, etc.) summarized in four sentences?

4) While I like the latter half of his bio, the first bits sound like the same "impoverished family" cliche I've seen in every RP ever.

5) Aside from your linguistic grammar, your Yu-Gi-Oh grammar is also pretty wonky. Which leads to disaster in-game.

You could always feel free to try again, but unless you step up your game, your odds on getting accepted on that second attempt are pretty low.

A Great Bloody Mess

post is up, and I probably feel more dead than 687 does. g'night, everyone.

A Great Bloody Mess

~Priscilla the Ancient~
No matter. Soon enough, he'll understand my meaning. Killing off the zombie critter as a measure of covering up her footsteps, Priscilla made her way back toward the vampire shelter. There was nothing more to do outdoors. As she got there, she caught sight of three of the vampires out front. The founder, and two others. A hunt?

Quite frankly, Priscilla wasn't overly concerned about what they were doing. Even if Kuro was right, and times were changing, fledglings were still fledglings. That was something that wouldn't change. Stepping past the gathering just outside the door, Priscilla stepped inside, shutting the door behind her.

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~Hisako Saito~
"Are we ready for the hunt?"

The question was a welcome one in Hisako's ears. "I am, at least. How about you?" she asked, turning to Greyson. Hisako was always ready to sneak under cover of night and snatch away a human or two. Anything to keep her looking young and beautiful. And if that meant chopping some years or decades off a human's lifespan...fine by her.

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~Abomination Hybrid Prototype #687 - "Fina"~
This way, right? #687 was approaching her destination, right? Her creators made her orders perfectly clear. Be smuggled to Japan by boat, and when she got there, find the vampire sanctuary that was rumored to exist. When fully retracted, her arm was about the length of a normal arm. By adding a special cut-proof glove she'd been given, it was easy to cover up the arm with long sleeves. She'd been ordered to do that too. Keep her arm out of sight, and if anyone saw, kill them without discrimination.

"This is the most important mission an Abomination has ever been entrusted with," her creators had told her. "Don't mess this up." Failure meant the complete loss of Japan for vampires. Success meant a successful takeover, or at the very least, a return to the status quo. The necrotic redhead continued walking in a straight line, following the instructions she'd been given. She'd been walking for three whole days without stopping. She needed food. Flesh. Whenever she arrived, 687 needed to eat.

Then she heard it. Just barely, but it was definitely there. A voice. Male. Either young adult, or vampire. Not Italian. Not Japanese. She couldn't place an accent she'd never heard before, much less from this distance. But either she was closing in on her destination, or she could eat something. So she kept moving, at a slightly increased pace. As typically the case, 687 smelled of blood. Abominations had a tendency to; as convenient as their diets may be, they're not exactly the cleanest of eaters. Faint, but definitely there for vampires to identify.

Getting closer, she saw four people. One male. Probably the owner of the mystery voice. And three women...one clad in black armor, stepping inside the small building the other three were in front of. Was this the place? Easy way to find out. "Is here...safe?"

It was a simple-enough question. But for the trio before her, there would probably be one problem. The question was in pure, perfect, heavily-accented Italian. Language barriers were not obstacles 687 was trained to overcome.

A Great Bloody Mess

We're still going strong, yes.

I'll commence the work on my post very briefly.

Yu-Gi-Oh! Spirit

I'm starting to believe Roxas may have left us. So unless Krein finishes his CS by the end of the day, y'all two should just proceed with the duel.

If circumstances free up irl for me, I'll probably drop one more permanent addition to the cast after the tournament, but Xi and Aislin should not be considered permanent...well, not Aislin at least.

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Will get crackin' on a post tomorrow. What to expect so far:
- Priscilla returning to the building
- 687's debut

Ghost Stories (Anime) Sequel RP

If I may be so kind as to offer why you're not getting interest...

You've chosen perhaps one of the most innocuous "horror" animes I've ever seen or heard of. I'd actually be surprised if anyone on this forum other than you and I are even aware it exists. On top of which, the dub - while funny - was sadly not all that great (and I hear the original Japanese wasn't so good either), which sets a poor starting tone for the RP itself. But perhaps the final nail in the coffin is...Ghost Stories ended. Ouma was defeated, Amanojaku is no longer stuck in a cat, and the scary ghosts & demons that were running around...aren't running around anymore. As it is, you're just making an original comedy/light-horror RP and slapping a decent-at-best cast of canon characters that the RPers must use on it, the only OC among them (for fairly generous definition; "the American transfer student at the Japanese school who plays a massive plot part" is a character type I've seen hundreds of times already) being controlled by yourself. Quite bluntly, it sounds more like a fanfic than an RP =.=;

There are two very probable and easily-done solutions to fixing things here though, since I hate to see an RP die before it ever launches, and I happen to really like your avatar. They're listed below, for your convenient and easy reading :)

1) Don't force the use of canon characters, especially for an anime as small-time as Ghost Stories. I'd bet money that if I was wrong and someone here does know it exists other than us, they probably won't be too eager to play any of its characters. I know I wouldn't be, at least.

2) Make this into an original RP; I could probably help with this if you find it difficult. It's not uncommon for original RPs around here to be based on varying anime, and I happened to like the general idea of Ghost Stories even if I found the show itself lackluster.
2.5) If you did go the original route, you could even strike out it being a sequel altogether and just make it a comedic monster-busting RP styled after Ghost Stories. Not part of the big two suggestions, but a very possible route you could take if you turned this into an original-setting RP instead of "Ghost Stories RP"

Hope this helps, even if it's just a little ^_^

Sum up your week in roleplaying in just 3 words

Mine is suddenly becoming
"Where is everybody?"

Yu-Gi-Oh! Spirit

Request sent. I'll try to keep our discussion on the matter spoiler-free