Windreda

And The Clouds Remained Unchanged

Hey guys...don't wish to be that guy. However events have recently arose that make me realize I probably don't have the time to run an RP like I thought. I hate to leave it as it is, so I welcome you to continue on without me if you guys wish to RP the idea. The barebones are here, and I can passively help if you need me to. However being a full fledged isn't something I really have the luxury for despite my best intentions of thinking I could return. Anyway hopefully I'm not hunted down and killed because of this...

And The Clouds Remained Unchanged

Master Jaster said
Ok, I've gotta go to sleep for work tomorrow, so I'll just post my unedited responses to the first three paragraphs you wrote. I am willing to make drastic changes to the character if I need to, but for now I'll just try and get you as much information about the one I have as possible. The reasoning behind the assassination thing was that there would be people looking for those who gained these abilities (I figured at least one group in the world would be trying to prevent the spread of knowledge about AMA/would be trying to stop the resurgence of magic), specifically Heaven’s Hand or some other underground organization. I figured it would be an OP skill to have, but I also figured the ability could be as much a curse as it is a blessing. I planned on the eventuality of his character dying relatively frequently, allowing for infinite possibilities on who he takes over as well as what situation whatever he takes over is in. For example: he could take control of someone in jail, or a pet bird trapped in a cage. Or he could take control of a morbidly obese person, a cripple, or an elderly person.Perma-death was also something I thought over quite a bit. I’ll be honest; I figured that since his character was more of a specialist than an actual fighter, it wouldn’t matter as much if he died. Ways of him dying forever would involve his conscious mind not being able to swap to another body, someone attacking his consciousness through other forms of telepathy, and eventually a steady decline in his ability to find another host. I also thought of the potential of a mind “snapping out” of its dormant state and fighting back against Jack’s presence, occasionally ejecting Jack’s mind. Lastly, the process of taking over someone’s mind and then having them die on him leaves a permanent impression of the thing’s consciousness on Jack. (none of Jack's higher level tiers have been thought about in detail yet, so if this stuff that I'm writing seems OP its because I didn't take the time to think about it too much. I planned on the higher tiers actually decreasing the OP nature of Jack's initial ability)I planned on having the higher tier unlocks mainly be based around him breaking his consciousness into pieces, allowing him to briefly influence someone’s actions, feel someone’s emotions, or make them feel something he creates. The only way he could actually fully take over someone else’s mind (until very late game where one possibility I thought up involved him creating two functioning conscious minds that could act independently) is if he were to fully remove himself from his current host (whether or not the host regains conscious control of his or her mind is based on how low of a tier Jack is) and place himself in a weak willed mind. This would be around tier 4 or 5. Actual mind reading was not something I saw as being possible for this character, as his mind never straight up melds with someone else’s. I wanted the person or animal’s mind to temporarily be suppressed (kind of like when you’re blackout drunk) while Jack is in control.I'll check back tomorrow, as well as do some more specific work on this character, but I am willing to make a new character if this is too much of a headache for you.

UGH I had an entire detailed explanation on this response, and of course my page refreshes for no reason what so ever. I won't get in a post if I try to recopy your response so...

Sparknotes time!

Assassins: No, it still seems a little farfetched that a group targets SPECIFIC people on AMA research. They might as well just destroy Atlas as a whole: An entire mining and research community based around AMA. Still it seems like an interesting idea, just not really something I wish to include at the moment (As it really only addresses your character.)

Magic: I see where your going, and I love the creativity you have when developing this. Still unless you really spend a bit more time developing this I got to say no. I don't have a headache with it, I understand perfectly where you're coming from. Your handicaps to it just don't really seem to work from an RP standpoint as there just isn't any weight. A character trapped in jail would be dull to write about, and after a post or two about a detailed suicide you'd be back where you started. It would be really fun to see you sort of "Quantum Leap" into different lives, I just would like to see a more specific tier system that adds a bit more balance to immortality. If by all means you start getting a headache trying to make this magic work then just role another character. I just can't see myself approving the magical system with how it is currently.

I love all this creativity you're bringing with you character and I'm trying not to trample on it, I'd just like to see this character fleshed out fully before I can see if it would work.

AeronFarron said
Hello!

Hallow! Anyway I figured it to be easy to quote this rather than your ENTIRE character sheet. Overall I liked it, your magic is unique and I love the extra bit of setting you added. The ranch makes sense as it is monitored by Atlas and it once again gives a more windowed look into The Outlands. Another fun thing about your ranch is that you get to design your own animals to, in this new world it would be boring to have plain old cows/horses (But you can if you want) Come up with some creative docile beasts to add into the world!

Besides some odd phrasings or difficult to understand transitions(I had no idea your character wasn't living with her mother but then her mothers side of the family pops up, However it wasn't the end of the world reading through it) I thought it was a very well done character. You were true to my lore while adding some of your own, and the magic you posses is powerful without being too game breaking.

You are accepted.

Reialgo said
Wow, the quote system doesn't keep paragraph spacing? o.0Well by kicked out I meant by his family, I haven't really worked out all the kinks to the backstory but I was thinking she would be a part of a noble's family, seen experimenting with magic by a family members, and snuck into being a "Surveyor" as a pseudo form of exile to keep her away from the city for both her own safety and her family's. Also thinking of having fire based magic to up the freak out factor, you know relation to the great fire n stuff.If this is sounds too much for magic thats been recently discovered, maybe I can turn it into a subplot in the RP instead? Start as a noble and turn my character to the life os surveying during the plot.

Ya, makes me keep on missing how the old site functioned. Seemed more familiar to me, now just foreign...

Oh right your character. Anyway I plan on having the RP start about a week after the explosion and the reemergence of magic, so to avoid too much of playing through a scenario we know the outcome of I see no reason as why your character couldn't have been 'exiled' in that time. It also makes for a more interesting story too, a noble family covering for one of their own in order to avoid the repercussions. With the inclusion of noble family's being replaced, it adds for some tension there.

The fire magic works too as well, another freak out factor to the citizens of Atlas like you said. I see nothing wrong with it so far, you're good.

The book of bad juju said
Sure, go ahead, most people do. It's a lot better then being called Book.I was kind of testing the waters there, mainly. If it works, it works. My original intention was for Teeterlands to be little more then lean-to shacks for miners to sleep in when they're not, y'know, mining. But if this frontier town away from Town idea works, lovely

Okay, i might as well to what i'm basing this magic system on, /tg/'s runic arrays. The way i see it working is that at tier one, a rune circle trap thing (or RCT) would activate on touch, and spawn out one of say, six things.. A small fire, a puddle of water, sticky stuff, a small push away, a smokescreen, and some spikes. At tier two, you can combine two things together. So you can have the small fire AND water to create steam. sticky stuff AND spikes for an annoying trap. At that same tier, tier 2, you could modify one rune so you could have a Large campfire, a small stream of water, a sticky trap that activated when it was Seen rather then directly touched. To modify one base Element beyond what it already does, to make it More in some way. However, this seems a little OP, given that runes have no weight and there's nothing preventing you from writing fire runes on every side of a rock and hurling it at a guy as a fireball substitute.So here's the system i have in mind right now.I suppose a solution would be that the total cost of each tier of spell is added together to get the tier of the spell as cast.Also, the quote button doesn't carry over stuff from the post you're quoting, such as formatting. Even though a quote is capable of it. You'll have to go through with each quote and re-add the format to the stuff you quote.
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The quoting system is just... bad. I know man.

Anyway I'm sorry for messing with your town, it's just that I pictured the AMA mines to be directly below Atlas so I saw no reason for there to be separate housing elsewhere. If you have a different idea and want to share it than go for it, if you would want Teetertown to be a sort of haven for miners than I see no harm in including that into the RP. I still would want to have sort of an outer settlement on the edge of Atlas incorporating a window to The Outlands, I would just call it something else.

I also read through the entire magic system you're proposing and it sounds awesome, I think it would be cool if you included it into your character. I still would like you to have the tier system, as it provides a leveling system for your characters, but your example kind of works for the most part. To avoid the whole OP element of your magic, how about there is a limit to how many runes you can draw. As you increase tier levels this limit increases, as well as making it possible for you to simply cast runes on surfaces at will. I really enjoy the idea as while you aren't completely powerful in one element of magic, you have a wide range of skills that could suit your character at certain points in time. Nothing seems wrong with the idea at all, if you lengthen your character sheet and specify parts like background and magic then you will be good.

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Mizuho said

I submitted my character brah

Thanks dog, looks alright to me broseph.

Alright silliness aside I believe it's a very clean and well organized character sheet. You have a tendency to be a little repetitive with your explanation of her character, but I see nothing wrong with it. I enjoy the small bits of lore you added, and how noble families aren't above being removed. It still leaves the question of how a new noble family would be added, however I love the bitterness it adds in many of those displaced nobles from the old family. I also enjoyed your magic, nothing seems overpowered without being weak.

You are accepted.

The book of bad juju said
Name: Dale Haight

Gender: Male

Age: 32

Appearance:

Magic: Dale's brand of magic is a tricky beast to tame. He draws a little rune, sygil, diagram, or drawing onto a surface, which can then be turned on by impact, vocal command, or other stimuli. The level of control and fine-tuning is dependent on the tier they occupy. Higher-tier spells take longer to draw, where tier 1 can be drawn with a finger in the dirt, tier 5 needs a chalk and tier ten, penmanship.

Personality: Dale is a good-hearted soul. Some would call him a rough diamond, but he's much more like a carbuncle in that he's synonymous with a skin disease. Jeremy looks out for himself first, his friends second, and his enemies last. He considers himself learned and knowledgeable in most practical respects, although very rusty on the theoretical aspects of most fields. Dale has a stubborn streak, and to this day, calls AMA "Matteran' ". Dale acts very territorial, and will defend his hearth to the last scrap of flesh in his body. Dale has a tendency not to see social lines or barriers, such as how flipping of a Sky Brigadier could net him a severe beating. Dale looks down on scholars, members of Heaven's Hand, yet feels at ease around Marked Ones. While he respects the ideals of the Sky brigade, he prefers that they wouldn't infringe on his personal freedoms.

Background: (Unfinished and VEY Sketchy.) Dale was born to small, not-well off family in a small tribal community called Teeterlands, so named because of being almost outside of Atlas Sky brigade protection, and halfway encroached on Outlands territory. Dale grew up making law with his own fists, fighting other street kinds for fun.As hew grew older, he took up odd-jobs down the pits to earn a livable wage, like most kids in Teetertown do.

Theme:

The book of- you know juju. Can I call you juju? I can't accept an incomplete character sheet, but I like what you're going with it so far. I actually love the theme you added for him, seeing his picture and character I think it fits so well! Another thing I liked was actually something I had a problem with. Teetertown seemed like an impossibility because of Atlas's paranoia with the outside world, but thinking about it I actually think it's kind of cool that there's a town separating the wilds from the city itself. It would make the city feel less isolated, and include more room to include elements of the outside world. I would say it would probably sort of be a buffer between a section of walling. The walls to Atlas's valley are strict with the walls to the outlands being a bit more lax. It actually could serve as a hub for Outland Surveyors, I like it.

One final problem I have though is your magic, while I get what your going for I saw the tier system as a sort of leveling system. Certain powers are unlocked overtime, rather than a rating to give certain magical abilities. However I don't see why you couldn't keep the type of power you have...if you could elaborate a bit more on what it is. I have no idea what you use to for, controlling inanimate objects, creatures? I would like your character to be REALY fleshed out before I can accept him.

Overall though I like his atmosphere, I just need a much more specific character sheet with a greater emphasis at explaining your magic. Let me know if you have any questions!

Master Jaster said
I've got an idea for a character, we'll call him Jack for now, but you're gonna need to OK his backstory and ability as they are both potentially issues.For backstory, I wanted Jack to be someone who was recruited into those scientific fields you mention as a child. When the story starts, he would be at an age range that would be this universes equivalent of one's early twenties. I would like for him to be working as a researcher apart of a team that is trying to learn the secrets of AMA (one of many research groups headed by various Noble leaders). His team in particular would work out of the AMA storage facility that is destroyed. The team would be a group of six people around the same age as Jack, and one supervisor. I would like for one of the team members to make a small discovery that would allow the research team to get a glimpse of how AMA works. The entire group is told about this discovery, but the physical information is destroyed in the explosion, and most of the team members are killed. Now, depending on how getting magical powers works and whether or not you'll let Jack's ability fly, I would like for four or five members of the team to survive the explosion, but for most of them to be assassinated (if this doesn't fly, then just two survivors other than Jack) by the people who destroyed the facility. Jack will be killed during the actual explosion, but the ability that Jack gains is for his consciousness to flee to another host after the body it resides in dies. Tier 1 would make it so this process is completely random, allowing his consciousness to take over animals and people at random and anywhere within a multi-mile radius. I would have him be trapped inside a nobleman at first, who ends up being assassinated along with the other surviving team members (Jack attempts to find the team members and learn what's going on, which gives him away), then a rat (which is crushed in some machinery soon after Jack enter its body), and then a citizen, which is where we will start with him. The way this ability would work is that he can only enter the body of an animal or person whose mental defenses are completely lowered. A mind with a lot of stress on it would reject Jack's consciousness, as would one that is aware of Jack's presence. As it is right now, Jack would not be able to enter the mind of someone who has magical abilities like his own. I came up with all of this minutes ago, so I'll leave you with this to OK or pan before I go too crazy. I plan on expanding on the rules of this ability and Jack's backstory more as I continue working with this character, but right now I think you have enough to get a general idea. The issues I mentioned earlier are that you would need to give me a little bit of information to make Jack's knowledge worth killing over, as well as the fact that currently Jack's ability makes his conscious mind immortal (at least early on in the story). Sorry for inconsistencies or grammatical errors in this post. I haven't done much in the way of creative writing for a couple years now.Also, Jack is just a placeholder name.

Man that's a messy quote system...

Anyway yes and no on a lot of things. I like the idea that he's a scientist for AMA, and considering that AMA has plenty of secrets of its own I will happily accept this part. The assassination thing seems a little far fetched, and unless you can sell it to me a bit more I'm going to have to say nay on that. More likely than not most of your team will die in the blast radius, though I am a bit intrigued on perhaps including a group of assassins in this new world. At the moment though no.

As for your powers it seems really cool...and really OP. I get he's limited to what his consciousness can go into, however for a character than cannot die there is no weight to his actions. Even in a game like Dark Souls, despite being difficult the fact that you had unlimited resets had everyone complete the game through trial and error. I just think there needs to be something to keep this power in check, because it sounds awesome for an upper tier unlock. How about this...

I like the idea of sending you consciousness out, sort of like a 'Mind Jack' scenario. Perhaps upper levels of this power can link to brief control of weak willed individuals for short durations (But not permanently). You could work it up from there, perhaps even adding some abilities like hearing the thoughts of others around you. There needs to be weight to this power however, you cannot be invincible and simply have a reset button every time you die. I'm trying to think how you could still somewhat keep your idea without just jumping to person to person every time you die. Perhaps if you're occupying another person and your body dies a whole slew of problems happens, either you have to share consciousness (That'd be kind of cool) or your mind sort of deteriorates from that experience. If you die with your consciousness however that's game over.

Man...don't get me wrong it sounds cool, I'm just trying to make this work. I'm not sure what lower level tier systems would be, as temporarily controlling an enemy before you die seems a bit OP. Perhaps at lower tiers the user can strongly fight back your control, and as well there remains some type of 'Cool Down' on this type of power. Man I'm really trying to work this through...I encourage any type of magic to be made and I think it'd be cool to have this power as well. Jut REALLY try to limit it down for now.

As for the who AMA thing though, I'm cool with it. If you want to add more details on the who assassin thing, I'd be ready to be sold on it. Just work on watering down that magic.

Reialgo said
Eyo, I hope you wont mind when I say that I wont be able to post a CS until monday, maybe late sunday depending on how I'm feeling since I'll be away for the weekend.I do have a question though, regarding "Outland Surveyors", I had planned on making a homeless character who had been kicked to the streets out of fear of her magic so this seems to fit this general idea, but I digress, I'm wondering if these guys are monitored and/or how do they go about surveying? Do they have to make routine reports through snazzy techno communication gadgets? Or am I reading too into this and is this just a fancy term for exile?Oh, and of course, I don't plan on having her stay in the outlands ;) (unless sneaking aint possible yo)

Nah, that'll actually be a role people have. Atlas can't be COMPLETLY cut off from the outside world, and sometimes individuals are chosen for the job. I'll probably edit things a bit to where an Atlas exile and a surveyor will be on completely different terms. An exile can no longer return, and a surveyor has limited rights in the city perhaps. Juju's idea for an outer settlement actually peeked my interest, as that way players can have a closer aspect on what Outland life is like without just hearing about it.

One thing I have to step in on for a lot of people is Atlas residents didn't have this magic in the past. It only JUST now resurfaced, so getting kicked out of Atlas because of magic would only work if it takes place within recent events. Also because of Atlas's strong fear of magic you wouldn't be kicked out, but still working out the kinks and details. Might turn the scientists of Atlas into major immoral D-bags, might turn The Sky Brigade into kill on sight kind of people. Still deciding how I would like tings to turn out.

As for Outland Surveyor's they are responsible for not only noting any changes around Atlas but as well mapping the surrounding wildlife. They note monster movements and keep major herds from getting too close to the city, even serving as a heads up if they can only just warn that danger is approaching. They are the eyes and ears of Atlas outside of the walls, amassing heavy duty equipment to go after creatures in the wild. How they communicate will be directly at the walled checkpoints, speaking face to face to Atlas officials on their reports or threats of any danger. So they not only need to be well armed, but quick too. A sort of best of the best kind of job that no one really wants, despite the curiosity some may have about the Outlands. It's not a place that you can comfortably live in, and if you're not careful can easily die in too.

Should a surveyor go AWOL either through joining a Marked One camp, dying, or simply just running off into the woods, they are replaced and treated as nothing more than an exiled Atlas resident. Anyway I probably should post most of this stuff in the intro post, however I do enjoy all of these questions that are coming in. It allows me to think of ideas that I may not have thought of that in-depth when I first made this idea. Also once again you guys are free to contribute any sort of lore you wish to this world!

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Mizuho said
So, how far would I be able to broaden my character's magic? What I personally had in mind was I'd begin with the weaker powers, and with each tier, I would introduce an ability that it different, yet a bit more powerful.

Would something like: ...

be acceptable?Or would you rather have me focus on a few abilities and work on making them stronger as my character progresses?

See those powers are fine, just scrunch them together and judge your abilities based off of their power.

With multiple powers like that you aren't necessarily focusing on one specific ability, so I think it would be alright for your tier to be like this:

Tier 1: Minor persuasion and healing abilities. Influence minor emotions and heal small cuts.
Tier 2: Distortion screaming, throws enemies off guard. (This will be your "Fight" tier)
Tier 3: Improved screaming, more painful to hostile beings. Weaker enemies are stunned.
Tier 4: More advanced persuasion and healing techniques. Influence lesser minds with decision making, even convince them to fight along side you. Heal open wounds.

An ability like Hallucinations, might be placed higher on the list, however I'm not sure where I want the cap to be. I'm debating making it ten, yet I'm still unsure how I would want the leveling system to work in the first place. Please bear with me here ^_^' !

ShadowRaeper said
Thanks for the tip :) I didn't really knew how you truelly wanted it, so now i can create it into a CS you wanted :)For my english... sorry... It isn't my main languedge...

No problem, sorry for being a bit harsh there are just a stricter set of standards for me in an advanced RP. I can look past the misspellings if they are minor, however please address more specifically on some of the elements I went into. I look forward to seeing an updated character sheet from you :)

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ShadowRaeper said

Name:Maya Tersan

Gender:FemaleAge:21

Appearance: Maya her blue hair is quite long, it is something she is proud of, she has a normal body build and her lenght is average like any other girl.She always tries to wear as les clothes as possible so that she can move more freely in them, as her clothes also give enough room for her to move quite fast if she has to.

Magic(If applicable):Telekinese

Tier 1: Maya is able to move an object within 5 meters away.

Tier 2: Maya is able to move an object within 15 meters away.

Tier 3: Maya is able to move two objects at the same time.

Tier 4: Maya is able to move objects within 35 meters away.

Tier 5: Maya is able to move objects within 45 meters away.

Tier 6: Maya is able to move three objects at the same time.

Tier 7: Maya is able to move objects within 55 meters away.

Tier 8: Maya is able to move objects within 65 meters away.

Tier 9: Maya is able to move four objects at the same time.

Tier 10: Maya is able to move objects within 75 meters away.Etc Etc....

Personality:Maya is a girl who is quite sweet and nice, or thats just how she seems to be on the outside.Maya actually is one who wants to purge the world of evil, thinking of any possible way to do so, aldo justice is done by the police as most people say, Maya thinks that justice can come in different ways.There for she holds her secret hidden away, for her darkness that dwelms within her will come out eventually once the time is right.Maya also sometimes feels lost, aldo she barelly makes it seeable, for she feels like her life is meaningless and doesn't has a purpose for anyone.

Background:Maya comes from a family who barelly came around, aldo she didn't care much for money. Aslong as they had a roof above their heads and food to feed them, she was fine with it. She didn't had any siblings, for the one who would have been her sibling died with birth.Her father works as a plumber, aldo its not the best job, it feeded them and gave them their house. Her mother worked in a shop for clothes, it was something she did few times a week, just so that they had some extra money.Once Maya got out of the house, she started to find her own place and started to work in the library, books always fascinated her for so she found it suitable to work with them.After she got accepted with her work, she found a small house just outside of the rich district, where she started to life her small but certain life.Day in day out she goes to the library, read the books as she looks at the customers coming in to give their rented books back or take books with them.

Theme:

ShadowRaeper...I can't accept this. If this was a casual OOC you could probably get away with a sheet like this, but this is just bad. Many words are misspelled, her personality and background are way too vague, and you don't even include all of the bullets I wanted you to in my Character Template. Other things I would like you to address are your powers, while fine by itself the tiers are a little TOO specific than I'd like. How do you judge what's 75 feet away and what's 25 feet away in text. I would like to see more of how powerful her magic is, not necessarily how far away she can lift things. Rather than give a specific number, simply allude to the fact that her range has increased. Another issue you need to address is how powerful this magic is, multiple objects are good but what of the weight of the object, the duration of the lift, etc, etc.

I also don't really understand the less clothes comment, does she wear armor or is the difference between clothing that covers her body THAT much related to her speed? I would address the spelling errors, reevaluate her magic, be a bit more specific with her personality(You vaguely hint at a darkness inside her, but to me that feels too much like "Main Character Syndrome"), and MUCH more specific with her background. In a city that assigns roles, how did she become a librarian, her reaction to magic, etc. etc.

Mizuho said
Yay! The OOC is up :DSo, I have a question. For magic, how far are we allowed to branch out? In the example, it seems to be something like here's one ability, and it begins to get stronger with each tier. But are we allowed to have a general overarching power, with little sub-abilities for each tier? For example, if there was a power to control all elements (Pretty OP and broad I know, but this was the first example I could think of. I'm not necessarily considering this) could the first tier be to control fire, then the next tier be controlling water?The magic I'm considering has to do with voice. For the first tier, could I have something to do with a persuasive voice, and the next tier could be something to do with more of a combative side like a deafening screech? Or do they all have to be somewhere along the lines of "Tier 1: ability to scream loudly. Tier 2: ability to scream loud enough to damage ear drums" etc?I'm sorry if I'm not making any sense x_x and I realize this is kinda repetitive.

Ohoh seems like our scholar friend (Alright me) has a little more research to do. That is actually really cool, I didn't think of combining magical abilities. In fact I think I could make that work, but under certain circumstances. A person who controls all elements for example would be less proficient with them say if they just specialized in water, however they would be more suitable to wider variety of circumstances. If that's the case then the tier system would still apply, however the users powers would increase at a slower amount to others(Having to adapt a bit more to the current situation rather than rely solely on their power).

In your situation I don't think anything would have to be changed, and in fact I rather like the sort of "Push" aspect you're going with the voice magic. That would work, you could focus on differing levels of persuasion as well as well combative magic as it falls under the same category as "Voice", aside from water vs. fire magic which generally have differing styles of attack. Since you have a sort of persuasion power, that would be a good tier 1 ability, however very limited in amounts, You could for instance make the person your talking to feel a certain way(I hate to make this example, but a Jasper from Twilight sort of power) but you couldn't directly influence their decisions. Then for instance your tier 2 power could be that scream attack, however perhaps focus more on disorientation rather than shattering the ear drum. Because you are somewhat limited with your abilities, your persuasion and scream attacks would level sides by side. Say for instance your tier 3 power would be the ability to influence weak willed individuals, while your tier 4 power could potentially shatter eardums. In fact why stop there? Experiment a bit on how you view a good tier leveling system for your powers to be, however eventually I have the image of you shooting rays of death from your mouth or even using your voice to project yourself into the air.

...Anyway I'm being a bit hard to understand as well. My point is I welcome creative freedom, and part of the fun of this RP is the ability to design your own forms of magic. Balancing it compared to others might be a bit difficult, however I'm looking forward to see character designs and where this RP could go.

Don't think you'll have access to say you tier 5 powers immediately, however the leveling system is a way to spice up the combat just a bit when it comes down to it.

Anyway I appreciate the question, let me know if I answered it well enough or if you have any more concerns.

Appocalyptic Magic Roleplay

Ew...double posting.

Anyway finally decided to put up an OOC if you guys care to take a look.

http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/40865/posts/ooc?page=1#post-1221367[/url

And The Clouds Remained Unchanged

So you wish to hear the story do you? The story of how the world had come to an end?



Well of course the world didn't really end, that's the curse of humanity isn't it? To hold on until the bitter end. That's why we still have water, still have a sky, still have a home we can return to. Unlike before, where soot had covered the air and man went to great lengths to kill their God. The end of the world...what a laugh. Our cities had fallen but we still hold onto some semblance of the world of old, how does that signify any great end to our way of life-

Right, I apologize. Excuse the ramblings of an old woman, it's been too long since the great fires had come to our world. But...you did come to me, a forgetful hag, to learn of an art that abandoned us long ago at our worst. Our best depending on how you look at it [Omit Laughter]

This knowledge was never forgotten, you greedily paw for information that you have had access to for dozens of years! How could you even possibly forget, the fuel of our world that had ironically destroyed what it had come to build? It had brought the Great Fires, what had (so to speak) ended the world [Omit Laughter]

A hurry, a rush?

You look at my bandages in pity, or disgust, but you have no idea what these wrappings really mean do you? You've never seen The Great Fires, you've never experienced the Shattering when civil order had died. You live in this perfect world of grass and blue skies, of rain that always comes and brings life to this last bastion of humanity. You never have experience the weight that my generation has experienced, vicariously knowing that a gun kills even though you've never fired one. But...

You wish to learn of magic do you?

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I was but a girl so I could hardly remember much, it wasn't as if they gave children the right to be gods. But they might as well, the way the people would play with a new power as a child might play with a new toy. We never change. The date or weapon we hold might change, but it was just as well to learn that we never could. When the day had come that magic had come into our world, everyone proclaimed the start of a golden era. How funny it was...to literally ignore the gun we were placing to our heads.

We all lost purpose, we had nothing to strive for when we were granted everything. We are destructive creatures, mere children in bodies that wither with age. There was anger and frustration when nothing was left to distract us, when we turned on our neighbors and destroyed everything in one big temper tantrum. But there was nothing I could do...there was nothing anyone could do. How do you find a power greater than magic? How do suppress the force of billions of gods?

This is where you leave disappointed. I can tell you stories from my childhood when magic had yet to come to our "perfect" world. I can relate to you the atrocities that happened in the streets with no accountability. I can share with you my story from the Shattering, how a man had come to make me bleed simply because he could. Or how my mother bled for differing reasons. How my father burned alive, how my friends killed themselves in agony or my bullies left in the migrations out of fear.

I can share with you how the Great Fires fell from the sky and melted the land, cleansing our sin in a rain that would last a lifetime. I know many things, but you already know what I do not know.

Why has this magic returned?

[Omit Laughter]

You think I waste your time do you, storming out that door now? I can assure you I do know something. This entire situation is ironic.

You fear the very thing that potentially could save you.

***

Notable Events

The World of Old: An event in time where magic had yet to come into the world. Nothing is known about this period despite what others may say, accounts either forgotten or highly skewed from witness accounts. Any sort of documentation had been destroyed in the Great Fires, however because of this The World of Old grew into a sort of utopian idea in the hearts of many. A time before magic, before the world fell a part, and before humans had any sort of worry in the world. The truth would most likely be less kind.

Discovery: The World of Old consists entirely of speculation or sloppy witnessed accounts, and the arrival of magic was no different. No one knew how it arrived, only that when it did the world would be forever changed. As a flame hits gasoline access to this ability grew, and while some chose to stay away for one reason or another eventually most succumbed to the powers of a god. Whether it was the manipulation of natural elements to the bending of matter itself, magic became just as destructive as it was helpful.

The Shattering: The event that would signify the end of the World of Old. While there were isolated cases of civil disorder, this was the tipping point where society broke into all out anarchy. Governments fell, citizens were slaughtered, and a worldwide war broke out by those who possessed the powers of magic. There would be no rules to follow, simply choices to be made. Kill, rape, pillage, fight, run, people chose what they wished to...yet those without magic could only slit their own throats.

The Great Fires: The concluding chapter in this trilogy of magic's arrival, "The End of the World" so to speak. Most everyone would be killed as the sky would collapse, enveloping the land in flames that strangely could not be stopped. It was almost as if a god himself was reaching down to purge the world from sin, wiping away the power that humans possessed for such a glimmer of time. The destruction receded, the survivors emerged, and those that were left struggled to rebuild. The magic once known was gone.

Present Day: Only a measly number of humans are left, and that number is falling. With wildlife closing in on bastions of human civilization it is hard to survive, no matter how much water or food is available. Those who are left form tight knit communities(Or tribes) to combat any hostile creatures, however there are accounts of cities around the world struggling to maintain themselves. The cities that do exist however have little means to expand and view anything outside of its walls as hostile.

Notable Locations

Atlas: One of the remaining few cities left in the world. Surviving off of archaic technology the city powers it's devices through the use of AMATERASU (AMA for short), a highly efficient mineral that is mined in the caves underneath the city. Those who don't mine or work in agricultural fields that border the city, contained by the mountains or walled checkpoints, are generally rare and born into their way of life. With exceptions of a police force, the roles of government and nobility run in the family(however formal education to all children under the age of 15 is required no matter what background). The infrastructure itself is wheel shaped with a central spire reaching up towards the sky, housing the various noble families that run the city's day to day activities. Along with the cave system that contains the cities power source there is also a sewer that runs deep underground, disposing of the waste in a neighboring ocean unseen by most citizens of Atlas. Life is quiet, livened by the occasional holiday normally celebrating the rains that supply Atlas with crops and water. Most know their roles in life and generally follow it, those who deviate find themselves disappearing quietly from Atlas. People know to follow governmental policy, respect the nobles, and to NEVER think of leaving into The Outlands. With the destruction of an AMA storage facility, this was of life will start to change.

The Outlands: Untamed wilderness that dominates the open landscape, anything untouched by human development after the Great Fires had come and gone. Not only is the land dangerous to trek in but there are as well ferocious creatures of immense size that walk the soil, hostile to any human that may cross their paths. On some occasions these creatures have been known to invade human settlements, wiping out anything in their path. Aside from the wildlife, poisonous plants, dangerous trails, and occasional Marked One (Human tribal living in The Outlands) wishing to kill you the land really is a beautiful place. The Great Fires may have destroyed the World of Old, yet it would leave a landscape even more beautiful in the wake of its destruction. It's a shame that very few come to enjoy it in their lifetime.

Notable Groups

Citizens: Residents that make up the remaining few cities existing in the world, survivors that massed together in attempts to survive this new land together. Most have set jobs, making things run smoother as there simply isn’t the numbers for many people to perform tasks that they love to do. Yet no one questions this way of life, too afraid to think of any alternative outside of their walled in existence. Along with nobles, younger children are required “formal” education.

Nobles: Families that had survived the wrath of the Great Fires and chose the path of leadership. Using their roles in government as credibility to their lifestyle, Nobles live a very cushioned life in the respective cities they are found in. While they vary from place to place most are placed in a distinct, typically raised, locations to signify their positions of power. While most people in government are born into the role, some have been known to be replaced if utterly incompetent.

The Sky Brigade: The police force of Atlas, used to keep the peace and ensure that the status quo of life remains the same. The group is run by an overall chief to oversee operations with various lieutenants that rule under them, assigned to specific districts of Atlas to evenly disperse security. While not typically an anti-magic group, with the arrival of magic once again the group has violently turned to stopping it. How they’ve acquired the technology to stopping it is unknown.

The Marked Ones: Humans who live in The Outlands, either denied or willingly secluded away from city life. These people form small tight knit communities, or Tribes, and rarely ever grow large to avoid attracting beasts. They are distinguished by the tribal markings they wear all over their bodies, speculated to be the blood of Outland beasts in order to once again detract any invading creatures (But not officially known). Despite city belief, most tribes are generally civilized.

Heaven’s Hand: A group of humans that have rallied together against other survivors, ironically viewing humanity’s continued existence as a sin against their god. Believing the Great Fires to have been a final judgment against the entire world, they work towards destroying any settlement they find their way across. Combating the hypocrisy their group stands for, they as well believe that they were granted life by their god to as well fulfill this holy mission, to finish what he started.

Notable Terms

AMA: The mysterious mineral used to power much of the devices of cities and tribes alike. Very little is known of just how the mineral works, however being highly efficient with very little pollutants released not many people question such a thing. It is noted by its glowing blue color.

Bestiary

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Magic

-Excerpt of an Atlas scholar

[As it has just reemerged not much is known about exactly how it works. Continue to research.]

Magic remains just as enigmatic as it was in The World of Old. Reemerging soon after a terrorist attack on an AMA storage facility it is speculated that the two events may be related. However considering that Heaven’s Hand gains little from giving people once again the power of a god such a belief is unlikely, and the real reason for its emergence continues to remain a mystery. As much as many wish to disbelief it though, magic has indeed returned into the world.

While the abilities a few citizens have acquired vary, it appears as if the true extent of their power isn’t showing. Either there is something inside of these people that’s limiting their true abilities from showing or the stories of magic from the World of Old are a load of dust. Either way these people seem tamable, and the Sky Brigade is fully jumping on this advantage in the most brutal of ways. How Atlas’s police force has the technology to go against magic is still unknown.

I have decided to rank magic in a sort of system of tiers, if my theory is correct a user’s power there remains untouched power that a person still has yet to develop. Whatever the reason or ability I have decided to ranks a person’s ability based off of tiers: while such abilities far transcend a neat category such as this, it provides some simplified way of defining how dangerous a user could be. Say a person used his magic to clone himself.

Tier 1: A person conjures a copy of oneself, a short distraction to avoid danger.

Tier 2: The clone improves, able to last longer and provide adequate assistance in combat.

Tier 3: The clone continues to improve, now working alongside its user tactically.

Tier 4: The strength of the clone increases, including duration and defense.

Tier 5: The number of clones conjured increases, two bodies fight alongside the main conjurer.

Tier 6: Etc...

A person’s magic extends far beyond even physical capabilities however. Some gain the power to control elements of the natural world, yet others have been noted to have the ability to control a person’s mind. Such variation and extent of such impossibilities is phenomenal! The correlation between a person’s power and their personality is still being studied, along with exactly why a person’s power is hidden and how is it unlocked. This may be a golden age for discovery!

Atlas: The City of Rain

[Buckle up boys and girls. Welcome to our vague yet specific setting]

A city located on the eastern coast of an unknown continent. It is not known whether Atlas is a survivor from The World of Old or simply a new creation; however it consists of human descendants surviving the best they can against Outland monstrosities. Surrounded on all sides by either mountains or steel walls, Atlas locates itself within a valley of sunshine and grassy fields. While spacious, most of the surrounding land is devoted to crops and water collection.

The city itself is spiral shaped in the center of this valley, looking more like a collection of steel and pipes than a city itself. While not too pretty to look at it is highly functional, using an intricate piping system to transport electrically powering AMA or water for residence. There are a secondary set of walls surrounding the city itself from the outer fields, however the overall appearance of Atlas isn’t at all frightening. Soft paint colors are used to displace the dark metals.

A variety of other coverings and banners decorate the entire city, not at all practical but generally contributions craftsmen make to liven up their home. Various festivals are as well celebrated in Atlas, normally celebrating necessities such as their valley’s safety or the rainfall that is received. These festivals generally include unique dress, specialty dishes, group dances, or anything to take the mind off of workers for a day. During festivals school and work is suspended for that time.

At the very center of Atlas houses its attraction point, seen by all ends of the valley: Titan’s Fist(Shortened normally to Titan). A large central spire that reached up to the sky, this structure is the city’s focal point in not only appearance but government as well. The base contains areas where the government meets, research centers, and noble housing with the top serving as a sort of observatory and watch tower. When looking towards Atlas, all eyes rest here.

Nobles in Atlas are members born into a royal family, however in more common cases than expected a citizen may marry into noble blood should they catch a noble’s eye. There are nine noble families in total each presiding over a certain part of Atlas; however no one family has more power over another. City policies as a whole are decided through the meetings of elected representatives by each family, the representative gaining the highly influential title of Councilman.

Despite this way of life people are not unhappy, rather content with the safety and peace they’ve been given. A schedule is given and holidays are used to avoid the monotony of life. Children under 16 are required to attend schooling, mostly a tool to acclimate them to their city’s way of life, and to keep them away from restlessness. Most children fall into a farmer or miners way of life; however some are known to be chosen for more specific jobs depending on their skills.

-Some highly intelligent children are known to be recruited to more scientific related fields in Atlas. Some become city leaders assisting nobles with their work and some may even become Outland surveyors on the outside of Atlas(However his job isn’t publically known, and those who do become a surveyor are never again allowed to enter Atlas or its valley). This system is an effective way to weed out talent and simple cogs to replace Atlas’s current machinery.

The city’s police force is known as The Sky Brigade, a group of volunteer citizens and nobles who keep the peace in Atlas. Their numbers are generally few considering the harsh training and little incentives for joining, yet what they lack in numbers they make up in with equipment. From guns to knock a person out cold, electric batons for severe punishment, or gas to simply deal in large crowds they’re equipped to deal with any situation. Even, rumor has it, a magical threat.

-Leadership in The Sky Brigade involves a Chief who runs operations behind a desk and a field leader who directs operations on the front line. A Chief is nominated and elected by fellow officers, staying on the job however long he or she chooses (Unless they quit which some find themselves doing. Rarely is anyone ever fired, the amount of workload a Chief has deters any from simply slacking off). A field officer is chosen through exemplary service, appointed or removed by a Chief.

Final notable locations include the AMA mines which many citizens find work in, the sewages systems many citizens hope to NOT find work in, the various ‘districts’ of Atlas(Housing, Crafting, Entertainment…), the inner agricultural fields, the outer fields containing more critters than crops, the walled checkpoints that are off limits to Atlas residents, and some mountainside paths that are DEFINITELY off limits to Atlas residents. Many secrets as well reside in that valley.

-Atlas mines can be claustrophobic in some parts, yet most miners find themselves in huge wide open spaces consisting of many layers. Mined AMA from the lower tunnels are brought up to elevators, pulled up to mining carts, driven to underground processing plants, and finally brought up to Atlas warehouses where they are stowed and kept for use. Many other minerals are mined underground as well, such as iron to convert to steel or precious metal found time to time.

-The inner fields generally involve a much quieter lifestyle. Those who work in the fields mostly just live there rather than in the city, and on the few occasions when they’re not farming or shipping food involve themselves in craftsman work. While most craftsman are born into the role, farmers tend to craft more personalized items for family or loved ones. Field workers often find themselves doubling up on jobs as well, ranging from construction to school teachers.

Of course life isn’t perfect, some crime persists along with the one fear that can have friends turn on each other: Magic. Stories of The Shattering are kept clear in Atlas’s history, atrocities kept in the light to keep fear in the hearts of citizens. A simple accusation of magic can spark chaos in a crowd, sometimes forcing The Sky Brigade to step in and quell the panic. Despite magic’s disappearance after The Great Fires, no one ever forgets the devastation once caused.

[Whelp that’s my city, specified on some parts and left others open to interpretation. Feel free to add any locations or functions that Atlas may hold, still I’ll be very appreciative if you notify the OOC beforehand.]

RULES

Yup, time for the boring and not very interesting part. But I need to include this in here somewhere after all.

1. READ THE RULES! For the love of everything that you care about I'd appreciate it if you gave these puppies some sense of consideration.

2. Quality over Quantity. I make this mistake sometimes, but sometimes less really is more.

*You're here based on your writing ability, while I may frown upon your two paragraph post I would rather see words that count rather than some disgusting word count.

3. Keep active please. A lot of RP's I've been in have died because of inactivity. So I'm making a rule here.

If you are absent for longer than a week without posting you will receive a warning. If this persists without warning or a valid excuse beforehand I kill off your character.

*If you are experiencing internet difficulty and rage at me for doing so here's the easy part: Just make a new character.

4. I'm not a Nazi, nor some all powering dictator with an unhealthy love towards his RP. If you have lore, a character, or any sort of element you wish to include into my RP do NOT hesitate to say so. I encourage creative freedom, and whether that be a direction of plot or a new location I encourage you to speak up and have your voice heard! I hope to make this RP a group collaborative effort.

5. Don't be dumb. I imagine you've all RP'd before, you know the general rules of how things works.

Anyway that's about it, feel free to continue on if you wish to continue.



RECAP

What has happened thus far?

Premise

You are currently a resident of Atlas, how you live is up to you.

Prologue: A Spark to Ignite

Atlas is one of the last surviving human cities, surviving through an apocalyptic event that killed off nearly everyone. Life is peaceful and runs efficiently, however many residents suffer extreme paranoia and fear when it comes to the idea of magic. It only was a matter of time…

Heaven’s Hand, a terrorist organization from the outlands, reveals itself to the city with a bang. Believing humanities existence to be sinful, they ironically turn their sights on the city of Atlas and begin by bombing one of the city’s AMA(Fuel) storage facilities. How these terrorists arrived are the least of Atlas's worries...

While The Sky Brigade, Atlas’s police force, would temporarily push back these terrorists the impossible would happen. Magic, a power thought to be lost forever, has begun to reignite in a few Atlas residents. While only a terrible rumor now, those who posses this weakened gift begin to fear for their life...

With the emergence of Heaven's Hand and the horrors of magic, Atlas's once peaceful lifestyle finds itself beginning to crumble away...

Character Template

[I'm debating on whether or not I wish to limit the number of characters accepted. Please place some effort when making them. Be creative!]

Name:

I can think of numerous ways people could screw this up. I faith in all of you that you can get this right.

Gender:

Can be argued against by some transsexuals, still your typical three option: Male, Female, and Spaghetti Monster (I'm completely kidding here, use common sense).

Age:

Whatever you wish, but believable. An eight year old or an eighty eight year old sounds a bit over reaching as a character, however choose whatever you can pull off.

Appearance:

Use whatever form of description you wish. I personally find a creative image more amusing, however a detailed description can trump a stock photo any day.

Magic(If applicable):

Magic works in a system of tiers. This can be argued against, but everyone starts with tier 1. Feel free to design your own powers based off of this system.

An example can be found above in the magic section, but feel free to voice any questions you might have.

If you can, please include the first couple of tiers to your power. Tier 2 should generally be your "fighting" abilities.

Personality:

How does your character react in certain situations? While what you place here is in no way their set attitude (Humanity and what not) please give a general description.

Background:

To get a better idea of your character. Be sure to include bullets current occupation, place of residence, reaction to the acquirement of magic (If applicable), etc.

Theme:

This was something fun I've discovered to be added to a character. If you wish feel free to include theme music to your character, something that describes them whether through fighting or simple presence.

***Feel free to ask any questions, voice any concerns, offer up any ideas, express interest, post up meme pictures- etc. etc.***

RWBY Interest Check

Noel said
Not really sure about the past RP idea, since really theres so little known about the world in modern times let alone the past.

Isn't that what makes things fun? Anyway still lingering a bit, might or might not join depending on how things progress.

Appocalyptic Magic Roleplay

Estylwen said
I'm intrigued too!~ I love these kinds of stories. When do you think the OOC will be up? :3

Sometime soon I hope, might not be THAT perfect, but I'm making some effort to get it up. Might be a bit vague, but hopefully you guys are up to fill in some of the blanks.

Reialgo said
Haha dis lineIn all seriousness though, I don't think magic ever needs explaining beyond "This circle conjures fire!" or "This incantation conjures lightning!" you kinda start to lose the charm if you try to actually explain how a singular spell does it's thing(unless you're type moon but nobody writes like type moon)

Pretty much sums up my thought process on this, but there will be some explanation of how my magic system came about. Adding something of a power level system as well (It's OVER 9000) But you'll see in the OOC.

RWBY Interest Check

But...ugh...that left so much room for possibility with the creation of not only new villains, but a new set of history as well. Why not depict Beacon in the past, possibly before (Or even during) Ozpin's time as a student (Because he used to be a student on an original team with Qrow, Speculated Roman, and Speculated Ruby's mothers). I mean I get it, it's your idea, I just think it's an utter shame that we have this entire universe to explore and don't act on it. Especially in the category of an Advanced RP.

I mean my original idea was that this would take place in some disclosed time during Ozpin's lifetime (As he would still be headmaster), I just would hate to mirror the shows events.